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MarBear Versus the Volcano Part 2

What is black and blue all over and sports a concussion?

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Comment from TAB_that's me
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I've been to the top of Haleakala and so I know how steep it is. We watched a bicyclist ride UP it! Talked to him at the top.

So the incident in San Diego should tell you something - don't drink and ride:)

Why a banana seat bike and not a regular one (I didn't read the 1st one, sorry)?

I would think you'd be going faster than 15 mph downhill. I can go 15 mph on flat land. Down steep hills, I have to break to keep under 30.

Hope I catch the next part.

teresa

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Hi there, Ellen, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well I can't imagine cycling up anything. I couldn't even make it up the slight rise in San Diego, let alone a volcano! You have a point on the mph, I got that from the write up the cycling company used in their advertisment. I easily crashed at 30mph. I'll go back in and change it. Thank you so much! :D
Comment from Heidi M
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I would have been so scared, my blood pressure would have been soaring. You are braver than I am because I think I would have chickened out. Sometimes you can just tell when something is going to go horribly wrong.
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 Comment Written 13-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Hi there, Heidi, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort.I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. Thank you for the catch...those damn apostrophes!
Comment from Sixty70
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No way would I go on a bike ride like that. First off, my training wheels do not make hairpin turns. As for doing things with the risk of death attached, I like to stick to medical interventions, like medically necessary surgeries. Death-defying sunrises? Uh-uh.

Just love this story. Your voice and Brunhilda's reactions put together are chuckle worthy when the story is mundane. This is not at all mundane, so I can't wait to see what she says to you at the end of it all.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Hi there, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort.I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D I appreciate your wonderful feedback!
Comment from Mustang Patty
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This will be fun. I had a bad bike accident when I was 14. I was riding a borrowed bike down a hill when I suddenly realized I didn't have brakes. I got up to about 16 or 17 miles per hour, and then hit the side of the road. Thrown from the bike, I hit a brick wall with my head, flew over it and slid on my arm for about 10 feet. It was a horrible experience and I still bear the scars.
I can only fear your experience will be even worse! Your prose flow well, and the piece certainly holds the reader's attention. Thanks for sharing,
~patty~

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Hi there, Patty, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort.I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness. Your crash sounds terrifying too! Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D
Comment from MelB
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then ride a bide down a paved road back to the bottom - bi(k)e

I liked the description of the cowardly lion. Now, that might have made headlines, if you wore the suit on the bike down the hill! You had me smiling all the way through.


 Comment Written 13-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Hi there, Mel, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort .I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness. Thank you for the catch on bike, too! You're the best!

    Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D
reply by MelB on 23-Mar-2017
    You're most welcome. Hope all goes well with the baby shower.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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did you mean regretted not packing a lion costume?

Laughed my butt off at this next installment of poor Bruni not being listened to again. She seems to be the level head against the compeitiion . Very well written and just the one question at the top.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Hi there, Barb, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort.I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness. Thanks for the catch, I have corrected that to read as you suggested. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D
Comment from Mark Valentine
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You met the people responsible for Cuties? How awesome! Those things are little balls of delight - great tasting and an excellent source of Vitamin C. The perfect snack. Please tell me those folks were nice.

As for your writing - I should preface this by saying that, if there were a Mt. Rushmore for literature, Dave Barry should be on it (imho). So when I say that your writing is Barry-esque, I hope that begins to convey the esteem I have for it.
From the spelling of "ASSumed" to your description of your google search, this was a great glimpse into the inner crazy person that all of us possess.

The great thing about these stories is that the writing carries them (don't get me wrong - they're interesting in and of themselves, but it's the storytelling more than the story that makes these so entertaining).

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Hi there, Mark, thank you so much for your wonderful review and six star rating. I am so sorry for my delay in acknowledging your effort. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's BaBy-Q for this Saturday, for over a hundred people, and have fallen way behind here.

    Please excuse my lateness in responding.

    I loved reading your review. The Cuties couple were wonderful, I am pleased to report. Down to earth and shared they were moving their operation to Columbia (or Brazil) I believe, because California was killing their operating bottom line with restrictions and water to save some little fish that was driving farmers out of business. I was an interesting conversation for sure, and one I had followed on Dateline previous to meeting them.

    I was so honored by your Barry-esque comment. I should read up on the gent. I'm embarrased to say I have not read him and initially thought you were speaking of the guy on the radio who talks about money matters. LOL. I need to get out more, obviously ;D

    I loved your review. Thank you so much for the confidence boost. Truly.

    Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D

    Thank you, friend, you are so very appreciated.
Comment from chcbeck
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Love this love the way the tone really grips the reader from start to finish. Great cliffhanger can't wait to read more.the humour through the piece had me laughing along too. Thanks for cheering me up.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Hi there, thank you so much for your wonderful review and six star rating!. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's BaBy-Q for this Saturday for over a hundred people, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness in responding. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I am so happy to have provided you some endorphins :D I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D
Comment from DR DIP
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Hehe you are definitely shitting yourself that's for sure! lol great prelim. account to your ride and your sheer confidence in doing so. Looking forward to the continuing saga lol

dip

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Hi there, Dip, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort.I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness. I appreciate you!

    Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D
reply by DR DIP on 23-Mar-2017
    good luck with the baby shower
    Always appreciate your reviews and stories
    dip
Comment from Sis Cat
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Ha! Love your emphasis: "We ASSumed incorrectly."

You really should see "Mike and Ed Need Wedding Dates"

Wow, Mary, I really enjoyed your story. You have a knack at taking your most embarrassing moments and mishaps and weaving them into storytelling gold. Here, "My Maui crash was way more epic, and painful..."

Your humor rings throughout:

"Brunhilda was quick to chime in the average funeral in America costs 12K, and that didn't include airfare transporting a cadaver back to the mainland.

"My snarling badger face would look like a weeping raccoon by mile 5.

"Brunhilda suggested I throw another prayer toward Pele the Fire Goddess since we were about to descend a FOOOOOOKING VOLCANO, on a banana seat no less."

You kept this reader engaged and entertained by your hair-raising story humorously told.

Thank you for sharing. Hold the smelling salts, please!


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 Comment Written 13-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Hi there, Andre, thank you so much for your wonderful review and six star rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's BaBy-Q for this Saturday, for over a hundred people, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness in responding to your outstanding review. You're the best!

    I loved hearing of your reactions to the writing, you always put a smile on my face. You never miss a single inference either :D Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again, and promise to get caught up on yours. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D