Dream Sequence
Another foray into the darkside40 total reviews
Comment from CEO2020
Hmmm....so this is your dark side.
"If I can't speak the words She wants to hear
She'll remove the sheet
and make me eat your heart.
That scares me ~ when I ate Mother's
heart it seemed like it was
going to beat forever."
Scary!
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Hmmm....so this is your dark side.
"If I can't speak the words She wants to hear
She'll remove the sheet
and make me eat your heart.
That scares me ~ when I ate Mother's
heart it seemed like it was
going to beat forever."
Scary!
Comment Written 25-Dec-2016
Comment from Thal1959
It is 1:23am as I right this, on Christmas day - what a poem to start the holiday with! It is an interesting free verse about yet another disturbing subject, Luna.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
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It is 1:23am as I right this, on Christmas day - what a poem to start the holiday with! It is an interesting free verse about yet another disturbing subject, Luna.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
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Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem, thal!
Hope you had a merry christmas, muwahaha!
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You are welcome, Luna.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Ouch!!!
Okay, yes, your dark side did creep in a bit, but that's okay, better out than in...
I hope you have a wonderful Christmas tomorrow.
Take care, be safe,
Rhonda
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Ouch!!!
Okay, yes, your dark side did creep in a bit, but that's okay, better out than in...
I hope you have a wonderful Christmas tomorrow.
Take care, be safe,
Rhonda
Comment Written 24-Dec-2016
Comment from Bill Schott
Wow! This is a grisly poem to be sure. This looks like a picture of my prom date. I thought a couple shots would mellow her out, but she was a mean drunk. Eat your heart out.
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Wow! This is a grisly poem to be sure. This looks like a picture of my prom date. I thought a couple shots would mellow her out, but she was a mean drunk. Eat your heart out.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2016
Comment from dragonpoet
Very dark free verse poem. It seems you are mentioning all kinds of scary images of death and how you sometimes forget somethings after loved ones have been gone for a long time. Then in seems to go into mummies or zombies. Not quite in with the season.
Keep writing.
Happy Holidays.
dragonpoet
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Very dark free verse poem. It seems you are mentioning all kinds of scary images of death and how you sometimes forget somethings after loved ones have been gone for a long time. Then in seems to go into mummies or zombies. Not quite in with the season.
Keep writing.
Happy Holidays.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 24-Dec-2016
Comment from nancyrabbrose
That is definitely a dark and somewhat scary poem. You have succeeded in this genre. The illustration you chose is excellent. Choosing to eat "mother's heart" makes your piece even more morbid and dark because most people think that mother is the last one we wish to kill, however, you probably mean it as a metaphor. Just now when my daughter again hurt me I feel as if she was eating my heart.
Therefore, thank you. Your poem was timely for me. Well done.
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That is definitely a dark and somewhat scary poem. You have succeeded in this genre. The illustration you chose is excellent. Choosing to eat "mother's heart" makes your piece even more morbid and dark because most people think that mother is the last one we wish to kill, however, you probably mean it as a metaphor. Just now when my daughter again hurt me I feel as if she was eating my heart.
Therefore, thank you. Your poem was timely for me. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2016
Comment from Nan Beeson
An unusual poem, but I seem to be able to relate to it in some creepy way. I have been in an unusual mood for a couple of days and unable to shake it off and so ashamed. I do not understand it or like it, but will do my best to keep my sanity. Your poemseems to have hit a notch with me somewhere in my brain and I have yet to figure it out. Thank you for sharing it and giving me a chance to let off some unwanted steam.
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An unusual poem, but I seem to be able to relate to it in some creepy way. I have been in an unusual mood for a couple of days and unable to shake it off and so ashamed. I do not understand it or like it, but will do my best to keep my sanity. Your poemseems to have hit a notch with me somewhere in my brain and I have yet to figure it out. Thank you for sharing it and giving me a chance to let off some unwanted steam.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2016
Comment from Janet Foor
An excellent creepy thriller poem to rival those of Dean. Dark side or lighthearted, you definitely have a way with words.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
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An excellent creepy thriller poem to rival those of Dean. Dark side or lighthearted, you definitely have a way with words.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 24-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
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Thanks, Janet and it's an honor to be compared to Dean. Ill never risk his poems though!
Love, jeni
Comment from Lu Saluna
Awesome, giving Dean a run for his money!
Very gritty and invokes a scare and feelings of yuck for sure. But that is the intent of a good 'dark poem'.
Really well written and presented. Writing dark can like a release of emotion that is very healing. Helps me that way. I enjoyed your poem.
Keep on writing!
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you and yours.
Namaste, Lu
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Awesome, giving Dean a run for his money!
Very gritty and invokes a scare and feelings of yuck for sure. But that is the intent of a good 'dark poem'.
Really well written and presented. Writing dark can like a release of emotion that is very healing. Helps me that way. I enjoyed your poem.
Keep on writing!
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you and yours.
Namaste, Lu
Comment Written 24-Dec-2016
Comment from Grasshopper2
Are you afraid?
Yes.
Why?
Reading or writing about horror brings you to their attention.
Who are they?
Waveforms.
Please explain.
Humans are energy and energy is a wave and energy cannot be destroyed only transmutated. There are eleven aspects to strings theory, and each has wormholes that interconnect the other strings. Energy is a wave that is either positive or negative. Waveforms of all types live in all strings. Negative waveforms feed on fear, war, disease, pestilences, and pain. Positive waveforms feed on love, caring, peace, and tranquility. Positive waveforms are the only thing that can destroy negative waveforms.
Humans have the attention of all Negative waveforms. They feed on us. Our brain is an organic computer, and like our computer machines, if you put garbage and viruses in, it crashes. The same goes for our brain. If you dwell in darkness and negativity, that is what overtakes your thinking, psychic, living, happiness. That is what makes the Negative Waveforms strong. I speak from experience, I have seen them.
Luna, they are coming. Be afraid.
They are coming for you and your family. Be frightened.
Oh, God! They are here~!Hkuikop;l...
End of transmission
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Are you afraid?
Yes.
Why?
Reading or writing about horror brings you to their attention.
Who are they?
Waveforms.
Please explain.
Humans are energy and energy is a wave and energy cannot be destroyed only transmutated. There are eleven aspects to strings theory, and each has wormholes that interconnect the other strings. Energy is a wave that is either positive or negative. Waveforms of all types live in all strings. Negative waveforms feed on fear, war, disease, pestilences, and pain. Positive waveforms feed on love, caring, peace, and tranquility. Positive waveforms are the only thing that can destroy negative waveforms.
Humans have the attention of all Negative waveforms. They feed on us. Our brain is an organic computer, and like our computer machines, if you put garbage and viruses in, it crashes. The same goes for our brain. If you dwell in darkness and negativity, that is what overtakes your thinking, psychic, living, happiness. That is what makes the Negative Waveforms strong. I speak from experience, I have seen them.
Luna, they are coming. Be afraid.
They are coming for you and your family. Be frightened.
Oh, God! They are here~!Hkuikop;l...
End of transmission
Comment Written 24-Dec-2016