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Comment from kahpot
What an amazing picture and you have definitely found the right words to convey its message an excellent 5-7-5 poem, very well written I like the way it ends "rub each other right usually it is the opposite****kahpot
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018
What an amazing picture and you have definitely found the right words to convey its message an excellent 5-7-5 poem, very well written I like the way it ends "rub each other right usually it is the opposite****kahpot
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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018
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Thanks, kahpot
Comment from SarahPenn1
Hello!
Haha! A light and humorous piece
Great use of alliteration in the first and second lines
I like the last line and the double r's
Good luck with the contest!
-S
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018
Hello!
Haha! A light and humorous piece
Great use of alliteration in the first and second lines
I like the last line and the double r's
Good luck with the contest!
-S
Comment Written 10-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Mad
Comment from pbomar1115
It's amazing how species of a different animal get along without speaking the same language. When I first saw this kind of smooching and told animal get alone only with their own, I wondered. I still do today.
Phillip
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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018
It's amazing how species of a different animal get along without speaking the same language. When I first saw this kind of smooching and told animal get alone only with their own, I wondered. I still do today.
Phillip
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Comment Written 10-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Phillip.
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You're welcome, Bill.
Phillip
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Excellent work. I love the personality of this poem. Reinforced by the great picture. This is such a feel good poem. Nice when words make the world a better place. Awesome photo. Hugh
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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018
Excellent work. I love the personality of this poem. Reinforced by the great picture. This is such a feel good poem. Nice when words make the world a better place. Awesome photo. Hugh
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Thanks, Hugh