Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "A Diamante in the Rough"a place to gather my poetic forms
27 total reviews
Comment from Irish Rain
I don't recall ever writing one of these, very interesting, they look fun, like a puzzle. I believe I like the castle, and the cottage...so long as I had a 'staff' if I lived in the castle, ha ha...blessings...
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I don't recall ever writing one of these, very interesting, they look fun, like a puzzle. I believe I like the castle, and the cottage...so long as I had a 'staff' if I lived in the castle, ha ha...blessings...
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I don't think there's going to be a "staff" in this castle, IR, unless it is a ghostly one!
Comment from Janet Foor
I think you have mastered the poetic form beautifully Jeni. I loved the progression and then then ending with an antonym of your first line.
Very nicely done.
blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I think you have mastered the poetic form beautifully Jeni. I loved the progression and then then ending with an antonym of your first line.
Very nicely done.
blessings
Janet
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Dear Janet,
Thanks!!! I'm happy that you think I met all the form requirements and thank you for this kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Luna,
I recall how I liked writing and ready poems written in Diamante format
You have quite a comparison about an immense place to roam aroud to a comfy and cozy cottage
A title why not title it
Compare your Style
Gert
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Hi Luna,
I recall how I liked writing and ready poems written in Diamante format
You have quite a comparison about an immense place to roam aroud to a comfy and cozy cottage
A title why not title it
Compare your Style
Gert
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Good one Gert, I'll put it with the others and pick in the morning!
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Glad you like it.
Gert
Comment from Sis Cat
Retrogression, because you transition from the ideal castle to the less than ideal cottage. A poem in the opposite direction would be Progression. This is an animated, vivid poem filled with details from the noble fortress to the humble castle. It is well-rhymed and shaped. Both abodes have their pluses and minuses. I am in a cottage mode right now. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Retrogression, because you transition from the ideal castle to the less than ideal cottage. A poem in the opposite direction would be Progression. This is an animated, vivid poem filled with details from the noble fortress to the humble castle. It is well-rhymed and shaped. Both abodes have their pluses and minuses. I am in a cottage mode right now. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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But did you read the words describing the castle - it was not meant to be a happy place at all. I believe that this would be a progressive piece., no?
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think a good name would just simply be 'Home', intriguing write and full of all things you find inside a home, good luck with the book, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I think a good name would just simply be 'Home', intriguing write and full of all things you find inside a home, good luck with the book, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Dolly, the winning title wil be announced this morning
Comment from winnona
Your words flow well and combined easily forming the message of the poem for the reader. The artwork completed the ice very well.I think you completed the challenge of the contest very well
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Your words flow well and combined easily forming the message of the poem for the reader. The artwork completed the ice very well.I think you completed the challenge of the contest very well
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thanks, winnona,. for your kind and complimentary revuew,
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Home is where the heart is? I like to do quippy titles, this is an awesome poem up to your usual standards and absolutely fantastic that it in the form of a diamante, well done kindest regards, Meia xx
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Home is where the heart is? I like to do quippy titles, this is an awesome poem up to your usual standards and absolutely fantastic that it in the form of a diamante, well done kindest regards, Meia xx
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Dear Meia, thank you for this kind read and review. In the case of the title, I've received so many suggestions I'm going to try and make a choice begore mornkng.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is the most detailed description of the diamante poem that I have ever seen. With all those requirements it lays the form down fairly and squarely and, as far as I can see, you have followed it to the letter, and got a good diamond shape out of it into the bargain.
Now a title! I thought perhaps "Home, High or Humble"
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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This is the most detailed description of the diamante poem that I have ever seen. With all those requirements it lays the form down fairly and squarely and, as far as I can see, you have followed it to the letter, and got a good diamond shape out of it into the bargain.
Now a title! I thought perhaps "Home, High or Humble"
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Home, high or humble, it's a good name, I'll keep it with the others as tne decision will be made late afternoon.\
Comment from mbroyles2
Two perfectly opposites that end as one.
Your crisp descriptions nail the transition.
if I had to give it a name, maybe something like
"The Dark Light"
It seems you go from the darkness of the castle to the light of the cottage.
Great work!
Michael
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Two perfectly opposites that end as one.
Your crisp descriptions nail the transition.
if I had to give it a name, maybe something like
"The Dark Light"
It seems you go from the darkness of the castle to the light of the cottage.
Great work!
Michael
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Hmmm not a bad titlel, Micjael. I'm glad that you found this poem to be pleasingl
Comment from Teri7
My Castle is my home! Just a thought my friend. I like this well written poem you have penned with so many words to call our castle or home. Very good wording and imagery! Blessings and love, Teri
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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My Castle is my home! Just a thought my friend. I like this well written poem you have penned with so many words to call our castle or home. Very good wording and imagery! Blessings and love, Teri
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review, Teri. I'm happy you liked the poem. I have several other titles that I'm considering. I will jot yours down (I like it) as well and make a choice tonight or tomorrowl
light and love,
jlm
