Burgeoning Emptiness
Five line poem dedicated to the memory of AlvinTEthington15 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good 5 Line Poem Contest entry.
It is a lovely tribute to your friend, I'm sorry that he is lost to us all.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good 5 Line Poem Contest entry.
It is a lovely tribute to your friend, I'm sorry that he is lost to us all.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from James H. Oldfield
A lovely tribute, I'm sure he would be honoured by it.
A wonderful image of a person living on through their words.
Very well written, take care.
-James
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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A lovely tribute, I'm sure he would be honoured by it.
A wonderful image of a person living on through their words.
Very well written, take care.
-James
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your kind review. I originally wrote the last line to read: May your words endure... but reconsidered as to regard ?endure? as to live on is not readily recognized... Challenging!
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I think I like 'live on', best, it suggests a kind of immortality, rather than simply not going away (if that makes sense :) ) -James
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I agree!
Thank you!
- diane
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your 5-line poem is heartfelt Diane and when I read your notes a tear came to my eye, you met someone very precious here on Fanstory where we meet and communicate and have similar thoughts, I wish you well and look forward to reading more of your work if you now have more time to post. Beautiful words in tribute to Alvin, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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Your 5-line poem is heartfelt Diane and when I read your notes a tear came to my eye, you met someone very precious here on Fanstory where we meet and communicate and have similar thoughts, I wish you well and look forward to reading more of your work if you now have more time to post. Beautiful words in tribute to Alvin, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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Thank you ever so kindly, Dolly.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and well written five line poem dedicated to Alvin! I liked him too as a writer. He was a really neat person. You used very good wording and great imagery from the art work! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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This is a very nice and well written five line poem dedicated to Alvin! I liked him too as a writer. He was a really neat person. You used very good wording and great imagery from the art work! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from rama devi
Fine tribute to Alvin. He is missed by many. I thought it a nice gesture to choose him for this contest. I knew him even before coming to FS, from a different poetry site. He loved words, and especially haiku, with intensity! Lovely artwork choice too.
Nice to see you posting here again!
Blessings,
rd
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Fine tribute to Alvin. He is missed by many. I thought it a nice gesture to choose him for this contest. I knew him even before coming to FS, from a different poetry site. He loved words, and especially haiku, with intensity! Lovely artwork choice too.
Nice to see you posting here again!
Blessings,
rd
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Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your thoughtful review, rama devi.
This contest is a take on Alvin's beloved haiku.
So numbing to think that had I stayed in touch.........
diane
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Yes. RIP Alvin...
Love,
rd