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Comment from Dawn Munro
Not that it matters in this flipping INCREDIBLE poem, but I have to say something to fill up the lines... capitalize for the brand name, and add a hyphen: "Crazy-glued..."
Holy shit, Dude. I'm speechless (and a little bit afraid of you) - LOL.
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Not that it matters in this flipping INCREDIBLE poem, but I have to say something to fill up the lines... capitalize for the brand name, and add a hyphen: "Crazy-glued..."
Holy shit, Dude. I'm speechless (and a little bit afraid of you) - LOL.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from Hitcher
Born innocent but slowly dehumanized by the world around him not giving a fuck and abusing him for their own pleasure. Causing the birth of a fledgling psychopath who grows into a one soul destroying, evil, destroy the world and everything in it. way too many of them around these days mate. A master-class of free verse, I for one Fucking loved it mate...Stunning!!
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Born innocent but slowly dehumanized by the world around him not giving a fuck and abusing him for their own pleasure. Causing the birth of a fledgling psychopath who grows into a one soul destroying, evil, destroy the world and everything in it. way too many of them around these days mate. A master-class of free verse, I for one Fucking loved it mate...Stunning!!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from robina1978
The photo of a baby in utero complements your long poem perfectly. You wrote about this killing psychopath, who kills and more. I don't think I ever saw you write like this. It is a true free verse. Also it has a nice general layout.
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The photo of a baby in utero complements your long poem perfectly. You wrote about this killing psychopath, who kills and more. I don't think I ever saw you write like this. It is a true free verse. Also it has a nice general layout.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is poetry turned into performance art. Very well done. I like the way you use color to differentiate between voices, and the decreasing font size at the end to picture life fading away.
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This is poetry turned into performance art. Very well done. I like the way you use color to differentiate between voices, and the decreasing font size at the end to picture life fading away.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from Kazzawin
Yep...
I got this with one read, not something that happens to me every time with free verse.
The killer's chilling and perfunctory discharge of life is difficult to read but I think you got inside this person's head. Quite genius to intersperse with reports and interviews as he goes along popping off those who did him harm in his sad, lonely life.
Yet we never seem to learn any lessons from their misery!
Well written poem worthy of the rating because it gave me goosebumps and an overwhelming sense of sadness reading it...and any piece of literature that does that deserves recognition : )
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Yep...
I got this with one read, not something that happens to me every time with free verse.
The killer's chilling and perfunctory discharge of life is difficult to read but I think you got inside this person's head. Quite genius to intersperse with reports and interviews as he goes along popping off those who did him harm in his sad, lonely life.
Yet we never seem to learn any lessons from their misery!
Well written poem worthy of the rating because it gave me goosebumps and an overwhelming sense of sadness reading it...and any piece of literature that does that deserves recognition : )
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Mikey
= Excellent back and forth on this one--made for two POV's in an entirely different way.
= Your formatting/colors enhance your words as well.
= Super write, my friend.
= Cheers, J
= Have a good day/evening!
(*>*) Remember--A Smile Is A Frown Upside Town (*<*)
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Hi, Mikey
= Excellent back and forth on this one--made for two POV's in an entirely different way.
= Your formatting/colors enhance your words as well.
= Super write, my friend.
= Cheers, J
= Have a good day/evening!
(*>*) Remember--A Smile Is A Frown Upside Town (*<*)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from okanaganbell
Well, it definitely is FREE verse...A little complicated but understandable...If it's your own understanding you seek. I find the font you use (on purpose I think) is to distract from the mayhem happening in each verse or each part of the tale...If it is a tale at all. If this is going on in your head all the time...The scramble of feelings, I think you must be disorganized and messy. But, doesn't that make a good writer? I think.
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Well, it definitely is FREE verse...A little complicated but understandable...If it's your own understanding you seek. I find the font you use (on purpose I think) is to distract from the mayhem happening in each verse or each part of the tale...If it is a tale at all. If this is going on in your head all the time...The scramble of feelings, I think you must be disorganized and messy. But, doesn't that make a good writer? I think.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017
Comment from johnwilson
First, I had to take a peek at the viewer's thoughts on this awesome piece!! I liked Dean's approach in that he stated it wasn't his cup of tea, but you could expect a lot of sixes. This is so profound and the language fits perfectly. I love the 2 voices, and how you made the killer's words rhyme so perfectly without any sacrificing. If I described what I liked best about this piece, I would need to copy the entire thing!
Thank you for penning what needs to be said about humanity.
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First, I had to take a peek at the viewer's thoughts on this awesome piece!! I liked Dean's approach in that he stated it wasn't his cup of tea, but you could expect a lot of sixes. This is so profound and the language fits perfectly. I love the 2 voices, and how you made the killer's words rhyme so perfectly without any sacrificing. If I described what I liked best about this piece, I would need to copy the entire thing!
Thank you for penning what needs to be said about humanity.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017
Comment from apky
This one hits hard, which I believe is just the way you wanted it to.
After all, it's a social criticism of our insane times, with insane people in places of power, whom I personally often feel should meet their own Lee Harvey Oswald.
This may be some provocative piece, but at least you're trying to both hold the miror before our eyes as well as force some deliberation into finding answers.
Great job, Michael.
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This one hits hard, which I believe is just the way you wanted it to.
After all, it's a social criticism of our insane times, with insane people in places of power, whom I personally often feel should meet their own Lee Harvey Oswald.
This may be some provocative piece, but at least you're trying to both hold the miror before our eyes as well as force some deliberation into finding answers.
Great job, Michael.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh wow, this is gut wrenching and one that needs to be felt...yes felt, not just read. May I have permission to use it at a meeting I am going to?
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Oh wow, this is gut wrenching and one that needs to be felt...yes felt, not just read. May I have permission to use it at a meeting I am going to?
Comment Written 05-Nov-2017