Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Perchance..."a place to gather my poetic forms
38 total reviews
Comment from winnona
A beautifully written love poem contest entry. Your words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. good luck in the contest.
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A beautifully written love poem contest entry. Your words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
Comment from Drew Delaney
Excellent, Luna. A somewhat difficult rhyme scheme to follow. I think I will attempt it one day when my brain cells settle a bit. Love your style of writing.
Write on, my friend.
Drew xx
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Excellent, Luna. A somewhat difficult rhyme scheme to follow. I think I will attempt it one day when my brain cells settle a bit. Love your style of writing.
Write on, my friend.
Drew xx
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
Comment from mvbrooks
This is a "fun to read" poem that has an almost "sing-song" sense to it. The message is light and inviting. It was interesting to see how the first and fourth "inverted lines" would play out--in this case, they were playful and added to the strength of the poem.
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This is a "fun to read" poem that has an almost "sing-song" sense to it. The message is light and inviting. It was interesting to see how the first and fourth "inverted lines" would play out--in this case, they were playful and added to the strength of the poem.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
Comment from WriteSins!
An excellent poem that demonstrates infatuation perfectly. I enjoy the reference of cupid! Best of luck regarding the love poem contest! I'm sure you'll do great. Keep writing!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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An excellent poem that demonstrates infatuation perfectly. I enjoy the reference of cupid! Best of luck regarding the love poem contest! I'm sure you'll do great. Keep writing!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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Thanks for this kind review, WriteSins. I apologize for the tardiness of the reply.
As always, thank you for your attention to my writing.
To the Moon and back!
Comment from Mastery
Another fine write from your pen, Margie. I love the way this entire poem flowed''
"Dear Cupid's bells announce the day
shuffling the cards of love at play."
You are so talented, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Another fine write from your pen, Margie. I love the way this entire poem flowed''
"Dear Cupid's bells announce the day
shuffling the cards of love at play."
You are so talented, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Bob, you flatter me. Believe it or not, I flunked out of English in college! I didn't begin writing in earnest until around the millenium.
Thanks a thousand different ways, my friend.
Jeni
Comment from Pantygynt
What interests me in this excellent swap quatrain poem on the subject of love is how in Q1 & 2 the statement when swapped around maintains is its meaning while in Q3 the mood changes from a simple statement to the imperative. Somehow I sense considerable opportunity for development where this idea can be made to work.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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What interests me in this excellent swap quatrain poem on the subject of love is how in Q1 & 2 the statement when swapped around maintains is its meaning while in Q3 the mood changes from a simple statement to the imperative. Somehow I sense considerable opportunity for development where this idea can be made to work.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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My friend, thank you for the kind review. I'll take a harder look at the poem to see if I can improve!
I appreciate your continued attention to my portfolio, and thanks again!
luna
Comment from Sis Cat
I read this twice. I love the flow and the rhymes of this Swap Quatrain. Your poem is strong with romantic imagery and metaphor, for example:
"Dear Cupid's bells announce the day
shuffling the cards of love at play."
You aptly describe passion and attraction, as well as the chance nature of falling in love. This is also a polished poem without spags.
Thank you for sharing your romantic poem. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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I read this twice. I love the flow and the rhymes of this Swap Quatrain. Your poem is strong with romantic imagery and metaphor, for example:
"Dear Cupid's bells announce the day
shuffling the cards of love at play."
You aptly describe passion and attraction, as well as the chance nature of falling in love. This is also a polished poem without spags.
Thank you for sharing your romantic poem. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Dear Sis Cat,
I'm happy to learn that you read this poem twice, found the flow, rhyming scheme, imagery, and metaphor sufficient. Whoosh! Glad there were no spags to be found.
Stop by anytime!
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Yes, I often find it helpful to read a poem twice. On the first read I might discover the structure, on the second read the message, and o the third read how they all work together.. The meaning shifts and deepens the more times I read a poem.
Comment from lancellot
Ah, very inventive poetic form, and you theme of love has serene almost magical feel, but isn't that the way it is when love is in the air?
Well crafted.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Ah, very inventive poetic form, and you theme of love has serene almost magical feel, but isn't that the way it is when love is in the air?
Well crafted.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Dear lancellot, thank you for your kind words pertaining to my poem. Yes, magic and serenity indeed seem to be the way when love is in the air.
All my best.
Comment from Janet Foor
This is a very clever and creative poem. I loved the rhyme and the shuffling of lines.
A exercise of creativity that made for a beautiful piece.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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This is a very clever and creative poem. I loved the rhyme and the shuffling of lines.
A exercise of creativity that made for a beautiful piece.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Janet my friend,
Thanks for your gracious words relative to my poem. I appreciate your continued reviews.
Always,
Jeni
Comment from DR DIP
I love this format it is really well written and a great theme A love poem in the competition This will go really well I am sure
dip
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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I love this format it is really well written and a great theme A love poem in the competition This will go really well I am sure
dip
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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dear dip,
Thank you for your sweet words on my poem. I'm Hoping it fares well, but who knows...
My best,
Luna
