Chasing Home...
4 Line Poem Entry15 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written four line poem. To get home in the dark is always a little scary and we don't know what to expect or what may lurk in the darkest corners.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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A very well-written four line poem. To get home in the dark is always a little scary and we don't know what to expect or what may lurk in the darkest corners.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Hi Sandra Thank you so so much!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is really intriguing. Why is he/she feeling remorseful? I love a mystery.
This is an excellent four lined poem for the contest and I wish you well in it.
Have a wonderful Christmas and a fabulous 2108. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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That is really intriguing. Why is he/she feeling remorseful? I love a mystery.
This is an excellent four lined poem for the contest and I wish you well in it.
Have a wonderful Christmas and a fabulous 2108. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 19-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Okay. Thanks though
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Hi again, Greg, I have just seen I gave you a 4, I am so sorry, I didn't mean to it was supposed to be a 5 as I was out of 6s, I've put it right now. I am such an idiot sometimes, I have to remember to double check before I click on 'save'. I'm really sorry! xx:(
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Haha no worries :) it ended up winning!
Comment from royowen
An excellent entry in this four line poetry contest Gregory. You've created som ambiguity in this nicely scribed rendition. The shadowed darkness suggests bonded imprisonment, not necessarily physical, so well done with this pearler. Good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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An excellent entry in this four line poetry contest Gregory. You've created som ambiguity in this nicely scribed rendition. The shadowed darkness suggests bonded imprisonment, not necessarily physical, so well done with this pearler. Good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 19-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Hey Roy thank you! Long time! I've been busy with the little ones :)
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Well done
Comment from rama devi
Hi Gregory! How nice to see your name here again. Welcome back!
Great imagery. The poem generates a definite mood and impressions. Fine presentation to suit the tone and tenor of the theme.
Love the phonetics. you've such a keen sense of the music of words. The alliteration of H and subtle assonance of O-U in scuffed unlit and remorse, the subtle assonance of E as well, and the combined consonance and alliteration of S plus consonance of F are all superbly woven.
Read this aloud thrice!
Fine personification of remorse too.
So sad and heavy...in case it is not fictional, I am sending light-thoughts your way!
Bravo
Warmly, rd
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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Hi Gregory! How nice to see your name here again. Welcome back!
Great imagery. The poem generates a definite mood and impressions. Fine presentation to suit the tone and tenor of the theme.
Love the phonetics. you've such a keen sense of the music of words. The alliteration of H and subtle assonance of O-U in scuffed unlit and remorse, the subtle assonance of E as well, and the combined consonance and alliteration of S plus consonance of F are all superbly woven.
Read this aloud thrice!
Fine personification of remorse too.
So sad and heavy...in case it is not fictional, I am sending light-thoughts your way!
Bravo
Warmly, rd
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Comment Written 19-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Hi Rama! Oh I've missed you. I've been trying to focus on my book more (which I will be hiring you to help of course!). I'm looking forward to working with you. And seriously Thank you for reading into this one, as you always do. I really appreciate it. How are you? I hope we'll. Yes this was fictional :)
I have to email you sometime to catch up. Sending positive thoughts your way Rama...
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Missed you too, Gregory! I look forward to your book and to working with you. Glad this was fictional! Thanks for your positive thoughts, my friend, reciprocated fully! Hope all is well with you. Everything is grace!
Love and Light,
rd
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully as you deliver a structurally sound Four Line Poem. I thought the content absolutely haunting as you paint a vivid image of loneliness and despair in your few well chosen words. Well done! All the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully as you deliver a structurally sound Four Line Poem. I thought the content absolutely haunting as you paint a vivid image of loneliness and despair in your few well chosen words. Well done! All the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
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Comment Written 19-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Thank you! I really am honored you got it