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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Voices Pt.1"A Romantic, Superhero-like, Geek Horror story.
30 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
I just love the line: the future of the world armed with only the lessons learned from his collection of superhero comic books.
I can feel his terror, the compounding mountains of bullies in his life and feel like there is no way out. Then, Superman saves the day.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2019
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I just love the line: the future of the world armed with only the lessons learned from his collection of superhero comic books.
I can feel his terror, the compounding mountains of bullies in his life and feel like there is no way out. Then, Superman saves the day.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2019
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Wow! Thank you for an awesome rating!
Comment from Raul1
It is an alright story. I have read something more interesting than this one. You could have written something more like friendly fiction. This story is quite disturbing. It needs a lot of work.
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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It is an alright story. I have read something more interesting than this one. You could have written something more like friendly fiction. This story is quite disturbing. It needs a lot of work.
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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So, I should conform to a standard of thought is what you are saying.
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Yes.
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Explain this conformity of thought more specifically. I?m curious
Comment from pbomar1115
To a little boy, things in the dark are challenging. Not breathing, one of the things unnoticeable to the mysterious enemy, is what keeps him safe.
Phillip
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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To a little boy, things in the dark are challenging. Not breathing, one of the things unnoticeable to the mysterious enemy, is what keeps him safe.
Phillip
Comment Written 05-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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Awesome! Thank you!
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You're welcome.
Comment from JLR
A very complete addition to an evolving storyline with great dialogue mixed with strong character development. It will be interesting to see what's beyond in coming writing. Continued success.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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A very complete addition to an evolving storyline with great dialogue mixed with strong character development. It will be interesting to see what's beyond in coming writing. Continued success.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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Thank you! I appreciate your helpful and needed input, as well as encouragement.
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a very interesting chapter. Very realistic. Your dialogue makes the reader connect have empathy for your main character. I do hope that thought what would superman do will give him the courage to go on. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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This is a very interesting chapter. Very realistic. Your dialogue makes the reader connect have empathy for your main character. I do hope that thought what would superman do will give him the courage to go on. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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Thank you. The answer to your question is actually already up on the next chapter, ?Voices Pt. 2.?
Thank you for your generous rating and helpful review!
Comment from Patty Palmer
Voices in your head. Real or imaginary, Voices good or bad voices. Voices unknown or familiar. Voices from today or yesterday.
Pay no heed to the voices, unless................
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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Voices in your head. Real or imaginary, Voices good or bad voices. Voices unknown or familiar. Voices from today or yesterday.
Pay no heed to the voices, unless................
Comment Written 05-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from DonandVicki
You have a very compelling start to your supernatural story. I can feel the darkness in your words and the dialogue engages the readers imagination. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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You have a very compelling start to your supernatural story. I can feel the darkness in your words and the dialogue engages the readers imagination. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thank you! Your generous stars and genuine review are much appreciated and valued to me as an amateur writer. I hope you can venture further into this developing project with the additional twenty chapters already available and found on my portfolio/fanstory profile. Thank you again!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Cybertron1986
Here I am reading chapter three knowing that I didn't read the first chapter of your to find out what is the the mysterious shadow and why the boy is in fear of and why.
Gert
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Hello Cybertron1986
Here I am reading chapter three knowing that I didn't read the first chapter of your to find out what is the the mysterious shadow and why the boy is in fear of and why.
Gert
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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There?s more to the story as this is chapter three. Actually, twenty chapters are already available. Thank you for your generous stars and feedback. It helps me greatly!
-Euell
Comment from Cindy Warren
I hope he will listen to the Superman voice, even if it's imaginary. He can do it. I think any man who would call his son a loser is an asshole. Eu El needs to find out who he really is. I'm going to try and catch up on this. It's good.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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I hope he will listen to the Superman voice, even if it's imaginary. He can do it. I think any man who would call his son a loser is an asshole. Eu El needs to find out who he really is. I'm going to try and catch up on this. It's good.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your generous rating and genuine review! I really needed to hear that honesty. I have twenty chapters already up, and I just decided to promote this because, I?m looking for inspiration to continue this project. I hope you are able to read the addition chapters which are located on my profile. Thank you again!
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Thank you for your generous rating and genuine review! I really needed to hear that honesty. I have twenty chapters already up, and I just decided to promote this because, I?m looking for inspiration to continue this project. I hope you are able to read the addition chapters which are located on my profile. Thank you again!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is well penned and flows well beginning to end. The storyline build tension an suspense nicely keeping the reader engaged and entertained. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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This is well penned and flows well beginning to end. The storyline build tension an suspense nicely keeping the reader engaged and entertained. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thank you! I appreciate your kind and helpful review along with the generous rating. Thanks for starting my day with a positive note!
