Perennials of War
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I've just looked up, Tay-sachs on Google. I'd never heard of it, and hope other people won't either. It's awful to think there is no cure and it's young children who mostly have it, and only then if both parents have the gene. How often do two people have the same gene and produce a child? It must be so rare. This is a very well written part, Barbara, it keeps the story continuing on in a normal, natural pace.
I love how shy Shana is. It's nice to see that in young ladies and that doesn't happen often enough either. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I've just looked up, Tay-sachs on Google. I'd never heard of it, and hope other people won't either. It's awful to think there is no cure and it's young children who mostly have it, and only then if both parents have the gene. How often do two people have the same gene and produce a child? It must be so rare. This is a very well written part, Barbara, it keeps the story continuing on in a normal, natural pace.
I love how shy Shana is. It's nice to see that in young ladies and that doesn't happen often enough either. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I think will grow through the rest of this story and continue her sweetness but become strong. I HOPE, anyway. I'll see if I can pull it off. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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I'm sure you'll do it easily, Barbara. I do enjoy reading your books. x
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, Barbara, :)
Good to see you. It is a pleasure to read a piece of writing that deals with Judaism. Jesus was a Jew -- I think that fact is lost to a lot of people.
Have a good week!!
Nome
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello, Barbara, :)
Good to see you. It is a pleasure to read a piece of writing that deals with Judaism. Jesus was a Jew -- I think that fact is lost to a lot of people.
Have a good week!!
Nome
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I think so too. Our Christianity has Jewish roots. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Love finds away doesn't it? I can see the expression on the girls fce when she awaken and saw Anderson in the other bed. So far I'm still hooked. You have certain way to keep a person once they are drawn in. That, my author friend is excellent.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Love finds away doesn't it? I can see the expression on the girls fce when she awaken and saw Anderson in the other bed. So far I'm still hooked. You have certain way to keep a person once they are drawn in. That, my author friend is excellent.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your continued encouragement.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Some nice hidden flirtation. Hehe. If Shana's dad only knew! Yikes!
Really, only six years? I didn't know kids always died from Tay Sachs. So tragic.
The standard way to show a one-sided phone conversation is to use ellipses when the other person speaks, like this:
Anderson rolled over to answer his ring cell, hoping it didn't wake Shana. He jumped up and headed for the bathroom. "What is it?" ... "Sorry, Philip. I had a rough night and not much sleep." ... "Tell him that I'm on a family emergency."
Did you mean to write RING CELL instead of CELL RING? I'm not up on the new terms for everything.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Some nice hidden flirtation. Hehe. If Shana's dad only knew! Yikes!
Really, only six years? I didn't know kids always died from Tay Sachs. So tragic.
The standard way to show a one-sided phone conversation is to use ellipses when the other person speaks, like this:
Anderson rolled over to answer his ring cell, hoping it didn't wake Shana. He jumped up and headed for the bathroom. "What is it?" ... "Sorry, Philip. I had a rough night and not much sleep." ... "Tell him that I'm on a family emergency."
Did you mean to write RING CELL instead of CELL RING? I'm not up on the new terms for everything.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I fixed the ringing. Thank you for the catch. I just searched by grammar book for the other and found no reference to it. I have always written telephone conversations this way and you're the first to comment. I will continue to research it. Thank you for bringing it to my attention.
Comment from Sankey
Another top chapter. Still got me in there absolutely. Now some spags and some confusion.Anderson rolled over to answer his ring(ing) cell
A little confused about these 2 lines...Marc waved, "will be standing right outside the door. Right?"
"Yes, sir. You have nothing to worry about, Ma'am." Should there be a break after Yes Sir? Is Shana saying that and Andrew replying "You have nothing to worry about?? etc
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Another top chapter. Still got me in there absolutely. Now some spags and some confusion.Anderson rolled over to answer his ring(ing) cell
A little confused about these 2 lines...Marc waved, "will be standing right outside the door. Right?"
"Yes, sir. You have nothing to worry about, Ma'am." Should there be a break after Yes Sir? Is Shana saying that and Andrew replying "You have nothing to worry about?? etc
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thank you for bringing the ringing to my attention. I have fixed it. I will recheck the other area.
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On second look I think it is a response from Marc to Drew (Yes Sir)then to the young woman "You have nothing to worry about, Ma'am" all in one hit so might be alright now I think about it.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, well Shana is slowly coming around isn't she? I hope she a drew soon find and declare their love for each other. About time as well, if you ask me. Another great chapter. All the best.Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hi Barbara, well Shana is slowly coming around isn't she? I hope she a drew soon find and declare their love for each other. About time as well, if you ask me. Another great chapter. All the best.Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Drew will make a declaration of love and soon. Wonder what Shana will say. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Great interactions between Shana and Anderson. Why can't everyone have an Anderson? He seems to have an answer for everything. If they keep moving, Shana and Anderson may be able to throw the enemy off their trail. It is a nerve-wracking situation for Shana, though. Good to include the information about Tay-Sachs, a disease I don't know much about. It is certainly bad news for Shana and her family. If anyone has the resources to help Sarah, it will be Anderson. Excellent and deserving of a 6. judi
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Great interactions between Shana and Anderson. Why can't everyone have an Anderson? He seems to have an answer for everything. If they keep moving, Shana and Anderson may be able to throw the enemy off their trail. It is a nerve-wracking situation for Shana, though. Good to include the information about Tay-Sachs, a disease I don't know much about. It is certainly bad news for Shana and her family. If anyone has the resources to help Sarah, it will be Anderson. Excellent and deserving of a 6. judi
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I want an Anderson. I wish there were more like him. I think we will learn a little more about him soon. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Zue65
I loved reading the loving exchange of conversations between Shana and Drew and obviously a brewing romance is expected to be in full bloom. I will eagerly wait for the next post. All the best.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I loved reading the loving exchange of conversations between Shana and Drew and obviously a brewing romance is expected to be in full bloom. I will eagerly wait for the next post. All the best.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sasha
I like how you are weaving several back stories into this. It adds flavor to an already delightful and fascinating book. Shana is slowly (yes, slowly) coming around and Anderson is clearly falling for her. I do hope it all works out for both of them in the end.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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I like how you are weaving several back stories into this. It adds flavor to an already delightful and fascinating book. Shana is slowly (yes, slowly) coming around and Anderson is clearly falling for her. I do hope it all works out for both of them in the end.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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I think Shana is coming around but refuses to admit it. She's afraid of losing her father's love. Thank you for the kind review.
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I agree, family is so important and not to be taken lightly.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Barbara, this is a good chapter. I am coming in without reading previous chapters, but your characters came alive with your ability to write realistic dialogue. I love writing stories, fiction is my passion. You often need these information chapters to transition to another part of the narrative. NIcely done. Thank you, Ana.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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Hello Barbara, this is a good chapter. I am coming in without reading previous chapters, but your characters came alive with your ability to write realistic dialogue. I love writing stories, fiction is my passion. You often need these information chapters to transition to another part of the narrative. NIcely done. Thank you, Ana.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.