Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

Hey Bill, my friend this really is pushing poetic licence to the limits. I really like it.
The last line rocks. Thanks for the entertainment. Cheers Jen.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018

Thanks, Jen, for giving this a look. Bill

Comment from LeftHandedScribe

Excellent

That last line made me chuckle. You create another language with your description of the ant's world which shows great imagination. A colorful and fun piece.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018

Thanks, Shauna

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

LOL! I love the last line! This is another of your craz... err... funny poems that crack me up. Your imagination lives on another planet, I think, but that's refreshing here, where so much poetry is sad, about lost love, etc. I've stopped reading that stuff... have enough in my own life. I plan to post some poems too, but they'll be pretty silly. :)

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018

Look forward to it, Phyllis.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

How fun! :) :) Must have missed the first 9 installments although I am looking forward to meeting Zeller (and maybe learning a bit more about Hizz...?). :) I like the chosen rhyme scheme and your entertaining "bastardized" English ... really made the piece quite enjoyable - even makes the mind think "out loud" just to be sure it's pronouncing all the names/words correct within your little world, here - and that's a good thing!! :) :)

Thank you for sharing the smiles today! :) :)

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018

This has filled in the last Elephant spot for worlds. If you think it?s got potential, I?ll gin up a series.

reply by Y. M. Roger on 30-Jul-2018

I think dragonflies as either fighter planes/squadrons or actual "dragons" would be great with all of their different shapes and colors....but I'm just a crazy blonde!! :) :) Whatever you come up with will defiitely be great, and I look forward to whatever it happens to be! :) ;) Yvette

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a gun way to begin your story poems about ants, Bill. It makes readers want to return for more. The picture is supportive of your fun words. Love the names & rhymes. Thanks for sharing. Jan

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 Comment Written 30-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018

This has filled in the last Elephant spot for worlds. If you think it?s got potential, I?ll gin up a series. Thanks

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 30-Jul-2018

No, I thought it was the start of a new series on ants. Go for it.

Comment from trimple

Excellent

LMAO! Oh, Bill, you are funny.

LOve the daftness of this and that punchline.. well Bravo!

Shame you didn't t enter this in a contest, although I'm not sure what kinda contest :)

such fun

kind regards


trimple

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 Comment Written 30-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018

Thanks, T. I was ending my elephant series (elfin ant) , but now might jump off from here to an elfin one.

reply by trimple on 30-Jul-2018

Thoroughly enjoyed this :)

Looking forward to the next!