Comment from meeshu

Excellent

I love your story W.J. I am a sucker for anything with fairies or elves. although I never got into Tolkien, weird. the dialogue is what stands out in your writing, very personal and nicely paced.......great write.......meeshu

 Comment Written 19-May-2018

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reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Thank you for the encouraging comments especially about the dialogue , meeshu. Long live the fairies and elves.

Comment from apky

Excellent

I haven't read from this story for some time now. It is a story I liked and I only just received this chapter in my inbox. I'll have to refresh my memories on Piper, Redd-Leif, Melodica and all the other lovely citizens of the story again.

This chapter is another excellent one and moves at a fast pace. Although I've missed chapters, I still enjoyed this and found it very entertaining. Slowly, I'll get the hang of the characters in the story. No spags that I could detect. The plot continued to race and is sprinkled with a variety of intriguing situations.

 Comment Written 19-May-2018

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reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Hi apky,

Thank you for stopping in to read and review. Yeah, it's been a while since I posted. I am hoping to get back to posting regularly here soon.
Debi

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

I remember this story! I dropped off Fanstory for awhile so I've missed a lot of it, but I found this chapter to be very enjoyable. The characters are interesting and engaging and the storyline is fascinating. I would have adored this as a teenager when I was so into elves and the "fae". If wishing could produce something I would have seen elves in the forests in Montana (instead of, or maybe in addition to, bears, lol).
Carol

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 Comment Written 19-May-2018

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reply by the author on 19-May-2018

Hi Carol,
Thank you for the excellent review. Since I am writing this for teenagers your response is music to my ears. I guess I just haven't outgrown the fairie tales yet. Who knows, there may be some fairies hanging out with those bears in Montana if you look close enough.
Debi

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi debi. Your writing is always clear and interesting as you progress your story. Scenes are well described with excellent word choices and interaction between the characters. Marilyn

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 Comment Written 19-May-2018

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reply by the author on 19-May-2018

Hi Marilyn,
Thank you for the encouraging comments about the interaction between characters. I appreciate you following the story. Thank you!
Debi