Comment from rama devi

Excellent

I've seen a number of haiku satires about the form of haiku, so the concept is not new, but your metaphor and delivery is fresh and well voiced. Imaginative. Well done. I also like the medley of S and L sounds. Fun write. Clever entry. Good luck.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Thanks for the great review, rd.

reply by rama devi on 31-Aug-2017

:-))))

Comment from Daniel Silverhawk

Excellent

A funny entry and a humorous picture to go along with it. A good entry for this contest and a good job keeping the 5-7-5 syllable count. Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing

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 Comment Written 23-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Thanks for the great review.

Comment from EverInParadise

Excellent

Very fun and clever haiku. that picture certainly stands well in supporting your poem. My husband and his brother used to get me squashed in the middle when ever they could. This happy piece taken from a prompt made me smile.

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 Comment Written 23-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Thanks for the kind review.