One last kiss
We meet again27 total reviews
Comment from RGstar
On eof yours I had not commented on, Dip. Great write, and especially good to see you in POM. Wishing you the best there, certainly deserves its place.
Nice sentiments, the whole.
Best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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On eof yours I had not commented on, Dip. Great write, and especially good to see you in POM. Wishing you the best there, certainly deserves its place.
Nice sentiments, the whole.
Best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thankyou so much Roy and very good luck to you your poem is beautiful as always you deserve it
dip
Comment from WalkerMan
It is beautiful that you saw all this in that lovely picture. You here demonstrate how an observant poet can expand a memorable moment into a lifetime whose story will tug at the hearts of many ever after.
So when it's time our days have passed
And we leave this life we'll miss
I'll take your hand, right to the last
And give you one last kiss
Simply superb, my friend.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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It is beautiful that you saw all this in that lovely picture. You here demonstrate how an observant poet can expand a memorable moment into a lifetime whose story will tug at the hearts of many ever after.
So when it's time our days have passed
And we leave this life we'll miss
I'll take your hand, right to the last
And give you one last kiss
Simply superb, my friend.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Thankyou so much WalkerMan for picking up on those two things. I did forget to change the title to one last kiss in the text
and I agree with removing 'which'/
thank you again
dip
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You are welcome, my friend. I see the changes and have removed the comments about them from the review. It's a splendid poem. -- Mike
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Dip, this is remarkably touching and do well expressed. Your rhyme and meter is spot on, and the story you've created makes me wish this scene could replay in nursing homes everywhere.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Dip, this is remarkably touching and do well expressed. Your rhyme and meter is spot on, and the story you've created makes me wish this scene could replay in nursing homes everywhere.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Thankyou so much Mary, greatly appreciated as always. To find lost love after so many years would be beautiful indeed it's just they would not have those years left together to enjoy it.
dip
Comment from June Sargent
What a beautiful heartfelt tribute to long lasting love! Bonds formed can last a lifetime. Definitely deserves to be poem of the month...The year!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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What a beautiful heartfelt tribute to long lasting love! Bonds formed can last a lifetime. Definitely deserves to be poem of the month...The year!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Wow June I never realized I had even been nominated to be in the running! I am over the moon! This would be my first time since coming to Fanstory, 4 years ago.
thanks for the great and supportive review much appreciated
dip
Comment from Unspoken94
I didn't hesitate. This is exceptional and one of
your best, Dip. You tell a wonderful story of the
power of love. I hope you will let me send this
piece to someone I share this sentiment. -Bill
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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I didn't hesitate. This is exceptional and one of
your best, Dip. You tell a wonderful story of the
power of love. I hope you will let me send this
piece to someone I share this sentiment. -Bill
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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I would love you to I would be honoured. Wow a six you have made my day Bill thankyou.
dip
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You're welcome, Dip. BTW, I have an essay coming out tomorrow.
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looking forward to it
dip
Comment from l.raven
HI Waves, one of your best my friend...and I bet this story has been played many times...I love every word written Sir...and I love your story told...and your picture is precious...so touching...very nicely done you...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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HI Waves, one of your best my friend...and I bet this story has been played many times...I love every word written Sir...and I love your story told...and your picture is precious...so touching...very nicely done you...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Wow a six I am honoured and humbled funnily enough I did like this one myself and I am my harshest critic Thankyou so much
dip
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I loved it...think it is one of your best...and you are always so welcome...love xxoo
Comment from Thal1959
My sixes renewed for the week, D. Here's the one I promised you yesterday. It is a rather sad story of a connection that was broken and didn't reconnect until the last days.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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My sixes renewed for the week, D. Here's the one I promised you yesterday. It is a rather sad story of a connection that was broken and didn't reconnect until the last days.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Thankyou so much Thal that certainly means a lot. Glad you liked the poem
dip
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Promise given, promise kept.
Comment from Hayley Solomon
Awesome Dip! I LOVE the emotional content of this. It is wonderful.. So many write of young love but so few of enduring love and of aging, when sure, we forget, but the important fundamentals are there, regardless of looks or time's ravages. I am glad you rediscovered this! Sorry I have been so absent, lately, have had heaps on my plate, including buying a house for our son to live in now, and us to eventually retire to on the north island.
:)
ps the sonnet anthology is just a collection of sonnets I have posted at one time or another, sewn up in a book. i had to do them as book chapters if I wanted to submit for another seal of quality. If ou want to take a peek, it should be in my portfolio somewhere. Thansnks,BTW for your lovely review of my latest political sonnet. Bye for now,
Hayley
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Awesome Dip! I LOVE the emotional content of this. It is wonderful.. So many write of young love but so few of enduring love and of aging, when sure, we forget, but the important fundamentals are there, regardless of looks or time's ravages. I am glad you rediscovered this! Sorry I have been so absent, lately, have had heaps on my plate, including buying a house for our son to live in now, and us to eventually retire to on the north island.
:)
ps the sonnet anthology is just a collection of sonnets I have posted at one time or another, sewn up in a book. i had to do them as book chapters if I wanted to submit for another seal of quality. If ou want to take a peek, it should be in my portfolio somewhere. Thansnks,BTW for your lovely review of my latest political sonnet. Bye for now,
Hayley
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Wow a 6 I am stoked with that so glad you liked the poem and I will take a sneak at your sonnets
Much appreciated with your lovely review thankyou
dip
Comment from Jumbo J
Okay Doc... this is the follow on from the last poem... you didn't kill her, did you? But now I'm thinking 'bout it... what did you wife die of... or should that be from... huh, used the old 'I've lost my mind, don't remember tactic'?
Okay,since you wrote this one a while back, I'm not going to drive you berko with the meter thing... the sentiment wrapped up in the story of it all, way made up for any of the 'sweating the small stuff'... so yes, enjoyed the lovely cuteness factor in the story of and this apparently, short lived poem... smile)))))))))))))))!
With our thoughts we create,
the right place 'n the right time.
James.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Okay Doc... this is the follow on from the last poem... you didn't kill her, did you? But now I'm thinking 'bout it... what did you wife die of... or should that be from... huh, used the old 'I've lost my mind, don't remember tactic'?
Okay,since you wrote this one a while back, I'm not going to drive you berko with the meter thing... the sentiment wrapped up in the story of it all, way made up for any of the 'sweating the small stuff'... so yes, enjoyed the lovely cuteness factor in the story of and this apparently, short lived poem... smile)))))))))))))))!
With our thoughts we create,
the right place 'n the right time.
James.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Ah the old meter thingo. Everyone loves the meter. My take on the meter is that if a poem is read aloud in the rhythm it was intended, meter will fall in it's place.
Thanks always for going to the trouble of your thorough review
dip
Comment from mrsmajor
Hi,
This was a combination of new love and old...I think we'll always remember out first love...the thrills are new, the experience exciting...I really enjoyed this poem and yet a feeling of sadness came to me when the lovers turned into old loves...I saw no spag...
This would have been a good entry in the "Story in a Poem contest"..
Thanks for sharing
Hugs,
Victoria
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Hi,
This was a combination of new love and old...I think we'll always remember out first love...the thrills are new, the experience exciting...I really enjoyed this poem and yet a feeling of sadness came to me when the lovers turned into old loves...I saw no spag...
This would have been a good entry in the "Story in a Poem contest"..
Thanks for sharing
Hugs,
Victoria
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thanks so much Victoria. I wrote this over 4 years ago and found it in my archives on Facebook well before I joined FanStory so in hindsight there are things I probably would have done differently but I do like the sentiment of young love being lost only to meet up in their final years and reminiscing of where their lives have taken them
I have written over 3700 poems on every subject you can think of but I tend to hover toward Romance and love poems and this story inspired totally by the accompanying image struck a chord with me.
dip
You're quite welcome, dip, it was a pleasure...
I also enjoy the love poems, and write about my husband often...he passed years ago, but there will always be that special spot, only he could fill...
Our words become ours alone, no matter how many we write, and each one has meaning...Take Care..