2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Linked Tanka (After the harvest)"A collection of Japanese poetry
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Comment from robyn corum
Gypsy and Hitcher;
A super collaborative effort. Especially since you were writing together without knowing where you were going. Ha! You created a sad story of abuse but brought it to an appropriate (pretend) close as everything ends up right.
I enjoyed! Thanks!
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Gypsy and Hitcher;
A super collaborative effort. Especially since you were writing together without knowing where you were going. Ha! You created a sad story of abuse but brought it to an appropriate (pretend) close as everything ends up right.
I enjoyed! Thanks!
Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. :) I'm going to do a traditional renga with Dean and Hitcher.... guess what it will be about? hahaha... actually I have no clue but this time we will be following a template.
Gypsy
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Cool. Can't wait to see it!
Comment from apky
Well, you're doing it rather grandly.
Between the two of you, I already have
my favourite stanzas. But I'll wait for a
while before I go up to the podium and
claim with a flourish: the winner is...
Have a fab weekend ahead,
Apky
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Well, you're doing it rather grandly.
Between the two of you, I already have
my favourite stanzas. But I'll wait for a
while before I go up to the podium and
claim with a flourish: the winner is...
Have a fab weekend ahead,
Apky
Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. :)
Gypsy
Comment from Rasmine
This is really good! I'm still waiting for Dean to write the next horror haiku I guess you are too! I love collaborating but I guess life gets in the way sometimes.
I hope you are doing fine. Have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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This is really good! I'm still waiting for Dean to write the next horror haiku I guess you are too! I love collaborating but I guess life gets in the way sometimes.
I hope you are doing fine. Have a great weekend.
Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. :) I know, Dean is taking a long time. He always makes me wait. He is too busy writing contest entries. hahaha
Gypsy
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LOL! I just got done writing horror erotica--it was more comfortable than I thought.
Comment from DR DIP
This is really good Gypsy because it is real. I have heard of this exact scenario in real life. The abusive Dad, the abused mom, physically and mentally the suffering kids then her final last resort to rid the pain of him. You've really spelled out how it is well done
dip
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This is really good Gypsy because it is real. I have heard of this exact scenario in real life. The abusive Dad, the abused mom, physically and mentally the suffering kids then her final last resort to rid the pain of him. You've really spelled out how it is well done
dip
Comment Written 11-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Gypsy
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the completion of this linked tanka and its sordid story. The artwork you selected adds to the dark mood of the tale. Your personifying death was effective as well. I hope you two work together again- Joan
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Thank you for sharing the completion of this linked tanka and its sordid story. The artwork you selected adds to the dark mood of the tale. Your personifying death was effective as well. I hope you two work together again- Joan
Comment Written 11-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work. I would like to work with Hitcher again, we will see.
Gypsy
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
So I got my answer if I'd only waited and read the next message.Now I'm wondering if we're going any further but I'll just have to keep reading the messages to keep in touch. I love the ongoing story, Giddy
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So I got my answer if I'd only waited and read the next message.Now I'm wondering if we're going any further but I'll just have to keep reading the messages to keep in touch. I love the ongoing story, Giddy
Comment Written 11-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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This one was the last one, Giddy. Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Gypsy
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I am glad you printed the whole thing in reading form for us to put it all together instead of just adding the last haiku. An interresting piece of work being able to add to anothers piece. YOu two work this one good
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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I am glad you printed the whole thing in reading form for us to put it all together instead of just adding the last haiku. An interresting piece of work being able to add to anothers piece. YOu two work this one good
Comment Written 11-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Gypsy
Comment from pbomar1115
The mother and children are abused by an abusive father. She poisons the soup the abusive father will have or has for a meal. But she poisons herself as an act of love or belief, I guess, leaving a note, telling the crying kill, that they are safe from him now. Very interesting.
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The mother and children are abused by an abusive father. She poisons the soup the abusive father will have or has for a meal. But she poisons herself as an act of love or belief, I guess, leaving a note, telling the crying kill, that they are safe from him now. Very interesting.
Comment Written 11-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Gypsy
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You're welcome.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Great job! I really enjoyed this tanka poem as I did the rengu forms. Of course, not knowing the first thing about poetry, I can only take them at word value. But that's a pleasure for me. Now, we can only hope the children will be safe in a foster home. What am I talking about? This isn't real. But it could be. Wish I had a six. :-)
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Great job! I really enjoyed this tanka poem as I did the rengu forms. Of course, not knowing the first thing about poetry, I can only take them at word value. But that's a pleasure for me. Now, we can only hope the children will be safe in a foster home. What am I talking about? This isn't real. But it could be. Wish I had a six. :-)
Comment Written 11-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Gypsy
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy and Hitcher,
It's nice that you wrote this poem together. It was very interesting and well written. I enjoyed reading it and hope both of you will continue to
write poetry together, every now and again.
Kat
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Hi Gypsy and Hitcher,
It's nice that you wrote this poem together. It was very interesting and well written. I enjoyed reading it and hope both of you will continue to
write poetry together, every now and again.
Kat
Comment Written 11-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Gypsy
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Hi Gypsy,
You are a great poet and I always look forward to reading what you write.
Kat