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Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Bill, you write the funniest poems and this one is no exception. I also learned a new word, so thanks for that. I did get laugh too, which is always wonderful.
he met with gerbicidal rage,
my wife, whose estimation gage
saw him as just a monster mouse. hahaahaha
I noticed no errors, and this poem should have wide appeal, and thank you for sharing it, Ana.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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Hello Bill, you write the funniest poems and this one is no exception. I also learned a new word, so thanks for that. I did get laugh too, which is always wonderful.
he met with gerbicidal rage,
my wife, whose estimation gage
saw him as just a monster mouse. hahaahaha
I noticed no errors, and this poem should have wide appeal, and thank you for sharing it, Ana.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Ana, for the positive review. Bill
Comment from meeshu
this is great Bill I remember way back when, my mother allowed hamsters but no gerbals. she had issues with the tail, too mouselike. thanks for a very enjoyable read................meeshu
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this is great Bill I remember way back when, my mother allowed hamsters but no gerbals. she had issues with the tail, too mouselike. thanks for a very enjoyable read................meeshu
Comment Written 08-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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Thanks, meeshu, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Van
Excellent submission for the contest. Not only does it fit the confines of the story, it scans nicely leaving the reader with a pleasant experience. The photo compliments the piece perfectly. Well done.
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Excellent submission for the contest. Not only does it fit the confines of the story, it scans nicely leaving the reader with a pleasant experience. The photo compliments the piece perfectly. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Van
Comment from D. K. Mamula
Cute way to tell this little story! Poor little guy, he was probably scared, too! :) The story flowed well and you've made good rhyming choices. Well done! Thanks for making me laugh, I needed that! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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Cute way to tell this little story! Poor little guy, he was probably scared, too! :) The story flowed well and you've made good rhyming choices. Well done! Thanks for making me laugh, I needed that! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2018
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Thanks, DK
Comment from lyenochka
Oh dear! I think with such a reaction, the couple should get a non-rodent pet! Fun storytelling in poem form. It takes quite an exaggeration to see a "boar" in a little gerbil!
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Oh dear! I think with such a reaction, the couple should get a non-rodent pet! Fun storytelling in poem form. It takes quite an exaggeration to see a "boar" in a little gerbil!
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2018
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My wife and mice are fire and ice.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
When my daughter was small, her mother bought her a gerbil. Oh, happy day. The varmint got loose and hid in every crevasse. Then it started chewing everything it could find. It took a couple of weeks, but finally, I caught it. I released it in the field beside the house. It only took my daughter a couple of hours to catch it, bring it back into the house and release it.
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When my daughter was small, her mother bought her a gerbil. Oh, happy day. The varmint got loose and hid in every crevasse. Then it started chewing everything it could find. It took a couple of weeks, but finally, I caught it. I released it in the field beside the house. It only took my daughter a couple of hours to catch it, bring it back into the house and release it.
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2018
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If only kids could find things you want them to as easily.