I'm Not a Rock. I'm But an Island.
Do rocks feel pain?49 total reviews
Comment from Thal1959
This has been a good day, Andre, for depressing works. A lot of people writing of introspection and pain. I haven't heard the S&F song in a long time, so it caught me by surprise when you had written, "and my records to protect me," while they sang "my poetry." I would have thought you would have left that line intact. Oh, well... like so many others, if you're having some tough times, Andre, I hope you'll pull through them.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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This has been a good day, Andre, for depressing works. A lot of people writing of introspection and pain. I haven't heard the S&F song in a long time, so it caught me by surprise when you had written, "and my records to protect me," while they sang "my poetry." I would have thought you would have left that line intact. Oh, well... like so many others, if you're having some tough times, Andre, I hope you'll pull through them.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Oh, no, Thal1959, back when I was eighteen and wrote this rewrite I listened to records to protect me. Led by S&G, they got me through some hard times. Thank you for your review.
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Glad to hear it, Andre.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Andre, I love the way you have rewritten Simon and Garfunkel's great song. You've mixed their words with your own which have made them(the words) personal to you. I like it. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Hi Andre, I love the way you have rewritten Simon and Garfunkel's great song. You've mixed their words with your own which have made them(the words) personal to you. I like it. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Yes, Ulla, I personalized this for my life at the time. Thank you for your review and for wishing me luck in the contest.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sis Cat,
This is a fine parody of the Simon's I Am a Rock
with and interesting shift in the lyrics.
I have a few small suggestions for rhythm:
I've built walls.
[They're] a fortress thin and fragile [or omit "they're" completely]
[that none may] penetrate.
I have great need of friendship.
Lack of it [brings] pain.
Lack of laughter, lack of loving I sustain.
I'm not a rock. I'm but an island.
Just a suggestion. In the end, it is always the poet/songwriter's choice
Well done
Best wishes in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Hello Sis Cat,
This is a fine parody of the Simon's I Am a Rock
with and interesting shift in the lyrics.
I have a few small suggestions for rhythm:
I've built walls.
[They're] a fortress thin and fragile [or omit "they're" completely]
[that none may] penetrate.
I have great need of friendship.
Lack of it [brings] pain.
Lack of laughter, lack of loving I sustain.
I'm not a rock. I'm but an island.
Just a suggestion. In the end, it is always the poet/songwriter's choice
Well done
Best wishes in the contest
RS
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Thank you, RS, for your review and suggestions. I adopted the omission of "they're" because I agree that its absence improves rhythm. The other two suggestions would change the original thrust of my parody too much. I appreciate your suggestion anyhow. Thank you for your contest well wishes, too.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Andre,
I enjoyed your redo of the great song. Yours flows well with the same feeling/beat. Your use of descriptive words adds great imagery to your poem. Readers can 'feel' the author's pain & isolation. I know the original song & yours 'fits'.
Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Andre,
I enjoyed your redo of the great song. Yours flows well with the same feeling/beat. Your use of descriptive words adds great imagery to your poem. Readers can 'feel' the author's pain & isolation. I know the original song & yours 'fits'.
Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Jan, for your encouraging review of my rewrite that 'fits.' Thanks also for your best wishes.
Comment from LIJ Red
A well-done parody of an excellent song. I often wondered how much Nately--
Art Garfunkel--had to do with the wording of the lyrics. When the team split,
a lot of originality seemed to be gone.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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A well-done parody of an excellent song. I often wondered how much Nately--
Art Garfunkel--had to do with the wording of the lyrics. When the team split,
a lot of originality seemed to be gone.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Thank you, LIJ Red, for your generous review of my parody of an excellent song. I feel that Simon kept writing great songs after the split, but the songs he performed in the 1960's with Art hold a special place in many people's hearts. Thanks again.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a good rewrite of Simon and Garfunkel's song using a mixture or their lyrics and your words. Seems like this man needs to let his fragile walls fall to let people in to learn love and maybe have a better reason to feel pain and cry. Love is great even though it can bring pain. A long time ago I wrote a poem inspired by I am a Rock.
One of my favorite S & G songs.
Keep wriing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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This is a good rewrite of Simon and Garfunkel's song using a mixture or their lyrics and your words. Seems like this man needs to let his fragile walls fall to let people in to learn love and maybe have a better reason to feel pain and cry. Love is great even though it can bring pain. A long time ago I wrote a poem inspired by I am a Rock.
One of my favorite S & G songs.
Keep wriing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Oh, DP, thank you for your generous review of my song lyrics redo I wrote thirty-five years ago when I was eighteen. I'll keep writing, and this time I won't stop.
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You're welcome.
dp
Comment from jaded831
I enjoyed reading your poem. I felt sad and happy. Happy because I can relate and it made me feel connected to the poet. Sad because the poem is very moving. Any poem that can make the reader emotional is a wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I felt sad and happy. Happy because I can relate and it made me feel connected to the poet. Sad because the poem is very moving. Any poem that can make the reader emotional is a wonderful poem.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Thank you, jaded831, for your review. I am glad my happy/sad poem moved you.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hiya Andre
This poem made for an fantastic read, I loved that song.
It flowed very nicely. Comprehensible and very professionally written. The emotional reflections are insightful and impressive. Excellent chosen words.
It is has a perfect tone and the language used created marvellous imagery.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Hiya Andre
This poem made for an fantastic read, I loved that song.
It flowed very nicely. Comprehensible and very professionally written. The emotional reflections are insightful and impressive. Excellent chosen words.
It is has a perfect tone and the language used created marvellous imagery.
Mitchell
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Mitchell, for your generous, heartfelt review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is very good. What if you were a village. Sometimes it takes a village. I would rather be an island. Covered with tropical vegetation in some secluded paradise would suit me just fine.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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This is very good. What if you were a village. Sometimes it takes a village. I would rather be an island. Covered with tropical vegetation in some secluded paradise would suit me just fine.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Yes, Thomas, I'd rather be an island, too. Thank you for your review.
Comment from JW
Thanks for sharing this parody.
In reading this before I realized that this work was meant to be a parody, I quickly got to thinking after reading a few lines - Hey! I recognized these words. I heard this before. Then it dawned on me that it came from one of my favorite singers, Paul Simon.
I love his songs. And, you are not the only one whose life got assistance through hard times from this song. JW
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Thanks for sharing this parody.
In reading this before I realized that this work was meant to be a parody, I quickly got to thinking after reading a few lines - Hey! I recognized these words. I heard this before. Then it dawned on me that it came from one of my favorite singers, Paul Simon.
I love his songs. And, you are not the only one whose life got assistance through hard times from this song. JW
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Yes, JW, Paul's songs have given my life much assistance. I was in my nadir when I wrote this parody. Thank you for your review.
