Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Hum. A diamond Etheree with fairly firm rhymes. Not familiar with the story line-new? Anyway, for images, rhymes and proper syllable count, fivers.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017

Dear LlJ Red,

The story line isn't at all new, they were all recorrding characters when I was first a member of the site back in 2006. Luna is my magic muse, Dream Master is a masterful majic man living in a castle in the sky, and I'm sure you know who Merlin is. They are all friends, but Merlin likes to play practical jokes on the other two...that's why they gave him him comeuppance this time. He won't stay in Hades for long though - keep a look out, you'll see much more of the three. Thanks for your fine review and support.

Yours,
Jeni

Comment from Doc Holiday

Excellent

Sounds like the preview of yet another Marvel Comics movie! LOL!
Well-written double etheree. Follows the pattern you've noted. Nice job!

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017

Dear Doc - Marvel Comics - I'm honored! Glad you enjoyed the poem and appreciate the support.

Best,
jeni

Comment from Bobbi22

Excellent

Well, Luna, you have done an amazing job of incorporating your character into your poem and you saved the day. Perfect form for your double etheree. Very well written.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017

Dear RightPics,

Thank you for enjoying this poem and for getting into the story. I appreciate your review and review.

love,
jeni

Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

I enjoyed the fun visuals conjured up while reading your well crafted double etheree Luna, It looks like a very challenging form of poetry yet I can see nothing wrong with it so congratulations friend, you nailed it !

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Thank you, Hitcher! I don't think it's often that I nail a poem, usually there is SOMETHING wrong with it. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed this so much, and appreciate your presence on my portfolio today. Thanks for the support.

All my best,
luna

Comment from debskatz

Excellent

Hi,

A fun little poem. Your syllable count is good, but the story is a little ho hum for my taste. Try writing one that also includes some rhythm and a better story line. Good effort, though!

smiles,

deb

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Deb, I thank you for your honesty, you have in this review inspired me to reach that much higher! I am taking a poetry class starting in a few days, so perhaps that will help. There are some other poems in my portfolio, however, that you may not this are so ho-hum, if you'd take a look. Just a suggestion to help you get to know me better.

Always,

luna

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

very good use of the double etheree form and structure here. good little tale told within the format. Well worked out and clever.

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Dear GMG,

Thanks for coming to my port to give me a read today! I'm glad that you enjoyed my double etheree/story effort. I appreciate your presence at and support for my portfolio.

Always,
jeni

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

I liked the humor you wrote into this piece. I also liked the way you formatted it as well. This was a very interesting read and I enjoyed writing this response for it... John

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Dear John,

I thank you for stopping by my portfolio today to give me a read. I'm happy that you enjoyed the humor and the way it was formatted. You somehow disappeared from my fan list so I've added you back just now, and hope to read and review some of your work very soon.

Regards,
luna

Comment from mbroyles2

Excellent

Outstanding!
I love how you bring the magician and the dream master alive in this poem.
Very vivid.
Excellent pace and an excellent story.
Really a pleasure to read.
Michael

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Hi, Mike, welcome to my port!

I always love reading your reviews, and I'm very grateful for your continued support of my poetry efforts.

Yours,
jeni

Comment from Lu Saluna

Excellent

That was very cool! I love the magical and enchanting poems you write. You are so good at them. It is a very good story and in a double Etheree no less. Very well done. You and the dream master taking the magicians charms and sending him off is wonderful.
I am just wondering if I can make a suggestion. Since the Dream Master starts out as green have the first 10 line green as you have it. But as you have him turning cyan. have the last 10 line cyan. Just for presentation. There is nothing wrong with the presentation, just thought it might be a cool effect for the poem.
I love the image you selected to go with it.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Lu, that's a wonderful suggestion which I believe I'm going to take. Very clever, my friend. I'm happy that you enjoyed the poem and am grateful for your input.

Love,
jeni

Comment from Benny Beeharry

Excellent

Hi friend, whenever I read a writing , I try to understand the message. I am not here to find fault,but to encourage in whatever I can. I like the depth in this writing and the great decision to take a revenge, i like also the message that wrongdoers should be punished . One gets what one sows.
The writing flows and the form of writing is just beautiful, I like it.
Still the word symbolism fails me. Thank you so much
Danny Jock

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Hey newest person on my fan list!

I'm thrilled that you enjoyed the work, but tell me, what word symbolism was it that throws you? I'll try and explain so you can enjoy the poem fully. Thanks for your honesty. I like and appreciate that.

Yours,
jeni