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Comment from Teri7
lol lol I must say you do very well with writing these short stories about flies. This made me giggle, but had a twinge of police work in it too! Very cute words and cute imagery with the words. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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lol lol I must say you do very well with writing these short stories about flies. This made me giggle, but had a twinge of police work in it too! Very cute words and cute imagery with the words. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from judsmith
OK, this is about the most unusual short story I think I have ever read. Loved your names for the characters but even when I got to the "dog poop" comment, I was still not certain these were flies and a lizard. Having Inspector Camille blend in with her surroundings was subtle and brilliant. You captured and painted a believable picture of a moment in the life of a flock of insects and their unknowing natural predator. They really aren't that smart, are they? I mean, Sheesh!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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OK, this is about the most unusual short story I think I have ever read. Loved your names for the characters but even when I got to the "dog poop" comment, I was still not certain these were flies and a lizard. Having Inspector Camille blend in with her surroundings was subtle and brilliant. You captured and painted a believable picture of a moment in the life of a flock of insects and their unknowing natural predator. They really aren't that smart, are they? I mean, Sheesh!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Thank you, Jud, for giving the story a look and for the positive review. Bill
Comment from Swampfox1
IT is somewhat humorous, I like the play on the inspector's name. The poem is listed as general fiction and does not state if it is directed towards children or not. It is well written. Not my favorite genre of poem as to write Daily Lives of Flies and whys. It does distract from everyday life. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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IT is somewhat humorous, I like the play on the inspector's name. The poem is listed as general fiction and does not state if it is directed towards children or not. It is well written. Not my favorite genre of poem as to write Daily Lives of Flies and whys. It does distract from everyday life. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Listed as a short story. If it were for children I?d likely not kill anything. Thanks for giving it a look.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, this is a fun write Bill, so inventive and I really enjoyed it! Camille Leon indeed, love the name and your story! I hate flies and as for naming them, well you gave them some personality here, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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He he he, this is a fun write Bill, so inventive and I really enjoyed it! Camille Leon indeed, love the name and your story! I hate flies and as for naming them, well you gave them some personality here, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Dolly. Not much mourning over fly deaths.