Comment from Jan Anderegg

Excellent

I think you and your muse have done a wonderful job! I won't pretend to understand whether or not the Kyrielle is correct because I just don't comprehend poetry styles that well. :-)
This is lovely!
All the best,
Jan

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

hi Janilou Thanks for your review and comments I think it meets requirement and often a contest requirement is under the authors notes explaining the rules but a Kryielle is made up of 4 or more Stanzas with a rhyme of choice and one line repeating throuout Usually the last line of the first stanza hence mine is
I hope I?ve penned the perfect line.
I hope that helps Cheers

Comment from RodG

Excellent

Ah, yes, which of us has not pursued the perfect line? I enjoyed this Kyrielle because it's written tongue-in-cheek. I am not sure "rhyme" and "line" really rhyme, but I'm not a looking for perfection even if the Speaker is. Rod

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018

Hi Rod yes with tongue in cheek perhaps a bit cheeky to use the Kryielle requirements to form my poem and have used a Near rhyme please forgive me LOL Thanks for your review I appreciate your time Cheers

Comment from Roxanna Andrews

Excellent

I think you may have penned the perfect line! Great job, perfect rhyme and the meter is good. Meters are my eminence. I never feel I get it right. I love the picture too. It moves and everything. I don't know how to do those. I'm about as techie as dirt. Well done. Roxanna

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 Comment Written 30-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018

Hi Roxanna Thnak you for your review and I count syllables on my fingers when I want the right meter it usually works and I love this image was pleased to have a lend fot this one Cheers

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written poem for the Write a Kyrielle prompt. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery from the art work! Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri

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 Comment Written 30-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018

Hi teri Thanks for your lovely review I wrote this in about 15 minutes once I found the writing promt and thought I would give it a go and then found this great image so I appreciate your comments and blessings back Cheers