I'm having a real bad day
Things can't get much worse20 total reviews
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Oh, my... that is a really bad day. =^..^= That darn cat! :) I really did enjoy reading your repetition poem and the craziness of the day (please say this all didn't happen in a day)...I wish you great luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Oh, my... that is a really bad day. =^..^= That darn cat! :) I really did enjoy reading your repetition poem and the craziness of the day (please say this all didn't happen in a day)...I wish you great luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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So glad you enjoyed it. Many thanks.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is clearly a universal poem. All your readers can identify with your real bad day. It has such a note of tragicomedy. The reader is invited to laugh at themselves. And you had a fun time with the perfect rhyming. Great job. You have me vote.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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This is clearly a universal poem. All your readers can identify with your real bad day. It has such a note of tragicomedy. The reader is invited to laugh at themselves. And you had a fun time with the perfect rhyming. Great job. You have me vote.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much Liz. I am so pleased you liked it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a very bad day. We can all relate to those days that seem to start wrong and the one disaster after the other come with bad news and bad smells.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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A very well-written poem about a very bad day. We can all relate to those days that seem to start wrong and the one disaster after the other come with bad news and bad smells.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Many thanks Sandra
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, I'm Having a Real Bad Day, takes on the challenge of repeating the key phrase throughout and exemplifies a REAL BAD DAY to be sure.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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This poem, I'm Having a Real Bad Day, takes on the challenge of repeating the key phrase throughout and exemplifies a REAL BAD DAY to be sure.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Many thanks Bill.
Comment from donette1914
wow what a bad day and you nail it!! i feel you did a outstanding job on repetition writing entry.
It was a pleasure to read your work and this is very well penned.
donette1914 July 19 2018
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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wow what a bad day and you nail it!! i feel you did a outstanding job on repetition writing entry.
It was a pleasure to read your work and this is very well penned.
donette1914 July 19 2018
Comment Written 20-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Many thanks. I appreciate your comments
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A fun little piece expressing the frustration many of us feel when we're having ONE OF THOSE DAYS - lol!! I'm sure it was intentional, but I did want to point out that it is actually correct to say 'really bad day', and even though you wrote it with 'real', it really would work just as well with 'really' because you've written it in such a simple rhyme that's easy to follow....either way it simply rolls off the tongue! :) :) You certainly put a smile on my face today -- thank you for sharing! :) ;) Also, I had the following grammatical catches:
"have got up" -- 'have gotten up'
"would'nt switch" -- 'wouldn't switch'
"there's builders in" -- 'the builders are'
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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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A fun little piece expressing the frustration many of us feel when we're having ONE OF THOSE DAYS - lol!! I'm sure it was intentional, but I did want to point out that it is actually correct to say 'really bad day', and even though you wrote it with 'real', it really would work just as well with 'really' because you've written it in such a simple rhyme that's easy to follow....either way it simply rolls off the tongue! :) :) You certainly put a smile on my face today -- thank you for sharing! :) ;) Also, I had the following grammatical catches:
"have got up" -- 'have gotten up'
"would'nt switch" -- 'wouldn't switch'
"there's builders in" -- 'the builders are'
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Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Thanks for taking the time to point out the errors. I will correct it.
Comment from Insignificant Weed
Ah, yes, I can relate. This is a really great entry that underscores all the bad things that can happen in one day. Our only consolation is that we can look back at our day and laugh at it. I have found that it is not funny while you are experiencing the situation, but it seems such a minor event. Just a few technical errors that you might want to take a look at: "Never should have got up" - in this line you are using the present perfect tense of the verb "get" - the perfect tenses require the use of the past participle - your line should read "Never should have gotten up." In this example, the apostrophe is in the wrong place: "would'nt switch on." - it should read "wouldn't switch on." In this line: "there's builders in next door" - is a little awkward - "There are builders next door" might be a suggested change. Using "there's" means the form of the verb "to be" used is for third person singular. Since "builders" is plural, you need to use the verb form "are" with plural nouns/subjects. Please do not let my suggestions discourage you. This is just too cute and too humorous to let it go. You did a good job of following the directions and had the same line in each stanza. Each situation described was truly funny and probably have happened to many people. Thanks for sharing. Good job!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Ah, yes, I can relate. This is a really great entry that underscores all the bad things that can happen in one day. Our only consolation is that we can look back at our day and laugh at it. I have found that it is not funny while you are experiencing the situation, but it seems such a minor event. Just a few technical errors that you might want to take a look at: "Never should have got up" - in this line you are using the present perfect tense of the verb "get" - the perfect tenses require the use of the past participle - your line should read "Never should have gotten up." In this example, the apostrophe is in the wrong place: "would'nt switch on." - it should read "wouldn't switch on." In this line: "there's builders in next door" - is a little awkward - "There are builders next door" might be a suggested change. Using "there's" means the form of the verb "to be" used is for third person singular. Since "builders" is plural, you need to use the verb form "are" with plural nouns/subjects. Please do not let my suggestions discourage you. This is just too cute and too humorous to let it go. You did a good job of following the directions and had the same line in each stanza. Each situation described was truly funny and probably have happened to many people. Thanks for sharing. Good job!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for taking the time to point out the errors. I will correct it.
Comment from Raul1
Very funny! I like this poem because it is very creative. This person is having a very bad day that his cat pooped on his mat. What to do? I have no clue. Very humoristic! Nice work!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Very funny! I like this poem because it is very creative. This person is having a very bad day that his cat pooped on his mat. What to do? I have no clue. Very humoristic! Nice work!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Many thanks
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You're welcome
Comment from fm wright
I can say I really can relate to this poem. Unfortunately it seems to be a near every day occurrence. Thanks though for letting me smile and figuring that I am not alone.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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I can say I really can relate to this poem. Unfortunately it seems to be a near every day occurrence. Thanks though for letting me smile and figuring that I am not alone.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your great comments.
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You're welcome.
Comment from trimple
Hi there, Mystery writer.
Hahahaha oh, that was funny. Enjoyed the rhyme scheme too.
Good luck in the competition.
kind regards
trimple
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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Hi there, Mystery writer.
Hahahaha oh, that was funny. Enjoyed the rhyme scheme too.
Good luck in the competition.
kind regards
trimple
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Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Many thanks. Glad you liked it.