Retribution
A Chant Royal - see note below38 total reviews
Comment from estory
This is a great poem. I loved the stately meter, the rhythm of it, the intricate rhyme scheme, the alliterations, it all added up to plenty of music to the ear. nice job contrasting the riches of this life with the inevitability of death, the starkness of it. I think the rich, almost baroque language really set the scene for the rich man in his ornamented house. estory
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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This is a great poem. I loved the stately meter, the rhythm of it, the intricate rhyme scheme, the alliterations, it all added up to plenty of music to the ear. nice job contrasting the riches of this life with the inevitability of death, the starkness of it. I think the rich, almost baroque language really set the scene for the rich man in his ornamented house. estory
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for this lovely review, estory, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Treischel
I love the flow of this format, and your tale of Recompense was excellent. Now that I just wrote my last two Sonnets and will post them in the next couple days, I'll have to try one of these. Well done!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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I love the flow of this format, and your tale of Recompense was excellent. Now that I just wrote my last two Sonnets and will post them in the next couple days, I'll have to try one of these. Well done!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for this supportive review, Tom, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! I'm a bit behind with my reviewing as my wife has just come out of hospital, but I'll try to get to your sonnets soon. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend you have done very well with this form it reads very well smoothly but strongly through the piece and have accomplished it well I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Hello my friend you have done very well with this form it reads very well smoothly but strongly through the piece and have accomplished it well I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for this lovely review, Jill, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Chant Royal poem. Our while life is a struggle of survival. Sometimes we have more enemies than friends. We have to take our stand and never telling lies to reach our goal.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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A very well-written Chant Royal poem. Our while life is a struggle of survival. Sometimes we have more enemies than friends. We have to take our stand and never telling lies to reach our goal.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Sandra. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from francesca7
Oh my gosh.. this is so beautiful. Thank you also for the background on this form of poetry. I have just started to scratch the surface into this world of poetry and can only hope to achieve such brilliance as this. Thank you for sharing your genius with the world. I will reread often. One never tires of exquisite art. Thank you. Namaste.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Oh my gosh.. this is so beautiful. Thank you also for the background on this form of poetry. I have just started to scratch the surface into this world of poetry and can only hope to achieve such brilliance as this. Thank you for sharing your genius with the world. I will reread often. One never tires of exquisite art. Thank you. Namaste.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for this lovely review, Francesca, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! Namaste, Tony
Comment from Gloria ....
This flows oh so smoothly Tony. It has an Ozymandias tone matched up with Breaking Bad in timeless land.
Excellent imagery and deft use of many poetic devices making this poem a literary masterpiece.
Very well done my friend.
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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This flows oh so smoothly Tony. It has an Ozymandias tone matched up with Breaking Bad in timeless land.
Excellent imagery and deft use of many poetic devices making this poem a literary masterpiece.
Very well done my friend.
Gloria
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for this lovely review, Gloria, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from frierajac
This seems like a period piece of the Victorian Age to me. I get an image of
a man standing over working children with a whip. One who has worldly ambitions.
There are modern example of the form using consonance instead of true rhyme.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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This seems like a period piece of the Victorian Age to me. I get an image of
a man standing over working children with a whip. One who has worldly ambitions.
There are modern example of the form using consonance instead of true rhyme.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for this interesting review and interpretation, frierajac, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from country ranch writer
When it is ones time to pay the pied piper sometimes it is not a pleasant sight to be viewed. All is not prim and proper and suffers the ending alone alone six feet under give orvtake
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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When it is ones time to pay the pied piper sometimes it is not a pleasant sight to be viewed. All is not prim and proper and suffers the ending alone alone six feet under give orvtake
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for this interesting review, CRW, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
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Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Tony. Oh this is so good and excellent rhyme and meter and your intensity of the story was great and although you did not state who this was about it left it up to ones imagination and this although was so Old in its language could be very relevant in todays political world i really enjoyed this compostion and your authors notes helped explain the requirements for this style I love that no rhyming word is used twice ( I always try to do this with my poetry I never use the same rhyme word ) The refrain was so excellent A most prudent warning that an arrogance of aelf importance will end badly LOL A most well worth read. A bookcase for me Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Hi Tony. Oh this is so good and excellent rhyme and meter and your intensity of the story was great and although you did not state who this was about it left it up to ones imagination and this although was so Old in its language could be very relevant in todays political world i really enjoyed this compostion and your authors notes helped explain the requirements for this style I love that no rhyming word is used twice ( I always try to do this with my poetry I never use the same rhyme word ) The refrain was so excellent A most prudent warning that an arrogance of aelf importance will end badly LOL A most well worth read. A bookcase for me Cheers Christine
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for this lovely review, Chrissy, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! One or two people related it to the current political scene! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Superb construction, Tony! Wonder why these French forms love repeated lines so much. The meter is a strong marching rhythm which goes so well with the theme. I kept thinking, does the subject like to tweet? Or does he meddle in other countries' politics through hacking? But it could be Napoleon or even anyone at any time in their lives when ruled by pride.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Superb construction, Tony! Wonder why these French forms love repeated lines so much. The meter is a strong marching rhythm which goes so well with the theme. I kept thinking, does the subject like to tweet? Or does he meddle in other countries' politics through hacking? But it could be Napoleon or even anyone at any time in their lives when ruled by pride.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Very many thanks for this lovely review, Helen, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! Several people found that the poem related to a modern political figure, though I didn't have anyone particular in mind when I wrote it. Best wishes, Tony