Little Jim has a new Blue Racer
50 Words. Oh, the wonders you find in little boys pockets.12 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Ray,
This is so cute -- and the pic goes perfectly with it -- were you inspired first and then went looking for the pic or vice versa? Either way, it works well. Thanks and good luck!
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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Ray,
This is so cute -- and the pic goes perfectly with it -- were you inspired first and then went looking for the pic or vice versa? Either way, it works well. Thanks and good luck!
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Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Thank you Robyn. I wrote it then matched the pic. I appreciate your good review! Melissa
Comment from Y. M. Roger
That is totally awesome!! :) :) As a mom of all mischievous little boys, this brought a wonderful and much-needed smile to my face -- such an entertaining little story in only 50 words! :) ;) Great job! :) The only thing I would add is an exclamation mark after the surprise instead of a comma -- the mark, I think, would lend more "impish" in those already envision little eyes in the reader's mind. :)
Thank you for sharing, Sugarray, and good luck in the contest!! :) :) Yvette
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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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That is totally awesome!! :) :) As a mom of all mischievous little boys, this brought a wonderful and much-needed smile to my face -- such an entertaining little story in only 50 words! :) ;) Great job! :) The only thing I would add is an exclamation mark after the surprise instead of a comma -- the mark, I think, would lend more "impish" in those already envision little eyes in the reader's mind. :)
Thank you for sharing, Sugarray, and good luck in the contest!! :) :) Yvette
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Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much Yvette. I will def add the exclamation point. I too am mom to young men and the memories of those pockets!!! Haha. Thanks again. Melissa