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Comment from judiverse
A sonnet to snails! They will be so pleased, especially since you wrote in perfect form. Great iambic pentameter, and your rhyme is well done, not forced. Great last couplet. You might consider using one instead of some. This is great, written in such a mock-heroic tone. I enjoyed the point you make about being able to write the sonnet to snails despite sickness and sleep deprivation. judi
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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A sonnet to snails! They will be so pleased, especially since you wrote in perfect form. Great iambic pentameter, and your rhyme is well done, not forced. Great last couplet. You might consider using one instead of some. This is great, written in such a mock-heroic tone. I enjoyed the point you make about being able to write the sonnet to snails despite sickness and sleep deprivation. judi
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Judi
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You're very welcome. A fun sonnet. judi
Comment from nomi338
No doubt it, it is time for beddy bye. I think that you may have stayed awake just a tad too long. Have a good nap Bill. Whatever you do, do not dream of snails and their slimy trails. Zzzzzzz.
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No doubt it, it is time for beddy bye. I think that you may have stayed awake just a tad too long. Have a good nap Bill. Whatever you do, do not dream of snails and their slimy trails. Zzzzzzz.
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
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Thanks, nomi
Comment from frogbook
Impressive form for this little slow moving creature-hope they appreciate you. I doubt they get many tributes as well done as this one!
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Impressive form for this little slow moving creature-hope they appreciate you. I doubt they get many tributes as well done as this one!
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Thank you, FB, for the great review. Bill