Sarcophagus
Horrible consequences often result19 total reviews
Comment from emptypage
Sad, sad piece, Brett. I don't recall any very short fiction from you before. It's good, but you about killed me with the photo.
I hope this, if true, is far in the past, and healed.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Sad, sad piece, Brett. I don't recall any very short fiction from you before. It's good, but you about killed me with the photo.
I hope this, if true, is far in the past, and healed.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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I have written several short fictional pieces before. One of my preferred genres. Glad you enjoyed this one. And, no, it is not true. People on their cellphones while driving are a major nuisance and what I wanted to capture was the possible result of such an act.
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
ANYONE TO MAKE ME CRY AS I SEE THE PICTURE
AND READ THE WORDS ALWAYS GETS A SIX FROM ME
GREAT WORK MY FRIEND
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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ANYONE TO MAKE ME CRY AS I SEE THE PICTURE
AND READ THE WORDS ALWAYS GETS A SIX FROM ME
GREAT WORK MY FRIEND
Comment Written 17-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this piece. One of the biggest annoyances for me while traveling on the road are those drivers who insist on being on their cellphones while driving. I wanted to capture the possible result of that act. Appreciate the six-stars.
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I totally agree with you it was an amazing write my friend
Comment from Rasmine
Hello,
Good poem, Brett. Yeah, it is stupid. My bus was hit once by a woman texting. She texted during rush hour! I mean, duh! No one was hurt, but it could have been a lot worse if she had hit a smaller car.
Hey, take care,
Nome
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Hello,
Good poem, Brett. Yeah, it is stupid. My bus was hit once by a woman texting. She texted during rush hour! I mean, duh! No one was hurt, but it could have been a lot worse if she had hit a smaller car.
Hey, take care,
Nome
Comment Written 17-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Drivers constantly on their phones while driving are a huge annoyance and I attempted to capture the possible result of such an act. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Wetbelly01
Wow!... There sure is a LOT said in these few words!
Great entry for this contest!...
Didn't come across any problems along the way...
My compliments on this powerful piece!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Wow!... There sure is a LOT said in these few words!
Great entry for this contest!...
Didn't come across any problems along the way...
My compliments on this powerful piece!
Comment Written 17-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this piece. Drivers on their cellphones while behind the wheel of a car are such a huge distraction. Appreciate your comments and support.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written seventy-five word flash fiction. It is one of the most dangerous things we can do. When we about to drive a car the phone must be put off or at least on silent. Another option is hands free when we have to drive a lot.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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A very well-written seventy-five word flash fiction. It is one of the most dangerous things we can do. When we about to drive a car the phone must be put off or at least on silent. Another option is hands free when we have to drive a lot.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this piece. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a chilling write and the distractions whilst driving to cause such horrid consequences is a learning process that we do not recover from, a warning to others, a tragic loss of life here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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This is a chilling write and the distractions whilst driving to cause such horrid consequences is a learning process that we do not recover from, a warning to others, a tragic loss of life here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Pamusart
Losing a child is probably the worse feeling in the world. Maybe losing a spouse is worse. Not sure. Any parent would want to take the place if the child. Very moving story. A good entry for the contest. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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Losing a child is probably the worse feeling in the world. Maybe losing a spouse is worse. Not sure. Any parent would want to take the place if the child. Very moving story. A good entry for the contest. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from Sherman541
Great Story in 75 short words, sad too, but reality. I think you did a very nice job at putting together this story of death and what the causes could be. Sherman541
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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Great Story in 75 short words, sad too, but reality. I think you did a very nice job at putting together this story of death and what the causes could be. Sherman541
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate the review.
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You are very welcome ;)
Comment from Sankey
Yeah I hope they have rules and fines for people talking on Mobiles while Driving. We do have still fines and penalties here. Good work and what an appropriate picture with the little dog missing their master.
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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Yeah I hope they have rules and fines for people talking on Mobiles while Driving. We do have still fines and penalties here. Good work and what an appropriate picture with the little dog missing their master.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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Thanks.