GULBRANDR- God's Sword
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Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The character outlay comprises Joshua, a Wahaland trained warrior, Augdom, Brock, Day,Jatte, Valdig, Jsfari, Agapos and other Generals of they Nubian Army.
The setting spans from the war room to the surrounding mountainous theatre of war used by the Nubians as training ground for warriors, where even females like Fay,Augdom's daughter excelled.
The scenario is the fulfilment of Valdig's vision of securing a chosen warrior to overcome the demonic and ferocious onslaught of the Blue Horde, their lifelong antagonists.
Augdom's grandfather had taken the pains to draw the face of the chosen warrior which turns out to be Joshua.
Accoutred as Augdom was in fulfilling his father's vision, he immediately assigns Jatte the task of training Joshua to become the team leader his grandfather, Valdig foresaw him to be.
The work constitutes a significant commentary that attests to a man's fixation in fulfilling the vision of his grandfather.
Outstanding work! Keep the flag flying!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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The character outlay comprises Joshua, a Wahaland trained warrior, Augdom, Brock, Day,Jatte, Valdig, Jsfari, Agapos and other Generals of they Nubian Army.
The setting spans from the war room to the surrounding mountainous theatre of war used by the Nubians as training ground for warriors, where even females like Fay,Augdom's daughter excelled.
The scenario is the fulfilment of Valdig's vision of securing a chosen warrior to overcome the demonic and ferocious onslaught of the Blue Horde, their lifelong antagonists.
Augdom's grandfather had taken the pains to draw the face of the chosen warrior which turns out to be Joshua.
Accoutred as Augdom was in fulfilling his father's vision, he immediately assigns Jatte the task of training Joshua to become the team leader his grandfather, Valdig foresaw him to be.
The work constitutes a significant commentary that attests to a man's fixation in fulfilling the vision of his grandfather.
Outstanding work! Keep the flag flying!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for the 6 stars. Means so much. Glad you like it. Rox
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Remain Blessed!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Fantastic! I'm loving this story, Rox. Will Joshua's mum join them? I hope so. Now the training has begun, and he is really up for it. Can't wait to read the next part. When I was in Egypt a few years ago, I met several Nubian's, and they were as black as black could be. Beautiful people, and so friendly. I've never met a light-skinned Nubian, but I expect there are some as they 'mate' with light skinned people. Great story-telling, my friend. Big hugs. :) Sandra.
Some minor nits to look at. :))
Two long table(s) with benches
Joshua is to le(a)d takes him by dragon to
over whelmed = overwhelmed
Augdon order(ed) food
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Fantastic! I'm loving this story, Rox. Will Joshua's mum join them? I hope so. Now the training has begun, and he is really up for it. Can't wait to read the next part. When I was in Egypt a few years ago, I met several Nubian's, and they were as black as black could be. Beautiful people, and so friendly. I've never met a light-skinned Nubian, but I expect there are some as they 'mate' with light skinned people. Great story-telling, my friend. Big hugs. :) Sandra.
Some minor nits to look at. :))
Two long table(s) with benches
Joshua is to le(a)d takes him by dragon to
over whelmed = overwhelmed
Augdon order(ed) food
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Yes, Josh's mom will join him soon, well after about 3 more chapters. =} Thank you so much for the 6 stars. I just got a 3star review with like 3 pages of errors I made. =} It is amazing how people see things so differently. All his reviews have been like this, super long, but the 3 stars were the lowest he has given me. How does he have time to write all that? and why would you want to. =} I guess he likes it. I reviewed his stuff hoping to find something awful, but of course it 's like perfect. =P I did find a few errors on the last one so makes me wonder if the 3 stars are him getting back at me. =} I hope not. Thank you again dear friend. Roxanna
Comment from royowen
It's always good to write these excerpts of legendary armies, of brave men with noble causes, of fierce opponents, who both outnumber you, with fierce beasts. But that's what makes a great take. Unbeatable odds, but we know who triumphs. Well done Rox an excellent plot, and great characters, noble and worthy, well done, good yarning, blessings, Roy
Typo : Augdon order(ed) food and drink...2: with violet eye(s) 3: a huge weight of responsibility settle(d) upon him 4: (Aurgon) said this as (the) stood to his feet. Augdon? He?
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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It's always good to write these excerpts of legendary armies, of brave men with noble causes, of fierce opponents, who both outnumber you, with fierce beasts. But that's what makes a great take. Unbeatable odds, but we know who triumphs. Well done Rox an excellent plot, and great characters, noble and worthy, well done, good yarning, blessings, Roy
Typo : Augdon order(ed) food and drink...2: with violet eye(s) 3: a huge weight of responsibility settle(d) upon him 4: (Aurgon) said this as (the) stood to his feet. Augdon? He?
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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I got 3 pages of errors from one reviewer. Amazing how he sees them all every stink'in time! =} Thank you so much for the great review, very encouraging. Have a great day. Rox
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Well done