Worlds
Viewing comments for Chapter 185 "Shrew World 5"Animal poetry and short stories
26 total reviews
Comment from damommy
The shrew should have quit while he was ahead. Got to cocky, and the cat caught him.
I love the rhyming and the wording. It certainly gave me a laugh.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
  |
The shrew should have quit while he was ahead. Got to cocky, and the cat caught him.
I love the rhyming and the wording. It certainly gave me a laugh.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
-
Thanks, da
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This was cute and a lot of fun to read. I never knew about a shrew. I definitely didn't know that they were this tough. Poor bird. I bet he regrets that. The end was kind of wrong though. The shrew went through all of that only to get ate by the cat. That's harsh. I like it! Well done sir.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
|
This was cute and a lot of fun to read. I never knew about a shrew. I definitely didn't know that they were this tough. Poor bird. I bet he regrets that. The end was kind of wrong though. The shrew went through all of that only to get ate by the cat. That's harsh. I like it! Well done sir.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
-
Thanks, Jeffrey
Comment from Ulla
hehehehe, yeah, and so the world goes around. The cat will end up eating the screw and make a much better job out of it. There would have been nothing left for a start. I loved your poem. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
|
hehehehe, yeah, and so the world goes around. The cat will end up eating the screw and make a much better job out of it. There would have been nothing left for a start. I loved your poem. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
-
Thanks, Ulla
Comment from judiverse
The positively bloody word of animals. It's cockatoo eat shrew world. Glad the shrew cam to the cat's attention. The cat would certainly be better able to dispose of the shrew. Clever rhyme and humor despite the bloodthirsty storyline. Love that the bird's last words were "That's all there is there ain't no more" instead of the traditional "Nevermore." A fun piece. judi
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
|
The positively bloody word of animals. It's cockatoo eat shrew world. Glad the shrew cam to the cat's attention. The cat would certainly be better able to dispose of the shrew. Clever rhyme and humor despite the bloodthirsty storyline. Love that the bird's last words were "That's all there is there ain't no more" instead of the traditional "Nevermore." A fun piece. judi
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
-
Thanks, Judi
-
You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
That third verse is pretty gory! Bird attacking rodents sends a shiver down my spine, yes I think leaving it to the cats is best, a unique write about those pesky shrews, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
|
That third verse is pretty gory! Bird attacking rodents sends a shiver down my spine, yes I think leaving it to the cats is best, a unique write about those pesky shrews, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
-
Thanks, Dolly, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! I lovvve it. Verrry clever and a lot of fun. That's shrew in the pic is tiny. I never knew they were as small as mice. SHREW sounds big and frightening. I like it's pointy little nose. It looks too cute to be named SHREW, as if it's mean. Though it sure is in your poem. :)
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
 |
LOL! I lovvve it. Verrry clever and a lot of fun. That's shrew in the pic is tiny. I never knew they were as small as mice. SHREW sounds big and frightening. I like it's pointy little nose. It looks too cute to be named SHREW, as if it's mean. Though it sure is in your poem. :)
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
-
Thanks, Phyllis, for giving this a look and a huge review. I understand they are a fierce and aggressive critter. Bill
Comment from nomi338
Ha ha. I see what you did there. Very clever. Be careful of what you swallow, for if your gullet is very shallow, certain disaster is sure to follow. You will lie there all open and sore, as someone else will take your meal and walk out the door.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
|
Ha ha. I see what you did there. Very clever. Be careful of what you swallow, for if your gullet is very shallow, certain disaster is sure to follow. You will lie there all open and sore, as someone else will take your meal and walk out the door.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
-
Thanks, nomi, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Boogienights
This is very funny and ever since I started reading your animal poems,I have fun picturing what they look like.you seem to have a knack for the absurd and the hilarious. Good job making people smile.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
|
This is very funny and ever since I started reading your animal poems,I have fun picturing what they look like.you seem to have a knack for the absurd and the hilarious. Good job making people smile.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
-
Thanks, BN, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Spitfire
well penned and very funny. good photo to show the size.
A zig and zagging in its gut
then horrid gas shot out its butt
its breast split open and out jut
a shrewish head from that rude cut.
I can picture this.
smooth end rhyme
especially loved the moral.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
|
well penned and very funny. good photo to show the size.
A zig and zagging in its gut
then horrid gas shot out its butt
its breast split open and out jut
a shrewish head from that rude cut.
I can picture this.
smooth end rhyme
especially loved the moral.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
-
Thanks, Shari, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! Lots of chuckles here. Poor cockatoo! But I agree that only a cat will do. But cats often don't eat the mice and shrews. They bat it around and tire it out and bring it to you as a gift and you're still stuck with the shrew removing job.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
|
Lol! Lots of chuckles here. Poor cockatoo! But I agree that only a cat will do. But cats often don't eat the mice and shrews. They bat it around and tire it out and bring it to you as a gift and you're still stuck with the shrew removing job.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
-
That?s the difference between a ?mouser?, which is basically dependent on living food, and a house cat, who knows you?ll feed it eventually. Now, talking shrews is another thing.