Ashes in the Wind
Short poem contest entry51 total reviews
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Very nicely done with great photo to match. This little poem says a great deal. Your word choice is creative and unique . . . lovely. I liked this very much. Great job!
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Very nicely done with great photo to match. This little poem says a great deal. Your word choice is creative and unique . . . lovely. I liked this very much. Great job!
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello Wendy,
Much appreciation for your excellent and thoughtful review!
Thank you so much!
diane
Comment from zekeziemann
loved the picture. The verse is short but understood and to the point. Well done and I hope you will write more. Thanks.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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loved the picture. The verse is short but understood and to the point. Well done and I hope you will write more. Thanks.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
The artwork is chilling...yes?
Thank you ever so much for your thoughtful and positive review.
diane
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
A lovely simple but soft and delicate poem with beautiful artwork I enjoyed this very much and found it quite beautiful well done kindest regards Meia xxx
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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A lovely simple but soft and delicate poem with beautiful artwork I enjoyed this very much and found it quite beautiful well done kindest regards Meia xxx
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello Meia,
Thank you ever so much for appreciating my verse.
This was challenging, but rewarding to pen...
diane
Comment from robina1978
An excellent photo of birds, that complements your poem very well. The poem is nice. I just wondered if it is right to put twice how together in such a short poem. Maybe you can think of something else. Best wishes for the contest, think I entered it too.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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An excellent photo of birds, that complements your poem very well. The poem is nice. I just wondered if it is right to put twice how together in such a short poem. Maybe you can think of something else. Best wishes for the contest, think I entered it too.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello Robina,
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from cailinraine8
Hard truth, sad, aren't we indeed in a precarious life moment by moment... reminds us to be thankful for every minute. The little fellows in the forest are as safe as we are, but death is around every doorstep it seems. This is very well done and the picture accentuates the words very well.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hard truth, sad, aren't we indeed in a precarious life moment by moment... reminds us to be thankful for every minute. The little fellows in the forest are as safe as we are, but death is around every doorstep it seems. This is very well done and the picture accentuates the words very well.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello Cailin,
I love your interpretation!
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from TPAC
Cute. The thought given tingles. Absolute right in its declared conveyance. Honest words with precise cutting depth to make this write appealing in its profound consideration. All in my opinion of this write.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Cute. The thought given tingles. Absolute right in its declared conveyance. Honest words with precise cutting depth to make this write appealing in its profound consideration. All in my opinion of this write.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello TPAC!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent review!
diane
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Superb! You have four lines each with five perfect syllables and how profound the words are. The photo, apart from the fact that it is such a sad picture of the live bird looking at his friend/mate impaled on the twig jutting out, is incredibly suited to your poem. Well done, this is an excellent contest entry, Diane. Good luck! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Superb! You have four lines each with five perfect syllables and how profound the words are. The photo, apart from the fact that it is such a sad picture of the live bird looking at his friend/mate impaled on the twig jutting out, is incredibly suited to your poem. Well done, this is an excellent contest entry, Diane. Good luck! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello Sandra,
So very pleased you enjoyed my poem and it resonated with you.
Thank you for your excellent and thoughtful review...
diane
Comment from Dean Kuch
Lovely short piece, Mrs. KT, and very well stated, if I may say so myself.
We're on an elevator ride to hell as a species and the controls are broken.
Looks like a long ride down one-way for us...
Best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Lovely short piece, Mrs. KT, and very well stated, if I may say so myself.
We're on an elevator ride to hell as a species and the controls are broken.
Looks like a long ride down one-way for us...
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hey Dean!
So pleased my poem resonated with you!
Not certain I share quite the same pessimistic outlook as you do, but I am worried...
Thanks for the excellent and thoughtful review!
diane
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You're more than welcome.
~Dean :)
Comment from Pantygynt
This somewhat tragic picture complements the verse perfectly but is not essential to its comprehension. This is exactly how art work should be used.
The poem too is very well constructed with total balance. Each line has five syllables and the whole thing comes over as a profound philosophical statement. I wish this every success in the contest as it is so deserving of it.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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This somewhat tragic picture complements the verse perfectly but is not essential to its comprehension. This is exactly how art work should be used.
The poem too is very well constructed with total balance. Each line has five syllables and the whole thing comes over as a profound philosophical statement. I wish this every success in the contest as it is so deserving of it.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
I am honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review.
I stumbled upon the artwork while composing a haiku. I wasn't suspecting that artwork to appear when searching for hawthorne branches. When I realized that the perching bird's mate was impaled on the thorny branch, I was truly taken aback.
I remembered I had saved the artwork halfway through "Ashes in the Wind."
Thank you again for appreciating my work...
diane
Comment from Rasmine
Mrs. KT, :)
This is very good. At first, I looked twice, then looked up the syllables in 'precarious'. You are spot on with the syllables.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Mrs. KT, :)
This is very good. At first, I looked twice, then looked up the syllables in 'precarious'. You are spot on with the syllables.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Rasmine!
So pleased you enjoyed.
Thank you for your kind review!
diane