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Tender Persistence

Clearing away the entanglements from our heart

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Comment from meeshu
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a wonderful prayer and perfect for the emotion contest. each stanza could be a stand alone prayer. great metaphor with weeds and garden (heart).
good luck to you.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
    Thank you for your lovely review. I'm glad you appreciated it so much.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
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Yes we often need the Lord to wrench things from us as we hold on with both hands. We are so foolish as what is in His hand is so much better. We allow the shade to come in and take away the Son. Really well done. I hope you do well in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
    Thank you for your inspired review. Thank you for expanding on the topic also. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
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Hi, this is a bit different for the 'emotions' competition, and I liked the sentiment of your poem, and believe, like you, that we get used to things, and accept situations that strangle our hearts, as you so nicely put it.

I noticed no errors and best of luck with this entry, Ana.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
    Hi Ana, you will notice I do most everything a little differently. I'm glad you liked it, thank you.
Comment from joycetreasures
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Nice poem. The flow was well written. Great title that fit your poem. I love your imagery. The rhyme was also well suited for your poem. I like how you started your poem with being grateful with the Lord giving your friends. The ending was so touching that one day, you may behold the son. Great message and poem. Thanks

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
    Thank you for your inspiring review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Sherman541
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Emotions are like bouncing balls, they are like vines that strangle, and tears that run wild. It is hard to understand, if you are not an emotional person, what a roller coaster ride emotions can. I am curious did you mean "
That I may
Once
Again
Behold
The Son: or Sun ?

Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
    The Son...because I get preoccupied with my own stuff that I forget to turn to God long after I am really enmeshed.
    Thank you for affirming one of my intents, to invite reader to think beyond.
reply by Sherman541 on 13-Apr-2018
    I thought you might mean Son, but I did want to clarify. You are most welcome - Blessing to you Sherman
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This speaks about an emotion of tenderness from God on friends God sent and how God's tender persistence helps removing darkness from heart in course of living; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
    Thank you for your inspired review. I'm glad you appreciated it
Comment from Harry Smith
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I really like the picture selection that really complimented the poem that has lots and lots of imagery. The reader really enjoyed the read.

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 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
    Thank you for your spirited review. I'm glad you like the picture too.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the Emotions writing prompt.
Your story is sincere and well told
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon


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 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
    Thank you for your comprehensive review.