Comment from Ginnygray

Excellent

What a vivid and creative imagination! I really enjoyed the humor and contrast (apple not at all but a pear, not bitten but pared). I like stanza three out of the five for it was there that I began chuckling. By the time I got to the pineapple and the electric eel, I was in stitches. This was another enjoyable read, Bill.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018

Thanks, Ginny

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Oh see? Now it is gory...but in a comedic sort of slap stick way.


I had to chuckle...and that beats gagging any day!

Sufficiently warped to be gigglish.


But not squeamish.

Karenina



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 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018

Thanks, Karenina

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Hmmm. I guess just like in the game of telephone, the story details change immensely from the first person to the last and then it changes exponentially over the internet. Fun poem!

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 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018

Thanks, lyenochka.