Skippin' the Obits
Knock on the door contest.19 total reviews
Comment from Henry King
This is a humorous story of a man afraid of death knocking on the door, in what ever guise. It could be the Reaper with his scythe or an old friend in a worm dripping suit, who knows. Answer the door and find out, or you could wake up as the narrator did in this well articulated tale.
I am way past my actuarial age, I stopped worrying about death. I have friends and relatives who will tell me if I or an acquaintance is dead.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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This is a humorous story of a man afraid of death knocking on the door, in what ever guise. It could be the Reaper with his scythe or an old friend in a worm dripping suit, who knows. Answer the door and find out, or you could wake up as the narrator did in this well articulated tale.
I am way past my actuarial age, I stopped worrying about death. I have friends and relatives who will tell me if I or an acquaintance is dead.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Ha-thanks much for this enjoyable and kind review.
Comment from w.j.debi
Those muddy footprints sure are curious. Greet narrative voice as your POV character rambles on in a rather charming manner about newspapers, dying and visiting ghosts of dead friends.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Those muddy footprints sure are curious. Greet narrative voice as your POV character rambles on in a rather charming manner about newspapers, dying and visiting ghosts of dead friends.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much for your lovely review.
Comment from Fabiha_N
This is a well-written story! Every part of the story is well-developed from beginning to end. I like the creepy way you ended it. The prompt was that "there was a knock on the door", and I think you incorporated that really well into your story. Great work :)
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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This is a well-written story! Every part of the story is well-developed from beginning to end. I like the creepy way you ended it. The prompt was that "there was a knock on the door", and I think you incorporated that really well into your story. Great work :)
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much. Appreciate your review.
Comment from Wetbelly01
Quite an unusual piece you have here... I Like It!
This story fits this prompt real well, as far as I see...
Didn't come across any problems...
Well Done, as far as I'm concerned!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Quite an unusual piece you have here... I Like It!
This story fits this prompt real well, as far as I see...
Didn't come across any problems...
Well Done, as far as I'm concerned!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Thanks much. I have done this contest in the past so had to think of a weird one-haha.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Sentence writing prompt.
You've done a good job including the sentence in your story. Your dream of Sam is clear, and a little scary.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Sentence writing prompt.
You've done a good job including the sentence in your story. Your dream of Sam is clear, and a little scary.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 21-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Thanks much-appreciate your reading and reviewing this piece.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
Oh my goodness! I loved every word of your story. The dialogue was real, and the sentences flowed together. It was like I was right with the narrator and he was talking to me. And of course, the ending...well, damn...if I see muddy footprints I will probably be thinking Old Sam paid me a visit, too! Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Hello!
Oh my goodness! I loved every word of your story. The dialogue was real, and the sentences flowed together. It was like I was right with the narrator and he was talking to me. And of course, the ending...well, damn...if I see muddy footprints I will probably be thinking Old Sam paid me a visit, too! Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 21-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Haha. Thanks much for your enjoyable and kind review-so pleased that you liked it.
Comment from Swampfox1
Great ending. Good luck in the contest. I like it, it is well written, and it is certainly something new and that a person doesn't read very often. I find the story unique in a way but there is a little something missing and I don't know exactly what. Your writing reminds me a little of Mark Twain, just a little.
Great job. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Great ending. Good luck in the contest. I like it, it is well written, and it is certainly something new and that a person doesn't read very often. I find the story unique in a way but there is a little something missing and I don't know exactly what. Your writing reminds me a little of Mark Twain, just a little.
Great job. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Thanks much, If you think of that missing factor let me know.
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Will do. Thanks
Comment from Wabigoon
Enjoyed this though it's a bit of cliched, sort of. Not sure what other word to use, but still fun, a bit wicked. I doubt it's the liquor responsible for the dream, either.
Noticed this:
miss folk(')s funerals, I think...in would be "folks'" plural?
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Enjoyed this though it's a bit of cliched, sort of. Not sure what other word to use, but still fun, a bit wicked. I doubt it's the liquor responsible for the dream, either.
Noticed this:
miss folk(')s funerals, I think...in would be "folks'" plural?
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 21-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Great correction-thanks much for that and the wonderful rating. Much appreciated.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, your writing about Sam is very descriptive, and vivid, I could imagine him standing there looking pretty gross. I notice this is for the competition, so best of luck with this entry, which I would recommend as an original and vivid read, Ana.
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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Hello, your writing about Sam is very descriptive, and vivid, I could imagine him standing there looking pretty gross. I notice this is for the competition, so best of luck with this entry, which I would recommend as an original and vivid read, Ana.
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much for your thoughtful review and good wishes.