Your future father will be waiting
What lies beneth20 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is an excellent contest entry. What an intriguing story. Not many could say their ancestor met Lenin. You will do well in the contest with this story. It is unique.
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This is an excellent contest entry. What an intriguing story. Not many could say their ancestor met Lenin. You will do well in the contest with this story. It is unique.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was an amazing story, and I expect there are many more who survived those days and can tell equally harrowing stories. It was a terrible time, and I only know of them through history books and people like you who tell the story. This was an excellent portrayal of Fate, and a brilliant contest entry. Good luck, sorry I'm out of 6s. :) Sandra xx
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That was an amazing story, and I expect there are many more who survived those days and can tell equally harrowing stories. It was a terrible time, and I only know of them through history books and people like you who tell the story. This was an excellent portrayal of Fate, and a brilliant contest entry. Good luck, sorry I'm out of 6s. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
Comment from IndigoLady
I think you need an "of our" or of no our. in this "Our lives are so unique to each of us and so common when related to the daily cosmic synergy our existence as humans spins on. "
this phrase "shook Lenin's hand. You may not think of it too much" as "too much of it"
This is a sad but uplifting story and the "fate" part of the concept is the most closely aligned to actual "fate" that I've read so far. Good Luck in the Contest.
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I think you need an "of our" or of no our. in this "Our lives are so unique to each of us and so common when related to the daily cosmic synergy our existence as humans spins on. "
this phrase "shook Lenin's hand. You may not think of it too much" as "too much of it"
This is a sad but uplifting story and the "fate" part of the concept is the most closely aligned to actual "fate" that I've read so far. Good Luck in the Contest.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
Comment from JDRBAR
Very well written with a reminder that we are all part of those that came before us. Like many others, I too, come from a set of ancestors who left all they had to change the destiny of their descendants.
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Very well written with a reminder that we are all part of those that came before us. Like many others, I too, come from a set of ancestors who left all they had to change the destiny of their descendants.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
Comment from Bill Schott
This is an interesting account of a family fleeing the no-winners situation of Russia and World War II. A neat slice ot of history surrounding witnesses of it.
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This is an interesting account of a family fleeing the no-winners situation of Russia and World War II. A neat slice ot of history surrounding witnesses of it.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
Comment from MJ McIntire
This is quite a story. I was completely fascinated by it. I am a firm believer in fate and how our lives are etched out for us and we meet who we meet because we are meant to.
I love the ending, the woman becoming your maternal grandmother.
MJ
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This is quite a story. I was completely fascinated by it. I am a firm believer in fate and how our lives are etched out for us and we meet who we meet because we are meant to.
I love the ending, the woman becoming your maternal grandmother.
MJ
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
Comment from tfawcus
A fascinating glimpse of history through the eyes of your family and its effect upon your own life subsequently.
From a reader's point of view, perhaps it is the personal angle that is more gripping than the plain cold facts of history.
A paragraph like the one below would make an excellent 'hook' into this story, to galvanise the attention right from the outset:
"One night with only the clothes on their backs, he and his family left their lives of abundance, love, and happiness to run away from Stalin's idiotic behavior while trying hard not to fall in Hitler's ring of fire, on the other side of the conflict. "
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A fascinating glimpse of history through the eyes of your family and its effect upon your own life subsequently.
From a reader's point of view, perhaps it is the personal angle that is more gripping than the plain cold facts of history.
A paragraph like the one below would make an excellent 'hook' into this story, to galvanise the attention right from the outset:
"One night with only the clothes on their backs, he and his family left their lives of abundance, love, and happiness to run away from Stalin's idiotic behavior while trying hard not to fall in Hitler's ring of fire, on the other side of the conflict. "
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
Comment from jenintorre
I found your story extremely interesting and very well written. You are very lucky to have learned all those facts about your family. I believe my background was similar and wish I'd found out more before it was too late. Compulsive reading. Good luck in the contest.
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I found your story extremely interesting and very well written. You are very lucky to have learned all those facts about your family. I believe my background was similar and wish I'd found out more before it was too late. Compulsive reading. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
Comment from Jan Anderegg
How full of surprises is life? How rich one can be with only a change of clothes--alive only because of the warm hearts and kindness of strangers?
Wow, what a profound statement that is, and how true. I enjoyed reading your story and it is amazing how life twists and turns and brings the most unexpected conclusions. I've often wondered how life would change here in the United States if we experienced what people in Europe did during WW2.
I didn't see any errors or edits needed.
Best of luck in the contest.
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How full of surprises is life? How rich one can be with only a change of clothes--alive only because of the warm hearts and kindness of strangers?
Wow, what a profound statement that is, and how true. I enjoyed reading your story and it is amazing how life twists and turns and brings the most unexpected conclusions. I've often wondered how life would change here in the United States if we experienced what people in Europe did during WW2.
I didn't see any errors or edits needed.
Best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
Comment from Curly Girly
Your story was interesting to read. Indeed, those were dark and terrible days in Europe / Romania / Russia
To make matters worse, all that cruelty and hardship was heightened by cold winters. To be poor and cold and have a war--it hardly gets worse than that. Your family were fortunate to have survived. According to a documentary I saw, Starlin killed 20 million of his own people by allowing them to starve.
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Your story was interesting to read. Indeed, those were dark and terrible days in Europe / Romania / Russia
To make matters worse, all that cruelty and hardship was heightened by cold winters. To be poor and cold and have a war--it hardly gets worse than that. Your family were fortunate to have survived. According to a documentary I saw, Starlin killed 20 million of his own people by allowing them to starve.
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
