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Hollywood

50 word drabble

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Comment from Joy Graham
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Ooooh, payback is a bitch as they say. It fits right in with the new Hollywood move against sexism. I think you said a lot in the word limitation for this contest. I had to sit and let it sink in at first, but the lightbulb came on and I got it. Best wishes to you in this contest.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
    Thanks so much for reading and your thoughtful review.
Comment from tfawcus
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A most topical Dribble Flash Fiction! The birds are beginning to come home to roost in ever increasing numbers these days. Perhaps, at last, this kind of demeaning behaviour will become a thing of the past. Succinctly put in you well written piece.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
    Thanks so much for reading and your thoughtful comments.
Comment from Sugarray77
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This is an excellent entry for the Dribble Flash Fiction contest. What a great rebuttal to the 'Me Too' movement. I enjoyed reading it and think you did a fine job.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
    Thanks so much!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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This is a good entry for the Dribble Flash Fiction writing prompt.
Your sad story is well told. It's truly a sad world we live in.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
    Thanks much!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This speaks just do it, the first step to get a part in Hollywood movie, well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us, wish you good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING -DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
    Thanks a lot for the review and good wishes.
Comment from gene roush
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This has nice tension.
I think replacing "she" with a name might give this better imagery. The conclusion isn't clear to me. Is she videoing the scene? Perhaps removing, or altering the second plea would allow you to clarify.
Thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
Gene

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 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
    Thanks, and yes, that is what is happening-hard to make it clear with so few words so I appreciate the idea and will review.
reply by gene roush on 28-Mar-2018
    Maybe you can say something about the camera, or the lense?
reply by gene roush on 28-Mar-2018
    Or focus?
Comment from Artasylum
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Hey Frogbook this is very sad and very true... Hopefully this ugly climate is changing. Beautifully written with so few words. Looking forward. Yours, Diana

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 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
    Thanks a bunch for reading and your thoughtful comments.