Selections For Book Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Ashes"possible selections for inclusion in book project
63 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Michael,
I thought this piece was smart and creative. It said a lot about people in our past and about memories. At least that was my take on it.
I, personally, ADORED the first three. Not so much the fourth. Thought you kinda got in your own way in that one, really. But the others were well worth the six!! Yay! Good luck!
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Michael,
I thought this piece was smart and creative. It said a lot about people in our past and about memories. At least that was my take on it.
I, personally, ADORED the first three. Not so much the fourth. Thought you kinda got in your own way in that one, really. But the others were well worth the six!! Yay! Good luck!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from nomi338
This is a very unique poetic form. I cannot recall ever seeing its type before. I have just decided that I like it. Of even greater importance to me is the content and theme of the work. Most folk I am certain think that all that is left from fire is ash. But let us think about that for a moment. Fire can cleanse, fir can transform certain materials that may not be consumed by fire like certain metals, iron ore comes to mind right away. I won't take the time to get any deeper on this subject, but I found it intriguing and was very much impressed by it.
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This is a very unique poetic form. I cannot recall ever seeing its type before. I have just decided that I like it. Of even greater importance to me is the content and theme of the work. Most folk I am certain think that all that is left from fire is ash. But let us think about that for a moment. Fire can cleanse, fir can transform certain materials that may not be consumed by fire like certain metals, iron ore comes to mind right away. I won't take the time to get any deeper on this subject, but I found it intriguing and was very much impressed by it.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from Poetofheart2013
wow what a really great poem very colorful love the pictures and how you have laid out it just pop out at you. really great Job.
I really enjoy reading it
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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wow what a really great poem very colorful love the pictures and how you have laid out it just pop out at you. really great Job.
I really enjoy reading it
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Wow. How encouraging. I'm so pleased you enjoyed and found it to your liking. I noticed you gave it four stars. Was that intentional. No big deal, but sometimes my finger slips. LOL In any case, thank you kindly, mike
Comment from way2gokevs
A lot of thought and effort has gone into this work of art.
Lovely poetry all the way through your work.
Pleasure to peruse your work.
Have a great day.
Cheers.
Kev
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A lot of thought and effort has gone into this work of art.
Lovely poetry all the way through your work.
Pleasure to peruse your work.
Have a great day.
Cheers.
Kev
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well done mikey with this contest poem, and I think the different styles you've chosen work well as one flows into the next. My favourite though is number one, no really I like them all, I can't choose. Good luck in the contest.
cheers
valda
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Well done mikey with this contest poem, and I think the different styles you've chosen work well as one flows into the next. My favourite though is number one, no really I like them all, I can't choose. Good luck in the contest.
cheers
valda
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from Cycler
Hi Michael
This is the third time I've tried to review this ... computer rebooted, then Fanstory rebooted ...
Is it my words?
Anyway
Great beginning "why do I want you to see ashes" all the way to "I love you" your words, symbolism, fonts, images are all alluring and fit together beautifully
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Hi Michael
This is the third time I've tried to review this ... computer rebooted, then Fanstory rebooted ...
Is it my words?
Anyway
Great beginning "why do I want you to see ashes" all the way to "I love you" your words, symbolism, fonts, images are all alluring and fit together beautifully
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from Asyraf N. Jamsari
Hi Michael,
This is a very well written piece. I like the concept and the interpretations. Nice flow and nice choice of words. The artworks really complement the poem and go along very well. Thank you for sharing. Have a nice one!
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Hi Michael,
This is a very well written piece. I like the concept and the interpretations. Nice flow and nice choice of words. The artworks really complement the poem and go along very well. Thank you for sharing. Have a nice one!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Michael,
This is an awesome poem & a great entry into the contest. Your presentation is superb. I like the way the black background makes the lines/words/images pop.
I like how each poem tells a part of a story about love. There's love, love enjoyed, love lost, & love that cannot be reclaimed although live continues.
The images of the eyes are awesome & perfect, too.
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
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Michael,
This is an awesome poem & a great entry into the contest. Your presentation is superb. I like the way the black background makes the lines/words/images pop.
I like how each poem tells a part of a story about love. There's love, love enjoyed, love lost, & love that cannot be reclaimed although live continues.
The images of the eyes are awesome & perfect, too.
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 26-Jul-2017
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem has a lot of things going on that point to burn out (BURN OUT!! Y'know? Ashes?) You've thrown everything into this effort. The colors, the literary devices, and the extended metaphor make this work the example of your own contest. Hope you can get those others thinking they stand a chance to win.
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This poem has a lot of things going on that point to burn out (BURN OUT!! Y'know? Ashes?) You've thrown everything into this effort. The colors, the literary devices, and the extended metaphor make this work the example of your own contest. Hope you can get those others thinking they stand a chance to win.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2017
Comment from Oatmeal
michaelcahill,
Well chosen words are excellent. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth. Your formatting was awesome!
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
The words you chose worked well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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michaelcahill,
Well chosen words are excellent. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth. Your formatting was awesome!
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
The words you chose worked well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 26-Jul-2017
