Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Tooth Fairy"a place to gather my poetic forms
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Comment from Janet Foor
The Tooth Fairy is a fun concept. My children loved it as the received a coin under their pillow in exchange for the tooth. If the tooth had no cavities, it got more cash. Haha
I enjoyed your version of the Tooth Fairy.
Blessings
Janet
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The Tooth Fairy is a fun concept. My children loved it as the received a coin under their pillow in exchange for the tooth. If the tooth had no cavities, it got more cash. Haha
I enjoyed your version of the Tooth Fairy.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 07-Dec-2016
Comment from robyn corum
Luna,
Personally, I think you tried to pack too much into this poem and simply didn't have room. (sorry!) I think this story-in-a-poem needed a larger form and this just ended up being a bit awkward and cumbersome. I would suggest a rewrite in a different poetic device. Thanks!
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Luna,
Personally, I think you tried to pack too much into this poem and simply didn't have room. (sorry!) I think this story-in-a-poem needed a larger form and this just ended up being a bit awkward and cumbersome. I would suggest a rewrite in a different poetic device. Thanks!
Comment Written 07-Dec-2016
Comment from Aussie
A great children's fairy-tale. We all remember the glass beside our bed for the tooth fairy. I liked your poem because it is happy and magical. Thanks for sharing.
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A great children's fairy-tale. We all remember the glass beside our bed for the tooth fairy. I liked your poem because it is happy and magical. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2016
Comment from Writer51
It's a good fairy story, and it even has in there the fair(y)ground. It is definitely filled with fantasy. I remember waiting for the tooth fairy and then waking up to a quarter under my pillow. Thanks for the good read.
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It's a good fairy story, and it even has in there the fair(y)ground. It is definitely filled with fantasy. I remember waiting for the tooth fairy and then waking up to a quarter under my pillow. Thanks for the good read.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2016
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww, the Tooth Fairy was always a favourite story of mine, since she always left me a shining sixpence, (old English money over 60 years ago!) Such wonderful fairy tales we had. I wrote a poem called 'The Tooth Fairy' on here a while ago, but it had to be split into two parts because it was sooooo long! LOL. I enjoyed yours, Luna, and you've written in yet another poetic format! Well done, it's lovely! :) Sandra xx
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Aww, the Tooth Fairy was always a favourite story of mine, since she always left me a shining sixpence, (old English money over 60 years ago!) Such wonderful fairy tales we had. I wrote a poem called 'The Tooth Fairy' on here a while ago, but it had to be split into two parts because it was sooooo long! LOL. I enjoyed yours, Luna, and you've written in yet another poetic format! Well done, it's lovely! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 07-Dec-2016
Comment from MelB
Hi Luna/Jeni- This is such a cute little girl! I'm no expert on this form, but I did enjoy reading the poem. Very nice rhyme and flow.
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Hi Luna/Jeni- This is such a cute little girl! I'm no expert on this form, but I did enjoy reading the poem. Very nice rhyme and flow.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2016
Comment from Dean Kuch
Oh, your version of the Tooth Fairy is so much nicer than the one I know, Jeni.
In the 1800's there was a woman that little children would take their old teeth (ones they had recently lost) to in exchange for a gold coin. A few years later, tragedy struck her; a fire ravaged her house horribly disfiguring her face and forcing her to wear a porcelain mask because of the sensitivity to her damaged nerve endings. All of which caused her to not be able to go into any type of light. She was eventually hanged as the culprit behind the disappearance of two local children--a crime she was found to be completely innocent of when the children showed up unharmed.
She's called the "Tooth Fairy."
The story goes that she can't go in the light, and if you wake up and see her, she'll kill you. You're told that it's never wise to wake up in the middle of the night when the Tooth Fairy is supposed to come and claim your last tooth. If you do, she will also steal your last breath to go along with it...
That was MY tooth fairy.
And people here wonder why I write the way I do.
Go figure.
Nicely written, Jeni, as usual...
~Dean
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Oh, your version of the Tooth Fairy is so much nicer than the one I know, Jeni.
In the 1800's there was a woman that little children would take their old teeth (ones they had recently lost) to in exchange for a gold coin. A few years later, tragedy struck her; a fire ravaged her house horribly disfiguring her face and forcing her to wear a porcelain mask because of the sensitivity to her damaged nerve endings. All of which caused her to not be able to go into any type of light. She was eventually hanged as the culprit behind the disappearance of two local children--a crime she was found to be completely innocent of when the children showed up unharmed.
She's called the "Tooth Fairy."
The story goes that she can't go in the light, and if you wake up and see her, she'll kill you. You're told that it's never wise to wake up in the middle of the night when the Tooth Fairy is supposed to come and claim your last tooth. If you do, she will also steal your last breath to go along with it...
That was MY tooth fairy.
And people here wonder why I write the way I do.
Go figure.
Nicely written, Jeni, as usual...
~Dean
Comment Written 07-Dec-2016
Comment from Ella25
Luna, writing a Rondeau must be challenging. Little out of space for me, though I am learning to understand its content. Yes, the little ones are believers in Tooth Fairies that come and collect the tooth to make a necklace leaving something for them under the pillow. Well done. Blessings, Ella
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Luna, writing a Rondeau must be challenging. Little out of space for me, though I am learning to understand its content. Yes, the little ones are believers in Tooth Fairies that come and collect the tooth to make a necklace leaving something for them under the pillow. Well done. Blessings, Ella
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
Comment from Thal1959
Once again, Luna, you've written a very good poem in a form I would probably never try myself. Very, very well constructed about an interesting subject. Thanks for posting this.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Once again, Luna, you've written a very good poem in a form I would probably never try myself. Very, very well constructed about an interesting subject. Thanks for posting this.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Dear Thai, I am truly honored by this exceptional six-star review. I'm so happy that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Again, thanks for your kind words of review as well as the beautiful six-star rating.
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My pleasure.
Comment from misscookie
The little girl is the cutest thing more so since she lost her tooth
My great grand daughter lost here's this week now she doesn't not like to laugh.
Thank you for sharing this delightful poem.
Cookie
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The little girl is the cutest thing more so since she lost her tooth
My great grand daughter lost here's this week now she doesn't not like to laugh.
Thank you for sharing this delightful poem.
Cookie
Comment Written 06-Dec-2016
