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Comment from LeRoy Bertsch
A very special tribute to the one you love. I lived in Jersey for 15 years and I live in Tucson now. Life is harder back there even the fresh fallen snow can't cover all the grime.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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A very special tribute to the one you love. I lived in Jersey for 15 years and I live in Tucson now. Life is harder back there even the fresh fallen snow can't cover all the grime.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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True taxes are atrocious.
Atlantic City Electris Company are crooks.
The town is Capitalistic Marx ist Natzis!
Dr.Ricky 1024.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello DR Ricky1024
my what a well written prose/poem about the life of your wife Carolyn of her, which to me she had a difficult time in her life
Am I getting the felling she decided to give up?
Gert
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Hello DR Ricky1024
my what a well written prose/poem about the life of your wife Carolyn of her, which to me she had a difficult time in her life
Am I getting the felling she decided to give up?
Gert
Comment Written 12-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Yes Gert.
Suicide at age 49 14 years ago.
Dr.Ricky
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Dr. Ricky,
question, are you going to continue writing about Carolyn
Gert
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Yes there is more in my new piece called...
" Discovering Jason?"
Ricky..
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I will put in my bookcase and then get back to you.
Gert
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Losing people you love affects you. It is buried inside of you and becomes this big, deep hole of ache. It doesn't magically go away, even when you stop officially mourning. I appreciate your wonderful tribute to your wife.
Bill~
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Losing people you love affects you. It is buried inside of you and becomes this big, deep hole of ache. It doesn't magically go away, even when you stop officially mourning. I appreciate your wonderful tribute to your wife.
Bill~
Comment Written 12-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Thanks Bill your thoughts Run Deep and of course it is so true my circumstances would with my wife is a little more different when it comes to missing a spouse after 20 year marriage because she was gambling away my money and left me literally broken could have cared less when she decide to stop her medications and pass away to be with my son she got her wishes I repaired the damage and now I move forward talk to Ricky 1024 thanks for your time
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a fine prose poem about the life of your deceased wife, Carolyn Ann Richmond Smrkovsky. Some of the most effecting passages were when you describe your grief over losing her:
"Born (Nee) on December 6th, 1952."
"She would have had...
"Fifty-One years on this planet...
"On this planet of Pain,
Without loved ones, Christmas can be dark, as you write here:
"In the month of December...
"There will not be any snow falling to cover this Filthy Earth...
You then provide lines to inform readers about the wonderful person she was and how much she meant to you. Your poem is detail oriented ad you try to remember as many details as possible, as if to forget these details it would be like forgetting her. You speak of hope in Heaven of reunion and then close your poem with an Amen.
Thank you for sharing your poem.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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This is a fine prose poem about the life of your deceased wife, Carolyn Ann Richmond Smrkovsky. Some of the most effecting passages were when you describe your grief over losing her:
"Born (Nee) on December 6th, 1952."
"She would have had...
"Fifty-One years on this planet...
"On this planet of Pain,
Without loved ones, Christmas can be dark, as you write here:
"In the month of December...
"There will not be any snow falling to cover this Filthy Earth...
You then provide lines to inform readers about the wonderful person she was and how much she meant to you. Your poem is detail oriented ad you try to remember as many details as possible, as if to forget these details it would be like forgetting her. You speak of hope in Heaven of reunion and then close your poem with an Amen.
Thank you for sharing your poem.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this this cat I occasionally dedicate a piece of my wife I do a lot for my son once he passed she passed eight months afterwards like committing suicide thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Bill Schott
This work is dense with information and situations that are difficult to process all at once. More misery than a person deserves. That comes out loud and clear.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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This work is dense with information and situations that are difficult to process all at once. More misery than a person deserves. That comes out loud and clear.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Thanks Bill I'm not 25th of November she started with a fever I took it to the Pathmark her blood pressure was half the normal amount she refused to go to hospital she made me cooler down with cool Rags at 1 in the morning I left on the couch asked her if she needed to go to the bathroom and she said she was fine at 4 in the morning I heard a noise she claps trying to get from the bathroom into the bedroom as he was doing this she took in a death breath the body's response when it knows it's going to go unconscious in the heart. I immediately called 911 did CPR brought her back they took her to hospital Oster 20 minutes later thanks for your concern Stockton Ricky 1024 that was 14 years ago last month her birthday was just the six of December she would have been 65 years old
Comment from Liberty Justice
SIX STARS 6******for you, dear poet, Ricky! You always make me sad with your sorrowful, but well described and well written historical events of your life and tragedies. I am so sorry for your loss, and I hope you are healing. What did your wife pass away from? WELL WRITTEN! lol your friend forever, liberty justice
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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SIX STARS 6******for you, dear poet, Ricky! You always make me sad with your sorrowful, but well described and well written historical events of your life and tragedies. I am so sorry for your loss, and I hope you are healing. What did your wife pass away from? WELL WRITTEN! lol your friend forever, liberty justice
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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SUICIDE
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So Sad so sorry! You must begin to heal. Lol
Liberty justice your forever friend
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So Sad so sorry! You must begin to heal. Lol
Liberty justice your forever friend
Comment from Dean Kuch
So, Dr. Ricky.
If I'm following you correctly you had an extramarital affair on your wife at the time, Carolyn Ann Richmond Smrkovsky. The affair brought about offspring--Corinne Alexis 8, Jason Richard and a third trip in 85 would result in Dana Alex Markovski being conceived.
Am I right so far?
I'm trying...
More to come with "The Golden Years"...
~Dean
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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So, Dr. Ricky.
If I'm following you correctly you had an extramarital affair on your wife at the time, Carolyn Ann Richmond Smrkovsky. The affair brought about offspring--Corinne Alexis 8, Jason Richard and a third trip in 85 would result in Dana Alex Markovski being conceived.
Am I right so far?
I'm trying...
More to come with "The Golden Years"...
~Dean
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Hiding animals 20 years of marriage before my wife suicide I had those opportunities but I would not partake I had children in and I needed to respect not only my wife but my children she was able to conceive I guess you got that wrong and she was highly surprised being that she had an appendicitis at 17 I don't think I put that in headers knows but I will do that thanks for reading and reviewing dr. Ricky 1024
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I misunderstood, Ricky.
I apologize.
I had a little bit of trouble following your poem.
Respectfully,
~Dean
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a tragic tale of abuse and misfortune, and my heart goes out to you in your loss. As a piece of writing though it is littered with faults
"Born (Nee) on December 6th, 1952." Now maths is not my strong point but I don't see how you get 51 years from then till now. I make it 65.
'into my carrier."
"A carrier with skills' Did you mean 'career'?
"...she would disperse a small stipend." I think you mean disburse
"... with a woman whom was a cashier in the store." Incorrect use of whom. Should be who.
This is intendended as a poem but, despite being broken up into lines it reads more like prose. While at the end we have a prose section laid out as a mass of completely upunctuated text, which mad it almost impossible to read.
I am sorry to grade this so low, as it is an account of a personal tragedy but, as a piece of writing of any type, it does need extensive reworking.
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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This is a tragic tale of abuse and misfortune, and my heart goes out to you in your loss. As a piece of writing though it is littered with faults
"Born (Nee) on December 6th, 1952." Now maths is not my strong point but I don't see how you get 51 years from then till now. I make it 65.
'into my carrier."
"A carrier with skills' Did you mean 'career'?
"...she would disperse a small stipend." I think you mean disburse
"... with a woman whom was a cashier in the store." Incorrect use of whom. Should be who.
This is intendended as a poem but, despite being broken up into lines it reads more like prose. While at the end we have a prose section laid out as a mass of completely upunctuated text, which mad it almost impossible to read.
I am sorry to grade this so low, as it is an account of a personal tragedy but, as a piece of writing of any type, it does need extensive reworking.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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You must have caught this before I completely edited it cuz I talk these into this cell phone because everything you say as of this point in time is completely untrue so it deserves re-read it's on the welcoming page it's gotten five and six star reviews I do not take away for any grammar issues at all I only grade for content with you should also do just something to think about There Are Young Writers on this site and it does to them take away from there to rankings and ratings talk to Ricky 1024
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I review as I find and am more likely to grade for form than for content. A writer is entitled to say what he wishes but how it is said, particularly in poetry is what we should be reviewing.
Comment from Rasmine
I am so sorry you lost your wife. She was a beautiful woman.
I found some typos:
And, I already had ten years into my carrier (career)."
Also the end of the poem had no punctuation at all and was kind of difficult to read.
Okay, please, take care
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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I am so sorry you lost your wife. She was a beautiful woman.
I found some typos:
And, I already had ten years into my carrier (career)."
Also the end of the poem had no punctuation at all and was kind of difficult to read.
Okay, please, take care
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thanks but I never take Stars away for an error issue when it comes to grammar where the doors grammar their problems or not I only judge and rate on content but that's your personal choice and yes it does take away from your rating for stars when you average 5 and 6 dr. Ricky 1024 I would suggest you reread it I appreciate the content it's made the welcoming page and you give it only four stores Stars fanstory would highly disagree with that
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Okay, but it was difficult to read. I won't change it because of that. I couldn't understand your writing. That's all. That is what is wrong with education too, they want us teachers to grade on only the content -- I got sick before I could work as a teacher but I couldn't grade on only content if they don't learn to write it correctly. That is why they are in school. For content I give you 5 stars, but because I can't understand it I give you 4. I wanted to understand your heart filled words and I couldn't!! Just a few periods to indicate the end of a sentence would help a little. Just so I could understand it.
Again, I am really sorry for your loss.
Comment from jenintorre
I was enthralled by this story. I just love your writing style. It held me until the end which is very unusual for me. You are very talented. Thank you so much for sharing.
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I was enthralled by this story. I just love your writing style. It held me until the end which is very unusual for me. You are very talented. Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thanks jenintorre.
I'll follow you.
Dr. Ricky 1024.
Later...
