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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Bill,
I enjoyed your poem very much. While it told of the metamorphosis of the caterpillar, I believe there is more to it that just that aspect. The colors chosen seem to be of the monarch. But the words in black make some interesting conclusions about life when one reads just those words. I believe they are describing man's journey through life's struggles while on this Earth. [that's my opinion & I'm sticking with it].
Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Bill,
I enjoyed your poem very much. While it told of the metamorphosis of the caterpillar, I believe there is more to it that just that aspect. The colors chosen seem to be of the monarch. But the words in black make some interesting conclusions about life when one reads just those words. I believe they are describing man's journey through life's struggles while on this Earth. [that's my opinion & I'm sticking with it].
Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thanks, Jan, for seeing all there is to see. Bill
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I knew there was more to it than just 2 colors, right?
Comment from Spitfire
I'm impressed. This can be interpreted literally or metaphorically. Made me think of the circle of life. One lesson here-- beauty can cost your life.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I'm impressed. This can be interpreted literally or metaphorically. Made me think of the circle of life. One lesson here-- beauty can cost your life.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Well, we've made it this far. Thanks, Shari, for giving this a look and the high marks.
Comment from Possummagic
I have to give you a six for this wonderful story about the lifecycle of the caterpillar because you caught me absolutely by surprise when the blue Jay snatched him off the branch. I liked the picture of the beautiful butterfly but if you don't mind me saying so you could have picked a more majestic image to go with your great poem. I loved the way the other insects watched on with varied degrees of interest and then "shrugged their shoulders" and got on with life. A really great story Bill. PM
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I have to give you a six for this wonderful story about the lifecycle of the caterpillar because you caught me absolutely by surprise when the blue Jay snatched him off the branch. I liked the picture of the beautiful butterfly but if you don't mind me saying so you could have picked a more majestic image to go with your great poem. I loved the way the other insects watched on with varied degrees of interest and then "shrugged their shoulders" and got on with life. A really great story Bill. PM
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thanks, PM, for giving this a look and the high rating. I struggled with the picture. Most were of the Monarch on a flower. This one assumes no niceties.
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It was still a great story and I thoroughly enjoyed it! PM
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Bill. I'm not sure what the significance of the black words are but the actual story reads great. We had a butterfly tree in the back yard and it definitely hatched many butterflies. It was amazing to watch them from caterpillar to Monarch, then to fly away. Enjoyed the write. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hello Bill. I'm not sure what the significance of the black words are but the actual story reads great. We had a butterfly tree in the back yard and it definitely hatched many butterflies. It was amazing to watch them from caterpillar to Monarch, then to fly away. Enjoyed the write. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thanks, kiwi, for giving this a look. Black and orange were an attempt at mimicking the butterfly's coloring.
Comment from damommy
Just shows it's not safe to be beautiful. That's how I've lived so long. lol
A sad ending for the caterpillar, but he became part of life's cycle. The spider is still going, and so is the beetle. Baby birds received needed nourishment.
Very good story.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Just shows it's not safe to be beautiful. That's how I've lived so long. lol
A sad ending for the caterpillar, but he became part of life's cycle. The spider is still going, and so is the beetle. Baby birds received needed nourishment.
Very good story.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thanks, da, for giving this a look and for the six. Bill
Comment from apky
You always amaze me with your out of the ordinary clever writing.
I'd opt to be the butterfly, desopite all the rigors of going through all those changes.
Liked best:
Nearby, a caterpillar inched along the ground, mindless of the drama above. It's only care was to fulfill its destiny, by reaching a high branch and weaving the blanket of promise.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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You always amaze me with your out of the ordinary clever writing.
I'd opt to be the butterfly, desopite all the rigors of going through all those changes.
Liked best:
Nearby, a caterpillar inched along the ground, mindless of the drama above. It's only care was to fulfill its destiny, by reaching a high branch and weaving the blanket of promise.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Like the great man, Fernando Lamas said, "I'd rather look good than feel good."
Comment from muezza56
i really enjoyed reading this insight into the fate and destiny of various creatures of the insect world, and the insects own views on their lot in life. beauty does no promise of success, destiny awaited, as others viewed the butterfly with envious eyes, they realised their own vulnerabilities were perhaps not so vulnerable. unlike the innocent caterpillar, whose only thought was of to await its own transmogrification, not realising that bird, or spider awaited with hungry eyes and empty bellies...
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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i really enjoyed reading this insight into the fate and destiny of various creatures of the insect world, and the insects own views on their lot in life. beauty does no promise of success, destiny awaited, as others viewed the butterfly with envious eyes, they realised their own vulnerabilities were perhaps not so vulnerable. unlike the innocent caterpillar, whose only thought was of to await its own transmogrification, not realising that bird, or spider awaited with hungry eyes and empty bellies...
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thank you, muezza, for the generous review. Bill
Comment from royowen
Ahh! The cycle of life, life and death being closely related and an important part of existence. A marvellously pragmatic look at life and purpose, (it looks a little grim on the surface) wel done Bill, a great observational piece, the plumbing of the depths of wisdom, that very puzzling paradox. Beautiful written and wisely presented. Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Ahh! The cycle of life, life and death being closely related and an important part of existence. A marvellously pragmatic look at life and purpose, (it looks a little grim on the surface) wel done Bill, a great observational piece, the plumbing of the depths of wisdom, that very puzzling paradox. Beautiful written and wisely presented. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thanks, Roy, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from lyenochka
Oh noooo! Wait, you gave us such a dramatic rebirth of the caterpillar into a butterfly and * poof * - it's gone - blue jay food. I guess some times beautiful beginnings can end very badly. Interesting font colors - I guess monarch butterfly colors?
One spag:
"It's only care" (Its)
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Oh noooo! Wait, you gave us such a dramatic rebirth of the caterpillar into a butterfly and * poof * - it's gone - blue jay food. I guess some times beautiful beginnings can end very badly. Interesting font colors - I guess monarch butterfly colors?
One spag:
"It's only care" (Its)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the help, lyenochka. One man's beautiful butterfly is another's regurgitated dinner. Sounds like moral.