Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I could easily visualize the snowflakes embodying happiness. I admired your rhymes and cadence--no easy accomplishment in such a short work. Thanks for sharing the reinforcing artwork as well. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017

Thanks for a great review. Elaine

Comment from JACK2

Excellent

Very clever how you combined the reads with the more button I wouldn't mind knowing how to do that myself. Your poem flowed very nicely with crisp cool words. coop

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017

Thanks for a great review. Elaine

reply by JACK2 on 07-Feb-2017

Your welcome . coop

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

I like it very much Mermaids good essence poem with internal rhyme and an ending rhyme about the joy of winter after a snow squall
Sounds like Vermont
Gert

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017

Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

It's lovely to look at, but not so pleasant when you have to be out in it or drive in it. Excellent job with the essence format. Joy falls is excellent because it makes one think of snow falls. Your rhyme meets the requirements and makes sense. I guess we might as well embrace it. We can't do anything about it. judi

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017

Yes, we might as well embrace winter. Thanks for reading and enjoying. I like the essence form. Elaine

reply by judiverse on 21-Jan-2017

Hi, mermaids. We haven't had much winter yet here in Indiana. Temps recently have been in the 50s, but that is sure to change! judi

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Tis indeed an essence poem and you did the internal rhyme. Is there a rule as to where the internal rhyme is to be? I have seen different places and this one is perfect for the syllable count

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017

I have only just become familiar with this form, so I am unsure of rules regarding internal rhymes. Congratulations on all you have achieved on this site. You deserve recognition for your work! Thanks for a great review. Elaine

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

I liked the imagery of snow squalls. It's not something I would care to have all the time, but for a couple of months, we find the beauty the sparkling white reveals. Good thinking! Drew

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 Comment Written 18-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017

Thanks for a great review. Elaine