2017 JAPANESE POETRY
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku. The Samurai's blood covers the frigid land of winter's lament. His blood as cold as the winter snow.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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A very well-written haiku. The Samurai's blood covers the frigid land of winter's lament. His blood as cold as the winter snow.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Haiku Teacher
Haiku Society of America Member
A New Haiku Class Every Month
Comment from Marykelly
There is a warrior image in this poem with red blood contrasting with winter's snowy background. The visual effect is dramatic yet the tone is matter-of-fact.
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There is a warrior image in this poem with red blood contrasting with winter's snowy background. The visual effect is dramatic yet the tone is matter-of-fact.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Haiku Teacher
Haiku Society of America Member
A New Haiku Class Every Month
Comment from Sis Cat
Oh, this is nice, Gypsy, and I can see our discussion Monday of "The Last Samurai" inspired you. I love the feeling of the landscspe being not only desolated by winter but by war. I can see splatters of blood on the snow. "Frigid land" also implies the samurai is a cold-blooded killer, but he is just doing his job for a fee. A fine entry in the contest. I wish you much success.
Other news, I am having fun collecting, editing and retyping my mother's haiku.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Oh, this is nice, Gypsy, and I can see our discussion Monday of "The Last Samurai" inspired you. I love the feeling of the landscspe being not only desolated by winter but by war. I can see splatters of blood on the snow. "Frigid land" also implies the samurai is a cold-blooded killer, but he is just doing his job for a fee. A fine entry in the contest. I wish you much success.
Other news, I am having fun collecting, editing and retyping my mother's haiku.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. Yes, I was inspired by your question about male poets. I am so excited for you and so happy that you are working on your mother's haiku book. Yay!
Gypsy hugs,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Haiku Teacher
Haiku Society of America Member
A New Haiku Class Every Month
Comment from royowen
An excellent haiku Gypsy, so very well presented and written, and it covers a great subject, with a great satori line, great descriptive imagery, so well done, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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An excellent haiku Gypsy, so very well presented and written, and it covers a great subject, with a great satori line, great descriptive imagery, so well done, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words, Ray.
Namaste,
Gypsy
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Most welcome Gypsy
Comment from Hitcher
That was a great little Haiku Gypsy Blue Rose, the visuals were top draw friend and your subject matter was a kick-ass cool one. The Last Samurai is one of my favourite movies, I loved this one! Allow me to six you up : ) Good Luck!
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That was a great little Haiku Gypsy Blue Rose, the visuals were top draw friend and your subject matter was a kick-ass cool one. The Last Samurai is one of my favourite movies, I loved this one! Allow me to six you up : ) Good Luck!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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thank you, my friend, :) I am most grateful for the generous six stars and excellent review.
gypsy
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Gypsy,
I like this 'non-traditional' haiku (you'll probably tell me that's wrong! lol). There is something very poetic about samurai, the culture, history and so on that adds a certain weight to the denouement in the final line.
All the best
GMG
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Hi Gypsy,
I like this 'non-traditional' haiku (you'll probably tell me that's wrong! lol). There is something very poetic about samurai, the culture, history and so on that adds a certain weight to the denouement in the final line.
All the best
GMG
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you, G man. You can call this non-traditional if you want to. It's not 5/7/5 because English and Japanese are different languages. English uses syllables and Japanese use sound units called 'onji or morae'. But it is alright. I'll take nontraditional. :)
Thank you, my friend
Gypsy
Comment from Dean Kuch
Samurai were not only well versed and trained in the art of many different forms of combat and weaponry, they also had to be trained as poets, painters and philosophers too.
If they failed any phase of their training, that was it...no second chances.
Your haiku depicts the noble death of one such warrior, or a multitude, perhaps.
The balanced 4/5/4 syllable count uses excellent word economy to maximum effect.
Your presentation is perfect.
Here's a six for your efforts...
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Samurai were not only well versed and trained in the art of many different forms of combat and weaponry, they also had to be trained as poets, painters and philosophers too.
If they failed any phase of their training, that was it...no second chances.
Your haiku depicts the noble death of one such warrior, or a multitude, perhaps.
The balanced 4/5/4 syllable count uses excellent word economy to maximum effect.
Your presentation is perfect.
Here's a six for your efforts...
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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thank you for the six stars and generous review.
Gypsy
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Sure.