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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hey, that was pretty good. I think three chapters would be good. I would read them... I will read them if you write them. It's interesting and amusing. Good job, honey.
Gypsy
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Hey, that was pretty good. I think three chapters would be good. I would read them... I will read them if you write them. It's interesting and amusing. Good job, honey.
Gypsy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written prose. Getting to the other side, a teacher of many years ago is the first line of judgment. The character are not sure where he is. But answer the qurstions the best he can but still feels uncomfortable.
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A very well-written prose. Getting to the other side, a teacher of many years ago is the first line of judgment. The character are not sure where he is. But answer the qurstions the best he can but still feels uncomfortable.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Mikey!
First let me say, GREAT TOPIC! And with that, I hope Debbie is ok. Have you heard from her? I sent her a PM yesterday, too, but then I saw that you posted a topic, so thanks for that. I really hope something hasn't happened. I thought she just got a new computer?
You've got me hooked, so you need to finish this screenplay. I'm with you, I went for Drabble fiction, 'cause I wanted to make the contest, but I may need to a sequel to do your topic some justice. What a cool thing to explore.
Your receptionist character is over the top. Great job! Who knew your 6th grade teacher was actually God? :)
Ok, now where's the sequel? lol
Thanks for picking up the ball and running with it... and for this fine piece.
Kim
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Hi Mikey!
First let me say, GREAT TOPIC! And with that, I hope Debbie is ok. Have you heard from her? I sent her a PM yesterday, too, but then I saw that you posted a topic, so thanks for that. I really hope something hasn't happened. I thought she just got a new computer?
You've got me hooked, so you need to finish this screenplay. I'm with you, I went for Drabble fiction, 'cause I wanted to make the contest, but I may need to a sequel to do your topic some justice. What a cool thing to explore.
Your receptionist character is over the top. Great job! Who knew your 6th grade teacher was actually God? :)
Ok, now where's the sequel? lol
Thanks for picking up the ball and running with it... and for this fine piece.
Kim
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
Really original, Michael. Reminds me a little of Steambath from back in the day, though just the general tone really.
I truly hope you please continue this. You could make this interesting for sure. Please do. PLEASE!!
NG
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Really original, Michael. Reminds me a little of Steambath from back in the day, though just the general tone really.
I truly hope you please continue this. You could make this interesting for sure. Please do. PLEASE!!
NG
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
Comment from damommy
No, it's not nutsy. It was very entertaining, and enlightening a little, too.
Don't take too long with the next part.
Wow! Great job. 8-)
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No, it's not nutsy. It was very entertaining, and enlightening a little, too.
Don't take too long with the next part.
Wow! Great job. 8-)
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Okay you had me convinced with the statements from Michael about his circumstances. Very well written and yes now you have to do the second part
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Okay you had me convinced with the statements from Michael about his circumstances. Very well written and yes now you have to do the second part
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
Comment from Pearl Edwards
No I don't think it's too nuts mikey, I liked scene 1 where we get to see the before and then scene 2 where you're not sure what's happening. Good ending to this scene, it wasn't too long for me and it will be interesting to see how far you go with it.
well cone,
cheers,
valda
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No I don't think it's too nuts mikey, I liked scene 1 where we get to see the before and then scene 2 where you're not sure what's happening. Good ending to this scene, it wasn't too long for me and it will be interesting to see how far you go with it.
well cone,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
Comment from Sasha
You had me laughing from the start. Love the picture of Mary Kay Lortono (not sure of the spelling), the teacher that had an affair with her student then got pregnant and then married him....that's a story in itself. Great work with this and I just love the confusion, something I can usually relate to. Yes, do make this a two or three parter... I just made up that word. Not much longer or I may get dizzy and pass out. I look forward to the next installment of this fun, but insane story.
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You had me laughing from the start. Love the picture of Mary Kay Lortono (not sure of the spelling), the teacher that had an affair with her student then got pregnant and then married him....that's a story in itself. Great work with this and I just love the confusion, something I can usually relate to. Yes, do make this a two or three parter... I just made up that word. Not much longer or I may get dizzy and pass out. I look forward to the next installment of this fun, but insane story.
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
Comment from sandy montgomery
Run with it. See where it goes. There are a couple of minor typos I saw but it's an interesting story line. I like the originality of this piece. I have never read anything like it. Thank you for sharing your work.
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Run with it. See where it goes. There are a couple of minor typos I saw but it's an interesting story line. I like the originality of this piece. I have never read anything like it. Thank you for sharing your work.
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2017