Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Christmas trio. The essence of Christmas is cheerful joy and wonderful things while we celebrate the birth of our Saviour, and I found that essence in this poem.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016

I love the cheerful joy of Christmas although I dislike the hectic part of it, trying to get ready for it, all the while working & etc. It's nice to take a mental/spiritual break from all that!
Carol

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Some nice words of Latin origin amongst a nicely constructed write. Whenever I see Latin it always remind me of Christmas Carols.
Nicely done.
My very best wishes.
RGstar

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016

Yes, I was thinking of the old, traditional Christmas songs, which I love. Thank you so much for the read and review. Have a wonderful holiday!
Carol

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, my friend. You have done a superior job with this asssignment. I particularly liked the way you said this:

"washed out the moon
in waves of light;
a morning hewn
in rose and white."

Wonderful writing. I wouldn't worry too much about the Latin were I you though. Blessings and Happy Holidays to you and yours. Bob

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016

I think the Latin is okay now, Pantygynt helped me out a bit. I would have asked him before posting, except he was asleep - dang these time differences!
Thanks, Bob, many blessings to you and yours this holiday season :))
Carol

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Careful! Your Catholic upbringing is showing. This is a beautiful trio of triads expanding these quotations. I am surely no Latin scholar but wouldn't "nox dulcis, placida" be a. more linguistically correct and b. ending on a vowel sound possess more euphony than the harsh consonantal ending on the X?

My old Latin teacher used to say that church Latin was frequently execrable.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

Lol, yes it is. We went to a really old fashioned church when I was little, Latin Mass and all that.

You're more of a Latin scholar than me, that's for sure. If you recommend 'nox dulcis, placida' I'll take your word for it. Thanks! I would have asked last night when I wrote it, but I'm sure you were sound asleep at the time...

What an interesting comment from your Latin teacher. Is he the one who whipped you for forgetting the blue trousers?

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Eloquent and uplifting, dear. I love it. Great quotes, great responses. I do not recall LAtin, though I was good at it in school. This has a classical feel and flavor. Exquisite. Enjoyed the fine rhyming too. Especially loved the tone of this:

The sacred sound
of ancient bells
on hallowed ground,
where fealty dwells...

and love the rhyme pair of moon and hewn:

washed out the moon
in waves of light;
a morning hewn
in rose and white.

The only minor critique is that the first stanzas of the first two had rhymes but this one does not:

Beloved peace
and stillness; let
my end be just
so sweet and still

There is nothing wrong with that, probably, but I noticed it. However, I do like the near rhyme effect of let and just read aloud.


As usual, tons of fine phonetics, like the medley of S sounds in the above lines, etc.

Bravo.


Hugs and smiles, rd

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

I decided to leave off the rhyme for the last one...partly because I was tired, but I wanted it to feel like I was lapsing out of rhyme, in light of considering endings (ending of life, etc)

Kind of fun how these things develop, on their own almost!

hugs,
Carol

reply by rama devi on 18-Dec-2016

:)))))
Yep! Hugs. rd

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

The Latin you've used adds to the spiritual sound and feel of these Triads. Rose coloured vestments and rose coloured setting, you've done a great job of this. Beautiful words and perfect setting to go with.
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

I have to say, old Latin Christmas songs are one of my favorite things about the season. I thought it would be nice to tie them into this trio :))
Carol

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Superb group of Sapphonic triads. The inserted Latin is a nice touch. I love the song based on the words of Longfellow. Lovely melody added. :)

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

Thanks so much, Phyllis,
Carol

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem.
It is a perfect match, your words are so divine. The captured my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016

Thank you, wishing you Happy Holidays!
Carol

reply by misscookie on 19-Dec-2016

Your very welcome, have blessed day.
Season's Greeting to you and yours.
Cookie

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

I know nothing of Latin but I can review on what i like.
the interruptation of the verses are what made the aaaahhhh lines so much better and stronger. Love the different ways i have seen these represented

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016

Thanks, Barb! I love the different poems too, although I need to catch with them all :)
Carol

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

I love the cadence in this poem. It really flows along smoothly with a great tempo. I liked your messages as well. Good job on this, my friend

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 Comment Written 18-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016

Thank you, Douglas, I was digging into what really is the essence of Christmas spirit, for me. :))
Carol