Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

When I saw the explanatory line I expected these to linked by a word or syllable, but your linking by theme is more subtle in this sequence of of springtime cinquains. I love the oxymoron in the penultimate line that makes for a strong finish.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018

Well, yes, they are linked by idea, not by a word or syllable. But I like the idea of repeating a word or phrase from one to the next. Anupam (The Death) has done a poem that uses repeating phrases that is very good.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I have falling be hind again You have captured my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you for this lovely poem
Thank you for sharing
Cookie

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018

Thank you for reading. Aren't we all behind most of the time? :)
Carol

reply by misscookie on 23-Apr-2018

You're very welcome the word behind is the name of F/s game.
Cookie

Comment from RGstar

Exceptional

Apart from Azure, dear Ciliverde, if only for the fact an often over-used wordt, I really liked this short piece. Beautifully serene and giving. At one with its theme, at one with harmony.
Beautiful.
My best wishes.
RG

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018

Azure, yes I can see what you mean. Another word for blue with two syllables, hmmm...

Thanks for the review and comments, and all the stars too :)
Carol

reply by RGstar on 23-Apr-2018

Turquoise is beautiful...gets away from the stigma...even 'cyan' , but I guess most would recognize turquoise

Comment from Harry Smith

Excellent

Beautiful painting that really complimented the poems. The poems each has lots and lots of imagery and the reader really enjoyed the read.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018

Thanks so much, Harry - I appreciate your words about the imagery :)
Carol

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

Such a beautiful piece of imagery. love the green you've used for the background and the fun shape of your poem... fun read... very pretty. yours, diana

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018

Thanks so much! I love the color green - that and blue are my favorites :)
Carol

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

this is a great example cinquain poetry and what can be done with it in the proper hands. I like the form and linking them, one stanza always seems to leave so much unsaid........meeshu

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018

It's hard to say all there is to say in just one cinquain...I have noticed that myself, lol. Thank you for the comments :))
Carol

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

These are very beautiful linked cinquain poems you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery with the art work. I enjoyed reading and reviewing them. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-May-2018

Thanks so much and sorry for the late reply! :))
Carol

Comment from Cindy McIntyre

Excellent

What a joy to read. Such great descriptive words and it flowed so effortlessly! My favorite stanza: Azure light in limpid sky; soul-bursting music of throated thrush recalls the dawn of day.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-May-2018

Thank you so much, someone said azure was an overused word, I might try to think of a different one. I appreciate your review :))
Carol

Comment from apky

Excellent

I liked the last stanza very much, which is not to day that the rest of your poem wasn't excellent as well. It was. The last lines remind us that we should recognize that we are just a small part of the larger picture and should behave accordingly.

All things
are one, I know,
and so I am content -
a tiny piece of vastness in
this light.

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 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-May-2018

Yes! We are a small part of the whole picture - we don't understand it all and don't need to - but we can still marvel at it :))
Carol

Comment from rspoet

Exceptional

Hello Carol,
This is truly an exceptional series of cinquains
some read like splendid haiku with great satori lines.
The imagery is always what I look for first
and no one does it better.
A tiny piece with a large heart and talent to match.
Spring in the meadow, in the air and all down the page
Beautifully done, love the art work, too
Robert

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-May-2018

Thank you, Robert, and I apologize for the late reply. I was out of town for a week with very limited wifi - in Montana, which was fabulous. I appreciate your kind comments very much :))
Carol