Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem. Nice rhyme and rhythm throughout. A lovely metaphor for not wanting to be isolated from the rest of the world. I could feel the little leafs struggle. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thank YOU for reading and reviewing. I'm happy you enjoyed it.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Awe, Yvonne, this is just so wonderful. The imagery is just out of this world. I was there, experiencing it all. You wrote a beautiful rhyming poem for the contest. I think it will be a great contender. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

What a lovely thing to say. You always boost me right up there. I'm so happy you liked it. Thank you so much.

reply by Ulla on 06-Jan-2018

You know I love your poems:)))

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Hi Yvonne, I love the story your poem tells....of the leaf that wanted to fall and join has friends...and was left behind for a few more days...I was so happy when it fell...I love your poem sweet girl...and love your picture...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thank you. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading my little story. There always seems to be one leaf still hanging when all the others have gone. 8-)

reply by l.raven on 06-Jan-2018

you are so right...I do see them...your soooooooo welcome Yvonne...smiling back at ya...love xxoo

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

This is fantastic, my friend. Very creative and very fun to read. Your meter seems flawless and makes this flow really appealingly. I am impressed. Vert well done. I really wish I had 6 left for you

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thank you. Impressed? Wow. No better compliment than that.

Comment from Warren Rodgers

Excellent

Hi Yvonne, You have written a wonderful poem for the contest. Your rhymes are all good and unforced and your meter is smooth. I like your use of internal rhyme and your abundant alliteration. Personification of the courageous little leaf is excellent! I enjoyed reading and reviewing your poem. Good luck in the contest!
All the best,
Rodger

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thank you so much for a wonderful review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for such nice comments. 8-)

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

aabb heptameter aimed at the younger reader, or more likely, listener. Can't see anything that needs changing. Sonny James, 1957, "Till the last leaf falls from the tree"

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Oh, I'd forgotten that song. Thanks for reminding me. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This poem is beautifully rhymed and gently eases us into spring with your kind words about a lonely leaf, a joy to read and I wish you luck with the rhyming contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thank you so much. Every year, there's always one little leaf clinging on for dear life, it seems.

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Damommy,
This is adorable! I hope you are fine. I hope all your holidays and celebrations were awesome!
I didn't find anything wrong, this is an adorable, encouraging poem.
Take care,
Nome

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thank you for these wonderful comments. I'm so happy you liked it.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Nice rhymed tale about nature and friendship. The leaves on the ground personify the encouragement of friends for one to complete his/her dream.

Good luck in the contest.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thank you for your review, and for your encouragement. I appreciate it.

reply by dragonpoet on 06-Jan-2018

No problem. It is why we are here.

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Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

A "simple poem", Yvonne?
Yeah, simply wonderful!
Excellent rhyme, meter and a bouncy cadence in each of your five rhymed quatrains keeps this uplifting poetic story bounding right along.
Good Iambic Heptameter, featuring an aabb rhyme scheme.
This is a wonderfully well written poem that children and adults alike can enjoy.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thank you. What lovely comments. Every year, one little leaf seems to hang on long after everyone else has left. I just wondered how he must feel. lol

reply by Dean Kuch on 06-Jan-2018

You're welcome, Yvonne. It's a wonderful poem.