The Great Race
Jenny tries to prove she has what it takes to succeed.16 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Interesting image.
-Your story is organized well,
beginning with the character
of Jenny- we learn that she
is very competitive and will
not be outdone.
-Good use of word play, too:)
-Excellent description in
the second paragraph.
-All ends well for Jenny.
-Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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-Interesting image.
-Your story is organized well,
beginning with the character
of Jenny- we learn that she
is very competitive and will
not be outdone.
-Good use of word play, too:)
-Excellent description in
the second paragraph.
-All ends well for Jenny.
-Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Pam.
I appreciate the careful way you have written the review.
100 words are hard to stick to, but can be a good way to kick yourself back into writing!
Take care
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You are very welcome. A small number of words is hard to write, but you did it well.
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Thank you!
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You are welcome. You got my vote, too:)
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Awww, that is so sweet. Thank you!
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You are welcome, Rhonda🙂
Comment from Sharon Haiste
A good 100 word story.
You've stayed within the guidelines, told a story, and it has a surprise ending.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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A good 100 word story.
You've stayed within the guidelines, told a story, and it has a surprise ending.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Sharon. A 100 word story is fun to write, but challenging to stay within the few words allowed.
I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from Ricky1024
This 100-yard dash poem was wonderfully written as Jenny had to travel quickly to get to her prize before she was overturned great theme and imagery flowed well read well but no grammar issues and great descriptive contents thanks for this and good luck talk to Ricky
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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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This 100-yard dash poem was wonderfully written as Jenny had to travel quickly to get to her prize before she was overturned great theme and imagery flowed well read well but no grammar issues and great descriptive contents thanks for this and good luck talk to Ricky
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Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Ricky! I appreciate the good luck talk, and the feedback on the frog race. I had fun writing it.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from pbomar1115
A race before to the sunset turned out to be more important than a race against the other frogs. The story has action and is informative too. The winning frog has a treat after winning the race.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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A race before to the sunset turned out to be more important than a race against the other frogs. The story has action and is informative too. The winning frog has a treat after winning the race.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you for the excellent six star rating. It is much appreciated, as well as the feedback. You're the greatest. I won't send a message back on PM, or it will reveal who I am. Understand I am grateful!
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You're welcome.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Quick question for you - what's the race?
I know there's only 100 words to play about with here but it's a little vague.
Nothing wrong with what's here, just not really enough info.
All the best
GMG
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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Hi there,
Quick question for you - what's the race?
I know there's only 100 words to play about with here but it's a little vague.
Nothing wrong with what's here, just not really enough info.
All the best
GMG
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Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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The race for the bank and for the yummy bugs. I'll see if I can tighten it up.
Thanks for the feedback!
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahaha! G'day Anon.
I thought it was some young girl trying to make it as a bank manager and nobody had been able to do it at her age hahahaha!
You had me going all the way through and the twist broke me up.
Absolutely perfect contest entry and I wish you the best of luck in it. Now, I'm off to eat me some grubs in a white bug sauce.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Hahahaha! G'day Anon.
I thought it was some young girl trying to make it as a bank manager and nobody had been able to do it at her age hahahaha!
You had me going all the way through and the twist broke me up.
Absolutely perfect contest entry and I wish you the best of luck in it. Now, I'm off to eat me some grubs in a white bug sauce.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you for your six star rating, and for your culinary tip. I'm sure Jenny would love to cook up some buggy recipes with you!
Take care, Walu Feral!
Anon.
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Hahahaha! Always welcome.
Good luck with it. This is a puuuurrrrfffeeeccct entry me thinks.