2017 JAPANESE POETRY
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Comment from Joan E.
I certainly relished your reinforcing the colors in your haiku with the extraordinary picture. I particularly liked your use of "veils" and the extra insight in the satori. Big cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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I certainly relished your reinforcing the colors in your haiku with the extraordinary picture. I particularly liked your use of "veils" and the extra insight in the satori. Big cheers- Joan
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
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Thank you, awesome review!
gypsy buddha blessings
Comment from krys123
Blessings, Gypsy;
-as a woman would wear her scarf around her neck or a veil across the her face And as it is in nature this moderate to intense red sunset overshadows like a bell upon this river of orange. These are such great dramatically and grammatically connected lines Of imagery that are definitively expressive as well as being demonstratively and vividly descriptive.
-The satori, To me, reflects the beauty of a dream of this imagery stated in the first two lines and summarizes the relativity of the conceptual theme and thus gives the aha moment of the context of this poem.
-This must be a beautiful dream of tranquility and serenity all surrounded by orange feeling.
-Thanks for sharing, gypsy, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
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Blessings, Gypsy;
-as a woman would wear her scarf around her neck or a veil across the her face And as it is in nature this moderate to intense red sunset overshadows like a bell upon this river of orange. These are such great dramatically and grammatically connected lines Of imagery that are definitively expressive as well as being demonstratively and vividly descriptive.
-The satori, To me, reflects the beauty of a dream of this imagery stated in the first two lines and summarizes the relativity of the conceptual theme and thus gives the aha moment of the context of this poem.
-This must be a beautiful dream of tranquility and serenity all surrounded by orange feeling.
-Thanks for sharing, gypsy, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
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Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
Again you've written a very nice poem that I really enjoyed reading.
Thanks so much for sharing it with all your friends on FB.
I look forward to reading your work as your are very good writing it.
Kat
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Hi Gypsy,
Again you've written a very nice poem that I really enjoyed reading.
Thanks so much for sharing it with all your friends on FB.
I look forward to reading your work as your are very good writing it.
Kat
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
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Hugs to you too, Gypsy. Kat
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a beautifully executed haiku. The imagery is vivid and seamlessly connected painting a vibrant visual in the reader's mind. The satori is a serene observation of the overall scene. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This is a beautifully executed haiku. The imagery is vivid and seamlessly connected painting a vibrant visual in the reader's mind. The satori is a serene observation of the overall scene. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Monica, you are very kind and I am grateful that you take the time to review my work.
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi GBR,
Your haiku ha the correct syllable count and the two lines connect perfectly. The satori reflects how dreamy the picture is. Who wouldn't find this dreamy and romantic. Your picture gives a warm cosy glow.
Great.
Brenda:))x
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Hi GBR,
Your haiku ha the correct syllable count and the two lines connect perfectly. The satori reflects how dreamy the picture is. Who wouldn't find this dreamy and romantic. Your picture gives a warm cosy glow.
Great.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Sweetie Pie, :)
Comment from dragonpoet
Beautiful sunset over a river to illustrate this poem that uses different shades of the color orange to express the emotion evoked by the sunset. I like the alliteration in the first line.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
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Beautiful sunset over a river to illustrate this poem that uses different shades of the color orange to express the emotion evoked by the sunset. I like the alliteration in the first line.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
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Thank you :)
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You're welcome.
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Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Beautiful Haiku with a terrific flow. Made me feel warm like a tropical beach it looked good enough to eat with its beautiful picture and dainty words carefully chosen maximum impact well done kind regards Meia x
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Beautiful Haiku with a terrific flow. Made me feel warm like a tropical beach it looked good enough to eat with its beautiful picture and dainty words carefully chosen maximum impact well done kind regards Meia x
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
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Thank you, pretty lady :)
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Gypsy This made me sleepy LOL inviting dreams the image created the calm mood and All the three lines connected nicely, a striking image to compliment this great Haiku. Cheers Christine
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Hi Gypsy This made me sleepy LOL inviting dreams the image created the calm mood and All the three lines connected nicely, a striking image to compliment this great Haiku. Cheers Christine
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
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LOL I love your sense of humor. I am blessed to have a whole troupe of comedians in my class. hahahaha you and michael crack me up. Thank you. I love to laugh.
Gypsy Sensei hugs
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I never take myself too serious Gypsy and always look for the humour in almost everything LOL
Comment from William Ross
Another great haiku Gypsy, the orange river, sweet tangerine dreams, nicely done, good thought, thanks for the share and have a great day
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Another great haiku Gypsy, the orange river, sweet tangerine dreams, nicely done, good thought, thanks for the share and have a great day
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
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Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Gypsy
I really like this haiku the picture is stunning and the words are so pertinent for a haiku
Well done
Mary
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Hi Gypsy
I really like this haiku the picture is stunning and the words are so pertinent for a haiku
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Mary, you are very kind and I am grateful. :)