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Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "By Siding Spring - the beginning"Fiction and non-fiction prose
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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
People will probably tell you the first sentence was too long but I understood why you made the descriptive part that strong. Very well done
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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People will probably tell you the first sentence was too long but I understood why you made the descriptive part that strong. Very well done
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I have a nasty habit of writing long sentences - one I constantly try to avoid. I was aware that the first one was long, but went with it anyway. I might still change it though, if it bugs enough people - or me lol Thanks for the tip, and the kind comments - Craig
Comment from Teri7
Craig, This is a great opening line you have penned for the contest. You used a lot of great descriptive wording that should draw readers into the story. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Craig, This is a great opening line you have penned for the contest. You used a lot of great descriptive wording that should draw readers into the story. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Many thanks for the kind comments, Teri, and for the good wishes as well. It's not really a contest this time, just a writing group exercise :) Cheers, Craig