Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Luna and the Dream Master"a place to gather my poetic forms
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Comment from Heather Knight
I cannot say if this is technically sound as I know nothing about poetry, but I like it very much.
I love the repeated line (I have a weakness for those). I also like the idea of Luna bathing in lunar streams.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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I cannot say if this is technically sound as I know nothing about poetry, but I like it very much.
I love the repeated line (I have a weakness for those). I also like the idea of Luna bathing in lunar streams.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Dearest Maria,
I'm so happy that you like, in order, the repeated line and the idea of Luna bathing in lunar streams.
Thank you so very much.
I appreciate your continued attention to my portfolio, and thanks again!
luna
Comment from Pantygynt
Here is one person then that has no need for my "To Write a Villanelle" villanelle in my book, Flat Packed Poetry. This is an excellent example of the form. They are not the easiest things to come to terms with but there is nothing wrong with this fairy one.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Here is one person then that has no need for my "To Write a Villanelle" villanelle in my book, Flat Packed Poetry. This is an excellent example of the form. They are not the easiest things to come to terms with but there is nothing wrong with this fairy one.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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I'm honored to have you say that there was nothing wrong with this fantasy villanelle. I'm still adding "Flat Packed Poetry" to my wish list for Christmas though. My husband will have lots of shopping to do on Amazon!
I appreciate your continued attention to my portfolio, and thanks again!
luna
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Another poem of the moon, which is according to your common theme. I love it!
We have a Master of Dreams uniting with the beautiful Luna, who he caught bathing in lunar streams. Definitely a match made in the heavens.
Wonderfully written,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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Another poem of the moon, which is according to your common theme. I love it!
We have a Master of Dreams uniting with the beautiful Luna, who he caught bathing in lunar streams. Definitely a match made in the heavens.
Wonderfully written,
Rhonda
Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Rhonda for this very kind review. I apologize for the lateness in replying. I do appreciate your consideration of my portfolio of work.
Comment from loismddavis
I don't think you bungled the form in this delightful little poem. I assume you are Luna in the work and I can identify with your escaping to the moon each night having lost a son. I hope you are blessed with pleasant dreams and would love to hear your mystical music--a really nice fantasy poem and perfect Villanelle as far as I can see. nice job
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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I don't think you bungled the form in this delightful little poem. I assume you are Luna in the work and I can identify with your escaping to the moon each night having lost a son. I hope you are blessed with pleasant dreams and would love to hear your mystical music--a really nice fantasy poem and perfect Villanelle as far as I can see. nice job
Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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Thanks for this kind review, Lois. I apologize for the tardiness of the reply.
As always, thank you for your attention to my writing.
To the Moon and back!
Comment from William Ross
very good nicely done on the villanelle, Luna and the dream master. good rhyme and with a good meter. Reads and flows well. Thanks for the share and have a great day
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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very good nicely done on the villanelle, Luna and the dream master. good rhyme and with a good meter. Reads and flows well. Thanks for the share and have a great day
Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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Thanks for this kind review, Bill. I apologize for the tardiness of the reply.
As always, thank you for your attention to my writing.
To the Moon and back!
Comment from Badger_29
I can not see any room for improvement. The repetition made me sceptical at first, but then got to be comforting. I too was away for a while with my meth addiction, I am fortunate to be alive. There is sadness, but also a healthy dose of laughter, fantasy, and a heightened expectation and curiosity about what is going to happen (be written,lived, loved) next. Thanks for sharing this wonderful prose, it took ME to the moon to dance with the fairies in the lunar glow. Cheers, and Happy Thanksgiving, Darren
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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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I can not see any room for improvement. The repetition made me sceptical at first, but then got to be comforting. I too was away for a while with my meth addiction, I am fortunate to be alive. There is sadness, but also a healthy dose of laughter, fantasy, and a heightened expectation and curiosity about what is going to happen (be written,lived, loved) next. Thanks for sharing this wonderful prose, it took ME to the moon to dance with the fairies in the lunar glow. Cheers, and Happy Thanksgiving, Darren
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Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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Thanks for this kind review, Badger. I apologize for the tardiness of the reply.
As always, thank you for your attention to my writing.
To the Moon and back!
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Blessings, Darren
Comment from barleygirl
This is my third poem of yours in a very short span of time, so I guess you must be feeling very prolific, or you're posting oldies but goodies! I normally don't like villanelles very much, as you know by now, I'm not crazy about robotic repetition in poetry. But in this case, you've managed to incorporate the necessary repetition with your poem NOT sounding repetitious at all. It doesn't sound like you're repeating lines to meet some poetic requirements (many villanelles do). It comes naturally, line by line, as your animated & dynamic message unfolds.
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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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This is my third poem of yours in a very short span of time, so I guess you must be feeling very prolific, or you're posting oldies but goodies! I normally don't like villanelles very much, as you know by now, I'm not crazy about robotic repetition in poetry. But in this case, you've managed to incorporate the necessary repetition with your poem NOT sounding repetitious at all. It doesn't sound like you're repeating lines to meet some poetic requirements (many villanelles do). It comes naturally, line by line, as your animated & dynamic message unfolds.
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Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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Thanks for this kind review, barleygirl. I enjoyed reading your kind and perceptive words.. I apologize for the tardiness of the reply.
As always, thank you for your attention to my writing.
To the Moon and back!
Comment from winnona
A beautifully written poem. The words flowed well line to line combining and forming their own unique rhythm. They continue to flow and combine forming the message of the poem for the reader. Welcome back.
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A beautifully written poem. The words flowed well line to line combining and forming their own unique rhythm. They continue to flow and combine forming the message of the poem for the reader. Welcome back.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
