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Comment from lyenochka
Ugh! He didn't even feed it corn and cook it in garlic and olive oil first? Hope he survived. For all we know, the snail could survive that, too. Great story told in perfect monorhyme quatrains.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Ugh! He didn't even feed it corn and cook it in garlic and olive oil first? Hope he survived. For all we know, the snail could survive that, too. Great story told in perfect monorhyme quatrains.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Thanks, lyenochka.
Comment from Gloria ....
Haaaaaaa, you got me right out on the first line. A snail sailed around the brim. That is a perfectly poetic description of what they do.
HA, I didn't really expect Jungle Jim to eat it, after all that work sailing the brim. But hey, free protein.
A most fun poem, Bill. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Haaaaaaa, you got me right out on the first line. A snail sailed around the brim. That is a perfectly poetic description of what they do.
HA, I didn't really expect Jungle Jim to eat it, after all that work sailing the brim. But hey, free protein.
A most fun poem, Bill. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Wow! This is astounding! Thanks, Gloria.
Comment from oliver818
Wow. Jungle Jim definitely lives up to his name, haha. Nice poem, I like the imagery you use, and the description of the snail as cute as a pup is very cool. I find snails cute too actually, although I wouldn't eat one. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Wow. Jungle Jim definitely lives up to his name, haha. Nice poem, I like the imagery you use, and the description of the snail as cute as a pup is very cool. I find snails cute too actually, although I wouldn't eat one. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Oliver
Comment from damommy
Yikes! Tea and snails. Not my idea of a snack. lol
Cute poem with a fun beat to it. Good rhyming.
It seems to me Jungle Jim will eat anything. I know what happened to my missing dirty socks now. 8-)
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Yikes! Tea and snails. Not my idea of a snack. lol
Cute poem with a fun beat to it. Good rhyming.
It seems to me Jungle Jim will eat anything. I know what happened to my missing dirty socks now. 8-)
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Yeww! Ya think? What's in that tea?
Comment from Marisela Contona
I like this it flows nice. You have good word choses. Keep writing, you have great skill. I look forward to reading more of your work
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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I like this it flows nice. You have good word choses. Keep writing, you have great skill. I look forward to reading more of your work
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Marisela
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks sharing of a peculiar experience of seeing a snail sailed around the brim of a cup; innocent snail was taken off and poet enjoyed a cup of tea swallowing; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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This speaks sharing of a peculiar experience of seeing a snail sailed around the brim of a cup; innocent snail was taken off and poet enjoyed a cup of tea swallowing; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Thanks, ALD
Comment from Pamusart
This is a fine poem. It made me think of a cup I once had. It had a snail at the bottom of the cup. It could not be seen under coffee or tea. I used to get a kick out of giving it and it's coffee to visiting colleagues. So funny when they first see the snail. They get freaked out and then relieved when they know it is not real. Thank you for sharing
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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This is a fine poem. It made me think of a cup I once had. It had a snail at the bottom of the cup. It could not be seen under coffee or tea. I used to get a kick out of giving it and it's coffee to visiting colleagues. So funny when they first see the snail. They get freaked out and then relieved when they know it is not real. Thank you for sharing
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Pamusart, for giving this a look. Nice cup.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Bill,
I see you have started a series on snails. You certainly love insects and creepy crawly.
I love your rhymes, especially the last two stanza. Any child or adult can enjoy this poem.
Great job as usual.
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Bill,
I see you have started a series on snails. You certainly love insects and creepy crawly.
I love your rhymes, especially the last two stanza. Any child or adult can enjoy this poem.
Great job as usual.
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Thanks, PF