The Spirit and the Tide
Describing the ups and downs of life.20 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Like the tides of the ocean, her spirit will rise and then fall.
You hac=ve described every woman I have ever known. This is an excellent poem and well written.
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Like the tides of the ocean, her spirit will rise and then fall.
You hac=ve described every woman I have ever known. This is an excellent poem and well written.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
Comment from rjuselius
this is an intriguing piece of poetry dear alice! the imagery is juxtaposed with the emotion, very well thought out and executed my friend!
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a big squeeze!
rebekka x
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this is an intriguing piece of poetry dear alice! the imagery is juxtaposed with the emotion, very well thought out and executed my friend!
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a big squeeze!
rebekka x
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Funny how we perceive the ocean in different ways, I never think of it as female, but here you are relating to it as such, a personal write about your emotions relating to nature, love Dolly x
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Funny how we perceive the ocean in different ways, I never think of it as female, but here you are relating to it as such, a personal write about your emotions relating to nature, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and comparison between our spirit and the tides ofvyhe ocean. It will always rise and fall, sometimes we feel calm other times we go through rough times.
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A very well-written poem and comparison between our spirit and the tides ofvyhe ocean. It will always rise and fall, sometimes we feel calm other times we go through rough times.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
Comment from mvbrooks
The poem skillfully incorporates sensory, descriptive words that give the poem a sense of motion, such as "High tide roars swirling waters onto a lonely beach" and "With cadence the pulsing waters creep back into the distance." The sense of hope is shared in lines like "a little less frightening than the last." Strong emotion as the entity clings to the shore for peace--and then is finally pulled back into the rough waves.
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The poem skillfully incorporates sensory, descriptive words that give the poem a sense of motion, such as "High tide roars swirling waters onto a lonely beach" and "With cadence the pulsing waters creep back into the distance." The sense of hope is shared in lines like "a little less frightening than the last." Strong emotion as the entity clings to the shore for peace--and then is finally pulled back into the rough waves.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
Comment from Charmisa Parker
I really love this poem. I think that this is a great reflection that talks about the positive and negative side of life. You can see the glass either half empty or half full. Great work!
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I really love this poem. I think that this is a great reflection that talks about the positive and negative side of life. You can see the glass either half empty or half full. Great work!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
You use some excellent patches of description in this piece. I guess it's prose poetry? Good solid theme carried throughout.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Hi there,
You use some excellent patches of description in this piece. I guess it's prose poetry? Good solid theme carried throughout.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Yes, generally I write with more metrical structure, but I have been reading some free form poetry lately that I loved and I decided to write this one without structure. Thank you for the stars!
Comment from Sis Cat
Alice, this is an excellent poem in terms of tide-like rhythm and metaphoric imagery. Your descriptions and language are stunning. I have read your poem thrice and still uncover new gems of wording as if I picked up stranded seashells from the beach at low tide:
With cadence the pulsing waters creep back into the distance, each hissing lunge of the nautical hand a little less frightening than the last, until the roll of the cowering tide becomes a metronome, whispering rhythmically in her ear.
Your use of language electrifies my imagination and speaks to my heart. Describing the ups and downs of life, you conclude:
And just before he breaks her, he will once again spit her back onto the lonely beach. Rise and fall, hope and fear, peace and pain, these are the rhythms of her spirit.
This is a stunning poem. I am so thrilled I have read this today. It shows that you are indeed "a lover of poetry and life."
Thank you for sharing.
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Alice, this is an excellent poem in terms of tide-like rhythm and metaphoric imagery. Your descriptions and language are stunning. I have read your poem thrice and still uncover new gems of wording as if I picked up stranded seashells from the beach at low tide:
With cadence the pulsing waters creep back into the distance, each hissing lunge of the nautical hand a little less frightening than the last, until the roll of the cowering tide becomes a metronome, whispering rhythmically in her ear.
Your use of language electrifies my imagination and speaks to my heart. Describing the ups and downs of life, you conclude:
And just before he breaks her, he will once again spit her back onto the lonely beach. Rise and fall, hope and fear, peace and pain, these are the rhythms of her spirit.
This is a stunning poem. I am so thrilled I have read this today. It shows that you are indeed "a lover of poetry and life."
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello there friend I really enjoyed reading this poem about the way life is I really liked reading the analogy with the ocean. Good metaphor. This is a really good flow and measure thank you very much for sharing this with us
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Hello there friend I really enjoyed reading this poem about the way life is I really liked reading the analogy with the ocean. Good metaphor. This is a really good flow and measure thank you very much for sharing this with us
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you so much for sharing this well constructed poem about the spirit and all it endures in this life. I loved the way you built on the lines and summed it all up in the last stanza.
A suggestion; perhaps include a picture of a rough ocean to enhance your presentation? Use the advanced editor to use another font?
~patty~
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thank you so much for sharing this well constructed poem about the spirit and all it endures in this life. I loved the way you built on the lines and summed it all up in the last stanza.
A suggestion; perhaps include a picture of a rough ocean to enhance your presentation? Use the advanced editor to use another font?
~patty~
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
