Noteworthy
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Comment from Swampfox1
There is definitely some imagery in here. I think you try too hard on metaphors for it to flow smoothly. Three crossed hell on earth for Elysian fields (heaven), but which three are they and where do they come from and why. A mythical tribal chief of the Spanish is actually the God of Israel, according the imagery you write, but it is imagery without purpose or definition to the mind.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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There is definitely some imagery in here. I think you try too hard on metaphors for it to flow smoothly. Three crossed hell on earth for Elysian fields (heaven), but which three are they and where do they come from and why. A mythical tribal chief of the Spanish is actually the God of Israel, according the imagery you write, but it is imagery without purpose or definition to the mind.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Hello...-smile-
the three are created, Forever..as in God..and trust impenetrable
El Dorado's meaning has changed over the years in to a city of gold
it signifies a life's search to reason what is worth. Solomon said the same basically only with much more eloquence.
I'm only michael.
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Glad to meet you Michael, great poem, keep writing
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you too...-smile-
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about a journey, noteworthy as expressed in a free flow of thoughts, supernatural feeling, soul purpose proves no greater lover exists; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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This speaks about a journey, noteworthy as expressed in a free flow of thoughts, supernatural feeling, soul purpose proves no greater lover exists; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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yes indeed...isnt every. thank you so much for enjoying...as Ive been reminded love hurts...I should encourage relishing the moments in between. I'm michael
Comment from MissMerri
It is true... there is no greater love than this, and those who come in humility and sorrow to the cross on the hill, do find happiness, because no matter what pain life may deal, the soul can still know the peace that passes understanding, and be satisfied. This poem is deeply spiritual and says so much so beautifully. I am deeply moved. Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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It is true... there is no greater love than this, and those who come in humility and sorrow to the cross on the hill, do find happiness, because no matter what pain life may deal, the soul can still know the peace that passes understanding, and be satisfied. This poem is deeply spiritual and says so much so beautifully. I am deeply moved. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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I believe His Word...and what I read is not a happy go lucky message.
but a journey of hills and valleys , of triumph and consequence , both woeful and joyful.
of warning and example, even evidenced. from kings to laymen, every Judas realizing the worth of mere silver compared to the God he already has. yes...the peace comes from knowing He is with us and has been through the whole process...if the heart is honest it has confidence, no matter its outerwear. love you Michael
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Michael, I see in you a loving heart, wise in ways that astonish me sometimes. I know you know the Master, and I'm equally sure He will guide your steps.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, a Metallica fan. Nice!! I think this is a well written and thought provoking poem. I am not sure what it is about but you have some lovely poetic moments with alliteration and I appreciated that. I wondered whether it was about life after death because of your reference to Elysian fields.
I noticed no errors and thanks for sharing your story, Ana.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Hello, a Metallica fan. Nice!! I think this is a well written and thought provoking poem. I am not sure what it is about but you have some lovely poetic moments with alliteration and I appreciated that. I wondered whether it was about life after death because of your reference to Elysian fields.
I noticed no errors and thanks for sharing your story, Ana.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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its about a Love so certain it allows the exploration of lesser. -smile-..hello Ana. yes Ive written for this song by it's owners also...this version worked best here I thought. happy you enjoyed it. I'm Michael
Comment from Harry Smith
I like the picture selections for this poem that is very well written with lots and lots of imagery. The reader really enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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I like the picture selections for this poem that is very well written with lots and lots of imagery. The reader really enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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why thank you Harry.
it not only takes ah lot's and lot's of imagery to create a Luigi's pizza
but also to experience the comparison of lesser American cuisine...burp...pass the mozzarella...Im Michael
Comment from Ricky1024
This was deep and well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks for this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.
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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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This was deep and well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks for this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.
PS I left you a message on your profile!
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Hey Rick...-smile- how've you been...?
ah thanks Man...just had some time to jot some thoughts. glad you enjoyed, Michael
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Been great Michael.
Good to hear from you!
Doc Rick
Comment from Sherman541
Love the visual and the song is one of my favorites. Very compelling and intriguing. The words present a picture that is serene, clam and divine. One that is ever lasting providing you are worthy of. I hope I interpreted this, to be what you meant. Sherman541
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Love the visual and the song is one of my favorites. Very compelling and intriguing. The words present a picture that is serene, clam and divine. One that is ever lasting providing you are worthy of. I hope I interpreted this, to be what you meant. Sherman541
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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ah just getting old...its a crisis. -smile-
yea I liked this version of the song...the video reflected and prompted my thought about.
as its played inside out through every season. so too are the days of our lives...searching for satisfied or its equivalent
every life plays out its own Solomon's. k sarah....-smile-...glad you liked it. i'm Michael
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I did like it and you must use an old picture of you, as you do not look very old to me. I however, am getting there much faster than I would like. :) I understand about the place we would hope to be. smiling and waving back :) Michael
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yes that was taken right around my marriage to Mrs.hurt you. I still look the same except my hair turned gold and Clint Eastwood possessed my mirror with grand canyon good looks. other than that I'm still Michael
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See then you are not so old as you think. I look in the mirror that has been taken over by an old lady she will not allow me to look at myself, I only see her :) lol
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it takes a long time to find the right mirror....trust me...have you tried frosted glass it makes me happy...-smile-
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LOL not yet but I will think about very seriously. Most people do not think of me as being, as old as I am, but I am a grandmother of 8:)
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then youre beautiful...with proof. -smile-
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we are all beautiful so yes SMILE ;)
